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Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen" from (Past Donor)FireDragon
Review:
LOL there was so much I liked about this chapter. Especially it being here to read! awesome, and funny too. I loved Jarvis asking if Tony had advanced beyond picture books. there were a few other things that gave me a good laugh too. I love that Buffy and Tony bonded a little over the motorcycle, but that she was still pulling away. So excited the next chapter is almost done. : ) YES! though I am wondering why Fitz is going to have a nerdgasim LOL looking forward to more Loving it please continue.
Review By [(Past Donor)FireDragon] • Date [21 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen" from earelen
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I love how Buffy has become so protective of SI's employees. I can't wait to see more Buffy & Tony banter, especially when he stops being an asshole!! Looking forward to the next chapter!
Review By [earelen] • Date [21 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen" from Selonianth
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This is good... but funnily enough unless shit gets even worse for SI than it does in canon her buying up the stock is just going to do one thing... make her even more blindingly rich when Tony says three words.
Review By [Selonianth] • Date [21 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen" from eriktheviking
Review:
So easy to see this Tony trying to swallow his foot. Well done.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [21 Sep 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen" from norgco
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Brilliant!

I like the Father/Daughter bonding over engineering scene, and Pepper not getting that this IS a reconciliation scene, at least as far as Tony is concerned. It's a guy thing to get closer to someone over actions taken together rather than talking about feelings. Buffy is enough his daughter - she has flourished in his home/workshop environment notice - to at least be able to be civil while discussing workshop drawings.

Pepper dong the 'you have to talk about your feelings' is very feminine of her and not likely to work, at least until Tony and Buffy already have a working relationship. Some joint projects, or at least firing off ideas at each other concerning their individual projects is about the best bonding experience they are likely to have for a while.

Yes Buffy doesn't want much to do with Tony right now, and she is not going to be talking honestly about her feelings to him until AFTER she saves his life. I am thinking that the Kevlar riding gear she ordered materials for a few chapters back might be a life saver in this regard, not just in avoiding road rash. Sniper on rooftop 80 metres away shoots Buffy off her bike, Buffy throws a rock and takes his head off, Tony has interesting questions, SHIELD steps in...

The stock buying may or may not give Buffy a serious chunk of SI, but it might easily trigger Stane's anger and get him to hire a sniper to eliminate her. See previous paragraph for details.

QUESTION: What about Buffy making a contribution to keeping Stark Industries going by starting a motorcycle division? She has her own designs, her father to help, it would be a potentially profitable Father/Daughter bonding exercise. The three hundred million to buy shares with is one thing, but she can get more with daddy dearest's permission, and what would be more Stark than starting your own business competing head to head with world class competiton before you are old enough to buy a drink?
Review By [norgco] • Date [21 Sep 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen" from Gideon
Review:
Great to see another update so soon. I'm glad Buffy didn't run too far away and Tony was able to find her. I'm also glad the fear of Pepper was enough to goad him into actually talking to her. I think the snarky approach was actually what Buffy needed. She wouldn't cope too well with pity in her present state of mind. I wonder how long it will be before Tony asks Jarvis for some info on Buffy and he actually refuses? Won't Tony be surprised that Buffy has gained the loyalty of his AI? And now that Tony knows Buffy likes her motorbikes he knows what to build the secret "keep daughter safe" model of suit into. He can just build an identical motorbike and insert all the stark tech necessary to protect Buffy if something happens. Won't he be surprised by her reaction when something does?
I did notice a couple of errors in this chapter so I hope you do get someone to read it over, such a great story deserves perfect grammar and no mistakes :)
Review By [Gideon] • Date [21 Sep 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen" from Starfox
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Great Chapter! I loved the interaction, snarky on the surface, hurt under it, and the slow way they seem to be feeling their way to or around each other. And Buffy taking responsibility for 2 million people... priceless. Very good dialogue, and plot.
Review By [Starfox] • Date [21 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen" from Serenityrose
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Love the story. I like the interaction between Buffy and Tony can't wait to see where this is headed. I hope to see a new chapter soon. thanks
Review By [Serenityrose] • Date [21 Sep 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen" from Duquette
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And yet again you provide ample evidence for why this is one of my top five favorite pieces of fanfiction. I loved the entire chapter, but the part where you had Buffy start buying up SI stock was amazing, I cant wait to see how that butterflies.
Review By [Duquette] • Date [21 Sep 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen" from Xayian
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Bravo, m'dear! And ambitious too. Winter Soldier you say? I am so in with you for the long haul :-)
Review By [Xayian] • Date [21 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen" from Vashti
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Finally caught myself up. Great additions to the story. The father/daughter meet-and-great was as rocky add I could hope. One small nitpick, you often forget to capitalize the first word of the next sentence following a line of dialogue. Either that or you're forgetting the comma in the dialogue at the end indicating that it belongs to the larger sentence, but it doesn't usually seen to be that way.

I love how Buffy and Tony's first bonding moment is trying to keep Pepper from being mad. And will we get to see any of Buffy's training?
Review By [Vashti] • Date [21 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
Review:
Ambitious!!! I love that in a writer! I hope you go far on this project! Great work on the foundations!
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [21 Sep 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen" from link
Review:
Love the story and I really enjoy Jarvis here. I'm excited beyond words for more. Keep up the good work.
Review By [link] • Date [20 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen" from CobaltGryphon
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Absolutely love your characters and story; you've got a really good grasp of the style as well :-)
Review By [CobaltGryphon] • Date [20 Sep 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen" from nightshift
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I can see how both Tony and Buffy are going to have difficulties connecting. He's mister 'skim the surface' and she's miz 'put on a mask and pretend'--neither being conducive to actual meaningful interactions. Pepper's got her work cut out for her. I wonder how Tony's going to interpret Buffy buying up stock--if he's going to see it as a coup attempt or if he's going to see the reason for what she's doing?
Review By [nightshift] • Date [20 Sep 14] • Not Rated
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