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Review of chapter "Never Again" from sdavidm
Review:
They make quite a mess in their car chases! Innocent bystanders surely died in this chapter. Can imagine governments being too pleased at so many innocents being in danger, regardless of how important the Mithras mission is.
Comments from author:
It certainly can be a problem.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [sdavidm] • Date [15 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Blitz In Time" from sdavidm
Review:
Enjoyable story so far. I think Faith and Xander' fighting abilities vary a bit too much. Faith even had trouble with a human opponent in one chapter, a mere henchman, which doesn't jive with her badass rep. Tara's abilities seem a little underused too, and the group relies on Xander's always pocket too much. They've often been caught without even a knife on them, with Xander incapacitated. Even worse, they didn't learn from the first three times it happened. Not having a knife is not Faith's style.

Also, you overestimate how quiet silencers are. Check out a YouTube video on silenced firearms. They're still quite loud!

I also think that Xander, or one of his lieutenants, would have suggested acceptable rules of engagement. Wars are fought within ethical rules, like the Geneva convention, to mitigate the damage to innocents bystanders. No doubt each hunter group had their own rules, but if operating under a single banner, like the Brotherhood, they should follow one code.

As a final note, I think it's a little sad that you've cut out the rest of the Scoobies so completely. Their dynamic is part of what BTVS so enjoyable, though I get you're trying to start a whole new group with a different dynamic.

Looking forward to reading the rest!
Comments from author:
"I also think that Xander, or one of his lieutenants, would have suggested acceptable rules of engagement. Wars are fought within ethical rules, like the Geneva convention, to mitigate the damage to innocents bystanders. No doubt each hunter group had their own rules, but if operating under a single banner, like the Brotherhood, they should follow one code."

Xander did give out operating protocols to each unit upon formation. These include such things as not charging, protecting everybody regardless of colour, race, age, income group etc., what activities are within their responsibility, and what aren't etc.

"As a final note, I think it's a little sad that you've cut out the rest of the Scoobies so completely. Their dynamic is part of what BTVS so enjoyable, though I get you're trying to start a whole new group with a different dynamic."

I loathe Buffy for many reasons. But rather than bash, I just cut her out of my stories. Willow's first loyalty is always to Buffy, so she goes with Buffy. Giles on the other hand is one of the great tragedies of this story, by mistakenly acting the way he did when Faith was captured by the Council, and misinterpreting Giles' motives, he cut a father figure out of his life. But that's Xander, hot-tempered.

Looking forward to reading the rest!

Thanks for the review.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [sdavidm] • Date [12 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Fidei Defensor Fortellings" from Eureka
Review:
Any chance Tara could magic them back? And WHY DIDN'T he automatically put them in the pocket like he does everything else?
Comments from author:
Some have called it weaksauce (shrug). However my logic
is he simply was in too much of a hurry, he did a very human
thing.

He forgot.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Eureka] • Date [4 Sep 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "2" from sdavidm
Review:
Nice progress so far. The terminator seems a little over powered though. A terminator can't be much stronger than a demon, particularly not the overlord that Faith already defeated (and where is that amulet?). I'm not sure retaking skynet will really change anything either. Inventions are often created by multiple people simultaneously.
Comments from author:
I'm not convinced the Terminator was over-powered, look at all the abuse it took to kill the first one in the first film!

She wears the amulet all the time, but while it improves your reflexes etc., it doesn't make your attributes multiply by 3 or 4 fold.

As for Skynet, maybe you're correct, or maybe it was an exact flaw in the code creating the AI that made the machines first sentient and then rebel. :D

Anyway, thanks for the thoughtful review.
Review By [sdavidm] • Date [3 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Fidei Defensor Fortellings" from Difdi
Review:
Plot armor? Really?

Xander keeps everything in the Pocket, even his wallet. Why would he not put vitally important documents there?
Review By [Difdi] • Date [23 Aug 14] • Rating [2 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Triple Trouble" from raxadian
Review:
Uh, the Hyena spirit?
Review By [raxadian] • Date [1 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Less Than Grateful" from DieselDriver
Review:
What a nutcase...
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [2 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "0.2" from demonichellfire
Review:
Why no Harmonica from "Once upon time in the West"?
Comments from author:
Because I had enough chars, my major regret was I didn't
get a Gary Cooper, a James Stewart, or a Clint Eastwood in,
just a John Wayne.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [demonichellfire] • Date [24 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Truth" from DieselDriver
Review:
"Travers smiled. But soon her and Mithras would be knelt at his feet, grovelling for mercy. Soon."

As soon as I read this line of Travers' I couldn't help but say to myself "hun uh! Ain't gonna happen".

Yeah, this is the Travers I've come to know and hate. He makes a good "hatee" because he's such a "hater".
Comments from author:
And he's such a snob.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [24 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DieselDriver
Review:
Cancer man can't develop it fast enough to suit me. It amazes me but there really are people that stupid. They want to control others and they can't even control themselves.
Comments from author:
Get your own organisation in order before you try and take over others...
Basic really.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [23 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Mithras Chronicles Chapter 1" from DieselDriver
Review:
Travers is a very bad man. There's a pit of fire somewhere, where you cannot die (again) prepared special just for him.
Comments from author:
Yes he is.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [22 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "LA Style" from raxadian
Review:
The non-aggression spell doesn't work on humans, I guess the slayer is non human enough for it to work on her?
Comments from author:
Well that's where her power comes from.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [21 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Mithras Chronicles Chapter 1" from raxadian
Review:
Oh, they are gonna need to keep on moving and using fake names,
Comments from author:
Gotta keep out of the way of their enemies.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [21 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "0.3" from demonichellfire
Review:
Just wondering about Faith and Xander. Do they have any memories of Dawn?

Also the "Boy" line classic horror good use of it.
Comments from author:
Nope, they weren't in Sunnydale at the time,
so the monks didn't require the spell to
affect them.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [demonichellfire] • Date [7 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "0.3" from wonderbee
Review:
Good to see faith saved from Baba Yaga and her plots, but will have to wonder if that old witch will start to obsess over catching faith, or if she might go after another convenient slayer, one that doesn't have Mithras watching their back. With that, and hopefully new allies that can help Mitras out in the Middle East, maybe some of the weight will be off Xander's shoulders.
Comments from author:
The Brotherhood continues to expand its operations
& gain more allies.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [wonderbee] • Date [7 Jun 14] • Not Rated
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