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Review of chapter "50" from SamDragon
Review:
Multiple battle's, nice.
Comments from author:
Sunnydale is a mess right now.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [SamDragon] • Date [15 Oct 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "50" from DarthTenebrus
Review:
Fun action, most def! And plenty of it, as you promised! Looks like Vi got in a sweet shot with that Vi-olet light of hers...

And I forgot, is Cordelia a Jedi or something? She "sensed" trouble somewhere and decided to cut class in order to find and eliminate said trouble. ..but how?
Comments from author:
Cordy's a watered-down She-Hulk. She just had an uneasy feeling.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [13 Oct 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "38" from (Past Donor)Charlotte
Review:
Have enjoyed this story so far but one thing confused me a bit regarding Groosalugg. He is half demon, half human so in the BtVS 'verse this would make it impossible to be turned. I imagine that it was more expedient to not include an explanation of how it could be done in order to move the plot along but it was a point that acted as a speed bump for my brain. Like one of those big assed bumps they install in front of schools. Still an interesting story that has my attention til the end though.
Comments from author:
I'm assumed the half-demon part is enough to turn someone.
Your mileage may vary.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [(Past Donor)Charlotte] • Date [26 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "49" from DarthTenebrus
Review:
Way to keep us in suspense...looks like the First is taking its opening shots...how will the Heroes answer?
Comments from author:
With lots of fun action!

Thanks for the review.
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [22 Sep 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "47" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapters. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [10 Jul 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "47" from DarthTenebrus
Review:
This is for the entire work so far. I have noticed your superb command of narrative and syntax to describe scenes that are more laden with emotion, as well as your grasp of perspective in detailing the action scenes. It is never easy to begin a crossover story such as this one, as managing the backstories of so many different characters can easily overwhelm an aspiring fiction writer, but you have managed it rather nicely. Most of the canon characters have essentially remained unchanged, the main plot of this work notwithstanding, and in the absence of the principal character of Buffy Summers, a fairly believable world has arisen. There are moments, however few, where it seems Faith has picked up her predecessor's habit of quipping immediately before a fight, but given the scope of this story thus far, they do not detract from Faith's personality, bringing to light instead how much she has matured over the several years since her arrival in the 'Dale.

This is a somewhat darker tale, given some of the descriptive violence and the more liberal use of profanity on the part of Faith and some others, but it's meant to be so. The one downside to the original show was that it relied too much in the beginning on comedy in between frightful moments, but as it was intended for a younger teenage audience it could not have been otherwise. Take away that and you have a much more serious and far more rewarding story experience.

On the timescale, you've managed to compress seven years and more of the Buffy series into just two and some change. The gaps in the timeline aren't always apparent, and usually have to be deduced from context relative to the main event of the chapter or the story arc. As the story approaches what appears to be the endgame, as the upcoming battle with the First Evil would indicate, the context becomes even less revealing, and one has to wonder just how long the story has gone after the final chapter so far has been read.

Still, overall I have rather enjoyed this little alternate take on the Slayer legend. I am tracking this story and await the remaining chapters with baited breath.
Comments from author:
Holy lengthy review Batman!

Yes, like you, I was not keen on the amount of comedy in the original show (both the amount and type, I prefer the Dean Winchester\Jack O'Neill sort of snark). Often I thought Whedon and the other writers threw in 'comedic lines' that didn't serve the story but rather showed how 'clever' they were. The descriptive violence is another conscious choice, namely because it's a strength of mine.

Probably says something about me...

As for how long the story has to go. We should be finished around chapter 60.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [5 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "47" from tosca
Review:
Awesome story - I'm thoroughly enjoying it. Thanks for writing and sharing. :-)
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review!
Review By [tosca] • Date [26 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "26" from Vld
Review:
Jonathan and Heidi? Isn't that, like, incest? I mean, Logan/Laura? Probably even worse since Laura is an actual CLONE of Logan.
In other words, nice one. Way to make people react.
Comments from author:
Nah. It would only be incest if they were the
actual characters, as it is, because they have
one another's abilities, they smell familiar.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Vld] • Date [6 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "3" from Vld
Review:
Don't worry about it. It's your story, not mine. I may not like how you portrayed Buffy, that doesn't mean i resent you for killing her. I tend to kill a LOT of characters in my stories, whether i like them or not. If it makes the story work, or doesn't hurt the story, then i have no problem with it.

