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Review of chapter "'The Girl Nobody Wanted'" from Glumski
Review:
Oh, yessss. This is good, no, great! I absolutely love the idea and what you made out of it. The characterization of Dawn and very thorough though I myself expected her to be different. It's refreshing to see her this way! I'm curious how the "true Dawn/SG:1 fic" will be and how you finish the actual double-parter. I hope you'll post another chapter soon!
Review By [Glumski] • Date [20 Aug 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'The Girl Nobody Wanted'" from SilverWave
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Great story.

Thanks.

*Recommended*
Review By [SilverWave] • Date [19 Apr 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'Falling off the Edge of the World'" from Harry
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You are going to have to deal with SGC Dawn. Tell them EVERYTHING! Maybe they can help you out before the NID gets you.
Review By [Harry] • Date [31 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'Sort of like Diagon Alley?'" from Harry
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I can SEE why you called this chapter 'Sort of like Diagon Alley?'! With all the shopping/shoplifting that Dawn did with her Key powers to get clothing to stay warm and not be spotted by SGC (although she DID get spotted by the Local Police because of IR motion sensors) she should be set till morning.
Review By [Harry] • Date [31 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'Quick like a bunny'" from Harry
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So, Dawn has Line of Sight teleportation abilities eh? If and when she joins up with SGC, she will be VERY helpful on missions. If a team is captured, Dawn can teleport to the Gate, dial back to Earth, and GET HELP!
Review By [Harry] • Date [31 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'Unlocking a different kind of Door'" from Harry
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Dawn's Key powers work with the Stargate? And she can now teleport over short distances? I think that if and when things calm down, SGC is going to want to have a LONG talk with Dawn and figure out how they can not only help her improve on her powers, but put them to use in exploration as well!
Review By [Harry] • Date [31 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'The Girl Nobody Wanted'" from arturusoriginal
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Wow....just wow.
A great read and one that has left me hungering for the next installments. When you get right down to it that is exactly what I want from any story.
Review By [arturusoriginal] • Date [18 Jan 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'The Girl Nobody Wanted'" from LunasMeow
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Thank you! This is exactly what we need to make your Dawn real. Before this chapter, (and the few I expect to come after this) your Dawn was as real to me as the muscled, tattooed, confident and cocky Harry Potter who changes his whole persoality in one day from one revelation. It was poor work, and you usually do better. Now if only we'd had this sooner... Although it still works the way you did it. All we need now are more chapters.
Review By [LunasMeow] • Date [16 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'The Girl Nobody Wanted'" from draconis
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Nice bit of information in the flashback. It helps with understanding D's current issues and attitudes.

Also, you might let D know that a small bit of superglue can be REALLY helpfull with torn nails, split ends on fingers, paper cuts, etc. They even sell it at the pharmacy such that's it's supposedly purified and doesn't have any harmful chemical residues that one might find in "non-medical" industrial superglue. Of course, it has to be used carefully or one gets one's fingers or other body parts stuck together...until acetone dissolves the bond.
Review By [draconis] • Date [8 Aug 13] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'The Girl Nobody Wanted'" from (Recent Donor)SamuraiCatFan
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Really great story. Love the background on how things went downhil for Dawn after Buffy's death. I have no doubt that Giles would have killed Dawn without hesitation had he not been "satisfied" with the test results.

