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Shego on the Halo

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Review of chapter "A raid, and learning about Freelancer" from Genuka
Review:
You need to label who's talking or it becomes virtually unreadable.
Comments from author:
I'll try to retcon the POV's in, but it'll be a little hard since it's not my natural writing style. If you know anyone who can help with that, please send them my way.
Review By [Genuka] • Date [22 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from Genuka
Review:
Nice but you need to work on some of your scene connection/separation skills
Comments from author:
Thanks for telling me! :)
Review By [Genuka] • Date [10 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from AkashaDrake
Review:
Shelley Go, not Allison Texas is Shego's real name.

Other than that, it's an interesting story.
Comments from author:
Technically, they never actually said the name recorded on her birth certificate. They mentioned Miss Go, and a few other things for aliases though.
And who said I couldn't reincarnate my characters? I'd like to know so that I can show them what you can do when you make characters have previous lives!
Also, thank you for taking the time to read and review my story.
Review By [AkashaDrake] • Date [6 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter the Seventh: Making Friends" from Genuka
Review:
I Like how you unilaterally enlisted Shego. The entire situation is just hilarious! Keep going lil' bro!
Comments from author:
Why thank you! I will try to keep it going!
Review By [Genuka] • Date [26 Jan 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Pain makes conversation a little difficult, right?" from Genuka
Review:
interesting but you'll need to expand on it a bit more, especially the transition and what not to mention how exactly is real or dream
Comments from author:
Okay.
Review By [Genuka] • Date [18 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Pain makes conversation a little difficult, right?" from djhardim
Review:
It would be funny if Master Chief was descended from Ron Stoppable.
Comments from author:
Yeah, it would be.
Review By [djhardim] • Date [16 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Almost time for breakfast" from Genuka
Review:
Nice li'l bro. This one's coming along nicely. The only thing that might cause you some trouble is that it can frustrate your readers to have such short chapters, otherwise this is better than some of the stuff I've read that people actually buy off the shelves. And you guys always wondered why I liked reading and scribling... *smirk* looks like you've picked up the bug too.
Comments from author:
I love the fact that you appreciate my stories. Hope you read my two new chapters of Girl Clad in Iron (and love them)!
Review By [Genuka] • Date [19 Aug 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Almost time for breakfast" from Bobboky
Review:
Cool
Comments from author:
*Genuine appreciation in voice* Thank you!
(*Robotic Voice* Standard disclaimer applies: I don't own things, and I want you to read, review, and preferably love on my other stories and actually let me know of such feelings. )
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [17 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from CrystalBlaze
Review:
Jacob Keyes, ladies and gentlemen.

Forget the comparisons.. there are none.
Comments from author:
P.S., I'm not using the Keyes family for this ship. Names are appreciated (as would be a slight explanation about your comment). And, out of curiosity, do you like my story?
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [15 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Hecatonchires
Review:
Drakken plant powers saved shego?
Comments from author:
No, those were just natural plants growing on-planet that were influenced by forces outside of normal control (usually). I'll explain in detail later.
Review By [Hecatonchires] • Date [13 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The structure" from BigHead
Review:
Interesting crossover.
Comments from author:
Why thank you. I love your stuff too. And better yet, there's plenty more to come! (Just hope I figure out where long is too long.)
Review By [BigHead] • Date [27 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The structure" from SamDragon
Review:
If Shego is there can Kim be far behind?
Comments from author:
We shall see.
Review By [SamDragon] • Date [27 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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