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Review of chapter "Less Than Grateful" from draconis
Review:
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Quite enjoying the multiple crossovers. I can see this is building up to quite an event when the final battle takes place.

The fight scenes seem a bit formulaic so far, but I think the variety will improve as the story progresses. The relationships seem to be developing as well. I find the idea of Tara gaining self-confidence very appealing.

I do have a comment re the excommunication of Padre Richeur. I think it more likely the Church wouldn't have excommunicated him (Church Dogma would also require much worse charges for excommunication). The Church is much more politically intelligent than that and is much more careful with potential troublemakers. If the Church didn't execute him, then he would have been assigned to a mission in some third-world country where they could keep an eye on him, and bury him with assignments, reporting requirements, and so on. That way he'd also still be serving the Church, but in an out-of-the-way highly isolated place with slow communications where he could do much less harm. Some village deep in the Amazon jungle for example. Such an assignment also lets the Church keep a very close eye on him. Being excommunicated...the Church loses control and oversight and is much less likely to be able to prevent him causing further trouble for the Church.
Comments from author:
For the finale, yeah I have a location, an army, a foe, and an
enemy. Just gotta work out the battle now....

Yeah, Tara needed her time to shine. The trouble with the show
was that the spotlight was never really on her (lots of characters
post Season 3 never got it), so she never had chance to develop.

But now she's Doc Strange's apprentice.

As for the Padre. I'm aware of my fudging as regards excommunication,
but following closer to church dogma didn't really serve the story and
what I wanted to do with the character, so....

Thanks for the review.
Review By [draconis] • Date [21 Mar 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "0.2" from IUseAFakeName
Review:
Not knowing anything about Freelance Restorations, I don't know if you're just being faithful to the source material, but you should be aware that in modern usage, the term 'Chinaman' is at best pejorative, and at worst a full out racial slur.

Likewise, the term 'oriental' (much like the term occidental), are meant to describe objects, not people. It's use as descriptive of a person is seen as dehumanizing, and thus racist.

Aside from this (unintentional, I hope) bit of racism, I did enjoy this story arc. The only complaint I have is that you spend so much time and effort building up the villian, only for him to be taken down rather quickly.
Comments from author:
Black Jack Tarr is an old-fashioned racist, so yeah, he would talk like that.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [IUseAFakeName] • Date [21 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Mithras Chronicles Chapter 1" from Difdi
Review:
> “Nerve gas.”

One of the things that makes modern nerve gases so deadly is they are absorbed through the skin, not just when inhaled. While a vampire almost certainly wouldn't get killed by such a gas, the fact that they can get drunk shows they're not completely immune to toxins. Depending on the gas, this should result in anything from a lack of coordination to unconsciousness -- not a total lack of effect.
Comments from author:
Interesting consideration.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Difdi] • Date [19 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "0.2" from banditdoz
Review:
Absolutely fantastic - Thanks for writing
I'm glad that Xan and Faith are looking good but how is everything between Tara and Ken? no fights no romantic dinners? I'd love to see a little interlude with them being the subject :D
Comments from author:
Interesting idea. Tara
gets a great moment in
the finale at least.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [banditdoz] • Date [8 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "0.2" from wonderbee
Review:
Excellent section, e en as if looks like the wolf ram are getting things to build to a crescendo there, here's hoping that the Mitras will be able to pull another win out of their hats.
Comments from author:
Kiri Dim was a long-term investment from W&H,
they took a hit losing her.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [wonderbee] • Date [5 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Demons of the Past" from agnar
Review:
And this is where I finally lose my patience with your fic. It had potential but you just never managed to impress me with your xander and crew actually seeming to improve. Every time it seemed like they'd actually maybe start getting better, you'd have another fight and manage to make Xander regress in fighting ability.

He hasn't had his skills for a few weeks, he's worked on his skills for FIVE YEARS. He COMPLETED his training recently, yes. But you didn't describe his training as some instant download like the Matrix, you described it as him getting trained in basically time compression.

And yet every fucking half assed minion gets to punch Xander around like a chump. And Xander and crew piss their pants over Kakistos the guy without opposable thumbs who has ALREADY been killed once. And that was without guns that can kill vampires.

And for fucks sake, what the hell kind of shotgun is Xander using that it's empty after 4 shots? And why is Xander the only one with guns? He shot the 2 guards, 1 shell each, the 2 vamps just inside, 1 shot each, then puts away the EMPTY gun.

Did the dumbass forget to reload it after its last use or something? Then you have Tara and Faith using crossbows? What happened to all those guns and ammo he got, did he give it all away?