No, i'm reviewing to command you on your choice of characters, actually. Well, those i remember anyway. Xander as Frank is a good idea. Especially where i'm concerned. I said Xander sees the world in black or white earlier, so having some Frank, who sees it more in shades of grey (a hell of a lot of shades of grey) is actually fitting. Faith as Spider-woman... well, it depends on WHICH Spider-Woman. I'm hoping jessica Drew.

Levinson as Wolvie? Fitting, if only for the size. Besides, having the "best at what he does" in his head can only help the kid's confidence.

Oz as DD... that's an interesting idea. I would have gone with Black Bolt because Oz is a man of few words, but in retrospect i guess that would have been cruel.

Giles as Xavier is very fitting. Especially since Charles, while not being a sorcerer himself, is not that ignorant about magic, if only the theories. Jenny as Sue Storm? Hopefully noone dressed as Reed, because that's bound to make a love triangle almost as bad as Reed/Sue/Namor.

Robin/T'challa... well, i'm mitigated. The Panther is one of my favorite characters in marvel (okay, make that my top ten) while Robin... is not. I don't hate him, mind you. I hate very few characters from Buffy *cough*Warren*cough*. But i'll guess i'll see how this works.

Cordelia as Jen Walters? *snickers* She's gonna mourn her old wardrobe a lot!

Wesley as Union Jack is bound to be fun, somehow.

Not gonna comment on Pike becoming Ghost Rider, because... i only saw the movie once, and i don't remember him (or it) that much.

Last i remember, Vi as Jubilee? *THUMBS UP*
Comments from author:
Shrug. I don't see the point about arguing over a ten year old
dead show. I think the days that either of us would have changed
position on the chars we loathe\love have long gone, so....

Oz as Black Bolt would have been interesting, never thought of that.

Giles as Xavier was chosen simply because both leaders of groups
of younger people.

Robin as T'Challa. Cause they're black and Cage was taken.
I considered Jim Rhodes but that would have required the
costume too.

Warren will be in this.

Wesley went as Union Jack because really old tea & crumpets
had to go as somebody British, and sadly Marvel's choices
are somewhat limited....

Pike was into bikes. Ghost Rider was a biker, that was
as far as my thinking went on that.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Vld] • Date [1 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Vld
Review:
Nice story so far. I don't mind Buffy dying, but i can see a couple points in Zeus's... description of her where i really don't agree.

“The Summers girl for one,” Zeus replied. “Yes!” he raised a hand at the others’ exclaimed protests. “I am not doubting her mettle in battle, but she has major character flaws. Her arrogance and inability to listen will lead her to discard the advice of those far more suited to lead. Her selfishness and inability to learn will repeatedly lead her into hideous decisions that more than often than not will make things worse rather than better. Lehane at least has the wisdom to learn from her mistakes and listen to those better suited to leadership. Without Summers’ influence and mistakes to isolate her, Lehane could become a very effective ‘Scooby’.”

Her... arrogance. Funny. I can think of at least two of the core Scoobies with a hell of a lot more arrogance. Like a rank amateur witch who thought she could bloody do anything she wanted. or a certain "White Knight" who... well, is pretty much a Paladin (in the sense that he only sees the world in black and white) as long as it suits him. I mean, obviously, calling for both Angel and Spike's heads because they're demons, but then getting on Buffy's case for actually considering killing Anya when she went back to demon. Or his "woe-is-me" attitude over the loss of his eyes in something he CHOSE to be a part of.

Let's compare shall we. Xander killed his best friend. How many friends did Buffy have to kill? That includes, among others, Angel and her former childhood friend (i don't remember his name). Xander lost Anya. Again, Angel. Add riley in the mix of lost boyfriends, even though he's alive... because he couldn't handle her being stronger, AND her being worried more about both her dying mother and her little sister. He lost an eye? Poor guy. Remind me again how many times she died? And where she ended the second time... and WHO ripped her from there? In the end, it all comes down to one thing. Xander? He had a choice. And still has the choice to leave at anytime. Buffy? That choice was taken from her the second she was activated.

