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Review of chapter "Chapter 20" from AllenPitt
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Journal? For a second there I thought it might be the diary. She should be ok through this year (might get petrified I suppose)... 3rd year of course is the big one. Related to Sirius Black, I can see the Ministry being suspicious. On top of that, she was adopted for the positive publicity, with SB on the loose, Lucius might start thinking she was a liability.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [26 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "19. The Chamber of Secrets" from scutum
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A very interesting story, and Lexie's definitely a very interesting character. I am eagerly waiting to see the rest of this, just hoping that this( and the sequel) does get finished.
I've seen too many good stories ruined by the author disappearing half way through the story.

The story is great, keep it up.

And sorry for potentially unhelpful review,
I ain't good at this :(
Review By [scutum] • Date [22 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "19. The Chamber of Secrets" from AllenPitt
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Her time in the orphanage has probably made her less 'needy' about parental approval issues, so she's able to do things like that (in front of the Zabini's). Too bad, if Lucius were smarter he could have gotten a lot farther by being nice to her.
Year 3 should be really interesting, if it comes out that her father was a Black; people might think she was helping Sirius. Sirius meanwhile, a daughter of Regulus', weird thought.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [22 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "17. Dragons" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
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Ron doesn't understand not having family, even a bad family is better than none at all from Lexie's perspective.
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [16 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "17. Dragons" from AllenPitt
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Next year... she's going to know which family owns Dobby. I wonder if she'll keep quiet about that.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [16 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "16. The Quidditch Match" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
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Interesting chapter, Draco is getting pushed into his fathers shape, Lexie is getting pulled into Griffendor and they are getting pulled apart.
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [2 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Comfort from a friend" from AllenPitt
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I wonder if the Malfoys (parents) know about Regulus. ie that he was killed by Voldemort? Probably, it seems to have been common knowledge that RB turned against V. One wonders if they know or suspect that Sirius B. was innocent? Might not, the identity of the Order traitor was a closely held secret, I think.
Things will get awkward for her in 3rd year, of course. But at least Sirius is her uncle, not her father. Of course, Regulus was a Death Eater; that he 'reformed' might not be generally known, though. One wonders what's in the journal on that subject.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [24 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Comfort from a friend" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
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Interesting take on Regulus' personality. Moving him from the canon "last minute regrets" to more of a "stuck because of youthful foolishness" making him more like Giles and less like Ethan.

Good chapter!
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [24 Sep 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Christmas" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
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Oh, that's an interesting revaluation - her father is Regulus...that explains much.

Great chapters!
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [20 Sep 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Sorting" from dialNforNinja
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Though not too badly yet, Lexie comes off a bit Sue-y what with various characters feeling 'strangely compelled' about her. As long as you have a good yarn to spin around her and don't make her omnitalented except oh, she just can't sing (or something equally trivial) it shouldn't be a problem. With her background she actually has an excuse to have been exposed to many hobbies by foster families, enough to have things to talk about and compare wizard versions to anyway. I'll be curious to see what's next.
Comments from author:
Again thanks for the feedback, it's something to consider
Review By [dialNforNinja] • Date [21 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Family matters" from dialNforNinja
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If romance isn't going to play a major role for a while (PLEASE! They're only 11!) perhaps it would be better to list the theme as Family or Adventure, or simply Drama. Truth in summarizing, sort of thing.
Comments from author:
Romance won't play a part for another few years/books/chapters so I fixed it, thanks
Review By [dialNforNinja] • Date [21 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "First impressions Pt. 2" from dialNforNinja
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Draco when he's inside his comfort zone (not putting up a front for the public while shopping or for those kids from the rival House, that is) is a bit less of a wally, it seems. Good if he's to be a major character, canon Draco is a completely unsympathetic toerag of a douchecanoe with a gigawatt trolling motor to spew his arselick propwash.
Comments from author:
Wow that's a lot of adjectives lol Draco will be more of a main character than others and I was hoping to portray another side that he doesn't show without being too overly out of character
Review By [dialNforNinja] • Date [21 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A new home" from dialNforNinja
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This is a copy of ch2, not Lexie meeting the new 'rents.
Comments from author:
Oh geez, thank you I didn't even catch that. It's been fixed
Review By [dialNforNinja] • Date [21 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Sorting" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
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Very, very interesting.
I hold out hopes that having Lexie around will save both Draco and Narcissa from their fate in the books, and maybe accelerate Lucius' fate. I know quite a bit to ask of an 11 year old...but please I really don't like the elder Malfoy [grin], while I see both Draco and Narcissa as being dragged into their situation by Lucius and having to make do as best they can.

I like Lexie as a character, she seems to have depth, I look forward to you exploring this in future chapters.

Thanks for a great story, I will be tracking this one!
Comments from author:
Yay I'm glad my character is liked. I'm trying to create some sort of relationship and connection between Lexie and Draco, in hopes that as the story progresses, it can be a solid thing to help Draco. Thanks for tracking, reading and reviewing, feedback is always appreciated!
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [21 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Sorting" from AllenPitt
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Have you thought of having her dad be Peter Pettigrew, the noted hero of the fight against Voldemort? Winner of a medal? Murdered by that evil Sirius Black guy? She & HP might become great friends, then in her 3rd year for some weird reason he abruptly turns against her?
Comments from author:
An interesting thought but I actually have her parentage all planned out, a sad tale of forbidden love that ended in death. One parent would be obvious if you have paid close attention to the book and/or movie as she was mentioned in both in passing. Thank you for the review and I hope you keep reading it
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [21 Jul 12] • Not Rated
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