Leave it to Vala to drop the proverbial anvil on Xander when they are almost right at the front door. I can almost see the ACME logo on the side. lol But in all seriousness, this was really well written and very funny, the whole series up to this point in fact. Very nice work!
Review By [bucksavage] • Date [24 Aug 12] • Not Rated
I am starting to feel the relationship dynamic between Vala and Xander to be one sided and boring. I can't see Vala always having the upper hand, always being the most clever, yadda yadda yadda. It gets old, fast. If they aren't equals, then they are wasting each other's time.
Comments from author:
Vala doesn't always have the upper hand. Just because she usually gets a zinger near the end of the story (usually for comedic purposes) that doesn't mean she's ruling the relationship. As I'm writing through Xander's pov, he tends to see her as "winning" in most of the scenarios. His humility in a relationship just fit his character in my opinion (based on his past girlfriends). Doesn't make it true. If you're bored though, it's probably a sign you should stop reading. I won't mind.
Review By [SimulatedSoul] • Date [22 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Hmm, you mean you'd like the missing scenes I skirt around in the first one-shot, "Not Just a Demon Magnet"? If so, that's food for thought--I might be able to incorporate some of that in later, when they're telling one of the Scoobs about how they met.
Review By [EnergyBeing] • Date [20 Aug 12] • Not Rated
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