Each of them with guns, shooting the fucking vamps, game over before Kakistos rises. And 40 miles travel took them 90 minutes?

Sorry but you try too hard to make your heroes struggle, but in doing so you just make them look weak or stupid, if not both.
Comments from author:
Was going to classify your review as "constructive honest criticism", but after going through the reviews you've left other fics, I've come to the conclusion you're one of those saddos who gets off flaming and tearing people's stories apart, while not having the stones to publish anything yourself. So I guess I've been Barnetted.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [agnar] • Date [4 Mar 14] • Rating [2 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Down Mexico Way" from agnar
Review:
It's getting old seeing your Xander with 5 years training in tactics and strategy and leadership constantly acting like a dumbass high school grad with no training. He's not fucking possessed by Mithras either, you've NEVER shown him being possessed by Mithras.

You showed Mithras train Xander mystically/mentally for five years so he could act in his stead. So what is this shit about Mithras being out right now, so Xander is clueless about planning?

I hope you actually got on the ball about this later in the fic and decided if Mithras is possessing Xander so he won't be such a useless moron, or if Xander got TRAINED by Mithras so Xander won't be a useless moron.

Because honestly, it seems like every step forward Xander takes, you have him jump back 5 steps.
Review By [agnar] • Date [4 Mar 14] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from agnar
Review:
Hopefully Xander will actually get a boost above human peak, because right now his 'power up' is incredibly tame, not 'lead a vast army to save the world' level really, especially since despite 5 years of training Xander is still lacking any new self-confidence. It's more like he got an instant download so his personality is exactly the same, rather than spending 5 years in compressed time being trained, which would alter his personality at least some.

And not so impressed by the super bank. The instant the account goes active everybody in the universe knows its active and WHO the account holder is. For fucks sake, the swiss and cayman banks are more secure info wise than that. I'd expect far more from this 'super bank' than that sort of shoddy ass security.
Review By [agnar] • Date [4 Mar 14] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "0.2" from wonderbee
Review:
Nice to see the loonies of the Doc at the very end, and shocking to see what happened with Xander there, while looking forward to the next big bad they'll have to get down and dirty with.
Review By [wonderbee] • Date [28 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "0.2" from DofEire
Review:
Snerk. "Doctor Ex Machina", eh? :D
Comments from author:
Exactly why he isn't over-used! :D

Only in because plenty of my Brit readers requested him.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [DofEire] • Date [28 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "0.3" from TheFoxBoss
Review:
Are we going to meet any mutant-slayers?
Comments from author:
Interesting thought, but no.

Thanks for the review!
Review By [TheFoxBoss] • Date [19 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "0.2" from (Recent Donor)faithfan
Review:
I've got questions.

“When did she go missing?” demanded the group’s oldest member, the weathered-looking Kostmayer.

“Six weeks ago,” Parrish sighed, sudden weariness and worry weighing him down.

Direct Question, Direct Answer. This reads as she been 6 weeks missing.

Next Paragraph, She's only left town 3 weeks ago, and has been out of contact only 2 weeks.

“Six weeks ago Jessica approached me with a quite frankly absurd tale of an island off the south-east coast of Africa, just about opposite the Angolan-Namibian border ruled by a mystery despot who’d spent much of the last century experimenting on people. She wanted me to finance an investigation. I did, she left three weeks ago with strict instructions to contact us on a daily basis which she has failed to do.”

”When was the last contact?” queried Kostmayer.

“Two weeks ago.” Parrish paused momentarily before continuing. “Look, her safety is my responsibility as her employer. When she didn’t return, I was obligated to do all I could to get her back.”


After Xan rescues the Mercs, the fate of the reported is left a mystery.
Was she rescued?
Comments from author:
The last contact means phone calls, emails, she hasn't
actually been seen for 5 - 6 weeks. I hope that clears
that up. :D

The reporter's dead. Probably dissected in an experiment.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [(Recent Donor)faithfan] • Date [18 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "0.2" from banditdoz
Review:
Real life is seriously getting in the way of my fun time.
You always have me on the edge of my seat and I love reading about this epic adventure
Thanks so much for the escape :D
Comments from author:
And thanks for the review!
Review By [banditdoz] • Date [17 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Island Horror" from demonichellfire
Review:
Any plans to include Jason
Comments from author:
Nope.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [demonichellfire] • Date [14 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Mithras Chronicles Chapter 1" from demonichellfire
Review:
Any plans for Ash Williams. Evil Dead.
Comments from author:
Doubtful. I'm a fan of Bruce Campbell but not Sam Rami.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [demonichellfire] • Date [13 Feb 14] • Not Rated
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