Maybe you mean what she told giles, "you don't have anything to teach me anymore"? Let's see. The man who's SUPPOSED to be my Watcher and father-figure leaves town after my death. Leaving my TEENAGE sister in the hands of young adults. I'll let that one go because at the time, the young adults were supposed to be reasonable.
I come back from the dead, my Watcher comes back... only to leave again, leaving me in charge of 1) my "duty" over the Hellmouth (a duty that technically hasn't been MINE since my first death, might i add), 2) my magic-addicted friend, because let's face it, after having seen magic for so long, of course i'm more than able to handle a girl MY age who... knows a hell of a lot more about magic than
i do. 3) my little sister, a teenage kleptomaniac. And 4) feeding all this little bunch. Because let's face it. Between slaying, coping with being ripped out of heaven, and attempting to take care of Dawn, without the support of my dead mother's life insurance (which has been used to protect the goddamned town AND buy the ingredients to bring me back to life) i sooo have the time to work in a sub-standard fast food to try and pay the bill. And what did he tell her? "You need to stand for yourself", or something similar, when all she did was ask him for some financial help. Hey, Ripper, remind me again WHO made sure you had that money back? As well as your official position in the Council of Needless? And the guy comes back and tries to end her actual best support. Yes, i mean Spike.
Well, i guess i'd be "arrogant" as well in that case.

Her "inability to listen"... because any of the others actually KNOW when to listen? See above.

"those far more suited to lead". *snort* Remind me again who appointed her general in the first place? None of them even TRIED to take the lead. Not the one with the knowledge (Giles). NOT the one with the power (Willow). And especially NOT the one "supposed to see all" (Xander). THEY appointed her general to deal with something THEY were responsible for. Namely the First. And when the shit hit the fan, they all truned on her. Conveniently forgetting SHE had lost a hell of a lot more than all of them COMBINED.

Her "selfishness"... well, i don't need to repeat most of my arguments, so...
Inability to learn. Learn what? To read languages? Any demon's weakness? That's the Watcher's job. Now, if all she did was training and slaying, then okay, she could focus on that some. Look how much good that did Kendra, though.

"Without Summers’ influence and mistakes to isolate her, Lehane could become a very effective ‘Scooby’.” Er... where should i start. Far as i remember, Buffy was the first one to try and welcome her. Yet Faith did everything she could to NOT be accepted. One-night stand with Xander, then throwing him out. Not exactly with the niceties with Willow. Giles's attempts... countered by Wesley, so for once not her fault. Whenever was it Buffy's? Unless you mean her telltaling on Faith's accidentally killing Finch.


I do admit Buffy has her faults. She's bossy, she's arrogant, she hasn't much of an attention pan, and she likes to have fun rather than focus on something that ISN't her duty, or can be done by people more suited for it than her.
on the other hand, she ISN'T the worse of them all, like you seem to point at.
Comments from author:
Shrug. Your prerogative to be wrong.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Vld] • Date [1 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "45" from Ghostrider
Review:
I wonder why Austria was the only place attacked. Doesn't feel right, not with the FE having so many minions. I also had to re-read those sections, wondering when the girls were introduced. That threw me a little, when the Potential defending the kitchen was named, since I didn't recall seeing her name. Apart from that little oversight, this chapter was rather good. I do like the whole vibe between Wes and his dad. It feels more like Dad is trying too hard to be a good father and that is leading him to do the wrong things.
Comments from author:
Nah, Wes' dad isn't trying at all. He's a superior ass.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Ghostrider] • Date [9 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "45" from Eureka
Review:
I do believe that Jonathan may just be nursing a bruise or worse when Wes gets done with him for saying that in front of his asshole daddy.
Comments from author:
Natural justice suggests he should.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Eureka] • Date [3 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "42" from SamDragon
Review:
Saved money on that international call with no one to answer.
Comments from author:
Wow, you really are a glass half-ful sorta fella aren't you???? :D

Thanks for the review.
Review By [SamDragon] • Date [19 Sep 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "42" from banditdoz
Review:
Wait what just happened with Travers??? not that he doesn't deserve it ;D

Edit: Hahaha ok great chapter btw I must be a bit slow today :D
Comments from author:
A bomb made the nasty man go boom! :D

Thanks for the review.
Review By [banditdoz] • Date [18 Sep 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "42" from removedauthor
Review:
Interesting chapter I look forward to the next one.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review.
Review By [removedauthor] • Date [16 Sep 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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