Ha ha....very creative...I like how you think, just one question though, ...however will I put the idea for a resistance group into my sequel "Balance of Powers"? Not even halfway through my second book yet and got writer's block, could you read my.series "The Tragedy of Dawn Summers" and see where I can take it from there?

I would greatly appreciate it.

Thanks

DT

Very dark and full of despair and struggle, layered over a faint glimmer of hope...I love darkfics myself, actually writing a series with Willow and Dawn turned evil. And no they're not vamps, ...they're Sith Lords ...

Sith Lords? Poor Ripper would be over-matched!

Thanks for the review.

Interesting. Like how you're taking things in new directions.

Thought the heal/Faith turn was a little quick. But other than that, loved everything. (a heal/Faith turn is when an author has Faith suddenly turn from her wanton ways and suddenly become monogamous and is healed from all the abuse she previously suffered)

Opinions may vary but I think a heal\Faith turn as you call it, is only fast when Faith's problems are instantly solved by said relationship (ie, she doesn't suffer from self-esteem and intimacy issues amongst other problems). For example, she might think she's not good enough or the relationship won't last beyond her looks begining to fade or not being able to trust her partner etc.

Anyway, thanks for your input and your review. :D

Yano, I would probably enjoy your stories if you didn't kill the interesting characters and feature the annoying ones.

Yano, I would probably enjoy your reviews more if you didn't favour the annoying characters and ignore the interesting characters.

I would not be this version of Faith's friend, unless it was to slap her and say "down, girl!"

She's certainly unrestrained.

Interesting chapter. Who does the hacking now that Willow is gone?

I always assumed Jonathan was pretty much every inch the computer nerd Willow was.

A very good story. I like the changes in characters you've weaved into your story. This alternate 'verse is fun.

I'm kinda cheating cause I read this on fanfiction some time ago, and this is just my personal taste on your writing style, but if you're re-writing/cleaning-up your chapters when posting here on tthfanfic...

When you're describing a fight scene in detail, you do not have to include every "grunt", "groan", "scream" quoted word at the beginning of the sentences. It's awkward to read and (I think) actually takes away from the fight scene. You don't have to stop using them to improve the readability...just include those quoted words more sparingly.


For example, in lines like these you don't have to include the "Aaaah" and "Owwww". Just start them with "A groan escaped Faith...." and "Faith grunted when...." respectively.

"Aaaah," a groan escaped Faith as she saw Tara raise a hand and forced herself to roll not away but towards the Witch, the blast of energy slicing through the air above her....

"Owwww!" Faith grunted when the demon grabbed her by her flowing mane, any joke about only chicks pulling hair was forgotten when the crazy bitch yanked her upright and drove her fist into Faith's throat.

Your input is so noted, but as always it's a case of different tastes, I think it adds intensity to fight scenes to illustrate the effects attacks have. But each to their own. :D

Interesting and dark complications.

Oh the story is bleak to say the least.

Usually in EvilScooby stories, I'm rooting for the Scoobies, but I feel enough for Faith and Wes so far that I hope they get a happy ending as well.

You'll find not all the Scoobies are evil or dead. :D

Not sure if you mean this to be Wesley and Faith, but an interesting turn of events.

Yes, it's Wes and Faith, Wes struggling to be a man, and Faith struggling to live up to her responsibilities.