Ok this story got potential and I like it.
I thought it was Buffy centered but I read more about Peria and the charmed ones than Buffy.
Where does this leave Dawn because she is made out of Buffy so she is technically Buffy's daughter if you gone write that she is Buffy's sister than she is also Peria's daughter. So just curious.

When the demon came Peria ordered everybody upstairs while she isn't the one who used to fight demons. That sounds strange to me and Buffy and Willow aren't persons you can order around. Peria is activated after the spell so Buffy has more experience fighting than Peria will ever have. Buffy has more experience than the charmed ones and why because Buffy has to fight them every night for seven years. while the charmed ones didn't. And you can't say because Peria is her mom she obeyed. She just know her.

Well I'm done. Oh one thing try to take your time and go deeper in to some objects because sometimes you rush through a chapter while you can take it much deeper.
Now I'm done and waiting what will come next. I'm tracking so I won't miss anything.

Thx for the review.

I love your story and yes i am the person that she writes about at the bottom of each chapter. her BFF. I especially love the ending that's my favourite song by Miley Cyrus

thx for reading it. tell me what you think at school some time

*g* So that's how little Paige Junior entered the world? Cute! Why don't they just call her PJ? *curious*

because that is what they call Phoebe's first born Prudence Johnna.

Hi it's me again, geez when I said "what" out for spelling mistakes, here I am making spelling mistakes...hehehhe. what I meant to say is watch out for spelling mistakes ;) goodluck!

thx and if you can spot some it would be helpful

Hi you're story has the potential to be great. What out for spelling mistakes (there were quite a few)...the story seems rush and a bit confusing...I am not saying that your story sucks, it's not. Like I said it has the potential to be better ;) keep on writing and don't be discourage by criticism...

Thx and the more i write the better it would be!

I like it so far is Buffy gonna get a nifty charmed power up?

she and her sisters are going to be the power of four!