Looking forward to more.
Review By [(Recent Donor)SamuraiCatFan] • Date [1 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'Falling off the Edge of the World'" from pagefault
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I've been waiting for an update. As has many I imagine.
This story is engaging. I can measure this by the extent to which I continue the story in my head with imagined developments.
The more I do this the more engaging the story is. With this fic I do it more than most. Dawn is simultaneously funny and vulnerable.
Comments from author:
I'm working on a story for Amazon this week, but I've made a good start on the next chapter of Dawn's story, so you should be seeing it before the end of August.
I'm glad this tale has you daydreaming--believe me, I spend waaaaaay too much time daydreaming about this stuff too (but then I have to actually decide which one to write down... and then write it down).
I like Dawn; she's cute and sexy and vulnerable and sweet... with a bit of bad girl thrown in for good measure (but not as much as she likes to think).
Review By [pagefault] • Date [31 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'The Girl Nobody Wanted'" from (Current Donor)richierich
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Great chapter. What a neat way to explain why Dawn is the way she is. And pretty believable too. And Willow getting rid of Spike and trying to control Dawn is more than enough reason for Dawn to believe that she would be safer somewhere else. I especially liked that part with Giles. I could imagine him actually killing Dawn right there in cold blood to eliminate any small chance of the world ending. He wouldn't have liked it but he'd have done it, God bless him. I didn't see Faith showing up in your story for some reason. But once I thought about it, it made perfect sense. I didn't feel the need to know Dawn's back story to accept her character as she is now, but it is appreciated. Thanks so much for the update.
Review By [(Current Donor)richierich] • Date [27 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'The Girl Nobody Wanted'" from (Current Donor)Shieldage
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White puffballs? If not for the timeframe I'd say they were little puffs of belief floating through the Stargate to the Ori...

Nice downward spiral for Dawn's life. Would like to think that they'd treat her better, but it's definitely well written ;)

Great touch having her powers be the main divergence point. Excellent cover for Spike's entrance to the house.
Comments from author:
Those white puffball things are just seeds from the milkweed plant--they grow over most of the continental US, but like Dawn says, either they didn't grow in her version of California, or else she somehow never noticed them.

::Would like to think that they'd treat her better, but it's definitely well written::

Thanks!
It's a little bit of a stretch, maybe, but I can absolutely see them being a little cold towards her in the aftermath of all that. They all know it's not her fault... but they all also know it would never have happened if she hadn't been mystically Fed-Ex'd to them either, so....
Review By [(Current Donor)Shieldage] • Date [23 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'The Girl Nobody Wanted'" from HMaxMarius
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Really really good...

My only question is, How the frilly heck did Spike get in the house with Dawn? I mean he's a vampire, so someone who lived there would have to be the one to invite him in... Dawn couldn't... right? ;)

Okay... I suspended disbelief because the interaction was so perfect and necessary for the characters... =D

-hmm

edit:

“I still can’t believe you’re helping me do this.”

"Actually pet, I'm not."

"Huh?" Dawn spun around to see Spike pushing against the wards baring the door she had opened. "Oh."

Concentrating for a moment she flicked her fingers at the invisible barrier causing it to collapse. Dawn then looked around the huge living room, full of designer furniture, designer lamps and expensive knick-knacks, taking it all in as best she could while peering through darkness relieved only by the beam of a small flashlight.



--- one possible means =D (you'd have to drop him surprising her)
Comments from author:
Well, shit.
I was really, really hoping no one would catch that.

Yes, that's a mistake, which I didn't notice until my friend Diana pointed it out to me about an hour after I posted it.
And this is why you need a pre-reader, folks; for those times when you're so caught up in writing all the nifty Spike-Dawn interaction that you fail to remember one of the more important rules of the universe.
Sigh.
I might go back and change it, but I don't yet see a non-cheesy way to do it. I could say that Dawn's power lets her 'unlock' a house that is barred to a vampire, and let him in, even though she doesn't own or live in the house. That's certainly no more of a stretch than saying she can 'unlock' an ATM and make it spew money... but I don't know. It would make the scene feel clunky, I think, to tack that on there, but I might have to.
Suggestions? Thoughts?

EDIT: O_O
Well that is flat out brilliant. Elegant, effective, and sodding brilliant.
Many thanks!
Review By [HMaxMarius] • Date [23 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'The Girl Nobody Wanted'" from Morgomir
Review:
Happy to see another great update. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Glad I was able to spread some happiness :-)
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [23 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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