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Review of chapter "Aftermath" from Oxnate
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She had been given command of a troop of wood elves, -- Umm, no? Just last chapter you told us: "who despite being ruled an adult, was still looked on by most as a mere child" -- You don't give children command of experienced troops, no matter who their parents are. The wood elves will have their own captains they will follow. Buffy would be assigned to shadow one or both of her brothers.

Her fighting well and inspiring the troops is another matter. After she's proved herself in battle, next time I could see her being given command.



EDIT:

That's human thinking. Also, in the cases you pointed out, those young men (usually) had plenty of training before being given command. They likely would have observed their fathers, uncles, or brothers first. Buffy's had training, but not elvish training. Not enough that she would be given command at any rate. To the elves, she is untrained and untested. Which is why she was sent away in the first place instead of being sent to battle.

That Buffy would be told to keep close to the Els and observe them (so that she could one day take command of a unit) and then got caught up in the fighting when it became fierce; is far more in line with what you've shown of Elven society and those in charge.
Comments from author:
That's modern thinking. I can point you plenty of examples from history of children of upper class or noble/royal parents being given at least nominal command, starting with a teenage Alexander putting down a revolt in his father's absence. (To go with a slightly more recent case- the Royal Navy circa the Napoleonic Wars had 'young gentlemen' midshipmen, some not even in their teens yet. Much older, more experienced sailors were expected to treat them with the respect and authority due to officers. Or there's the Wars of the Roses, in which teenage commanders abounded. I can keep going if you like...) Elven society has no formalized military training structures along the lines of modern military academies, and from what is shown in the Tolkien canon, armies are usually commanded by nobility. Buffy being given command of a small unit on the strength of being Elrond's daughter, with her brothers nearby, is completely in keeping with that style of military organization.

EDIT: And when it's your story, you can write it any way you want to, sweetie.
Review By [Oxnate] • Date [12 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Shadow" from (Current Donor)Sulien
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Edited to add: Quite frankly, I prefer your fan fiction to PJ's. Just so long as you keep your mits off of Faramir and Gandalf, unlike PJ...

Well, at least you didn't save both of the pretty dwarves. Though, I can definitely see why you did, as I'm sure Buffy would have felt it a personal failing if both of the youngest members of Thorin's Company had died. Sorry, a Canon Maven Warning should have been issued. ;)

Canon Maven quibbles aside, I really loved this chapter because of Bilbo's interaction with Buffy. I think Gandalf and her brothers will be very, very glad to get back to Imladris after the mischief the B's are likely to make.
Comments from author:
Quibble away! But I promise it had nothing to do with pretty. (I reject Peter Jackson's fanfiction and substitute my own! Not to mention, despite the PJ movies, my image of Kili is more influenced by the Rankin-Bass animated version, which I saw before I was old enough to read the book.) I just liked the idea that Buffy could save one of the young dwarves, since they'd both been fighting the bodyguard of Bolg- in my mind it was a kind of 'Buffy knocks Kili out of the way during the fighting and he ends up with elves between him and the goblins around Thorin- and I thought it was more interesting to take the youngest one.

Edit: His treatment of Faramir is one of my *many* issues with PJ.
Review By [(Current Donor)Sulien] • Date [24 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Telling Truths" from (Current Donor)Sulien
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"...Buff’ll probably try to beat the bad news home and fess up straight off.”"

*snorflegiggle* About the only way she could manage that is to convince one of Gwaihir's people to give her a lift home! But then there wouldn't be much left to the story, and that would not be of the good. Besides, it's not as if Galadriel won't see it in her mirror to begin with and pass word along that Buffy and the Els are fine, as well as sending a full report for Elrond.

Really enjoyed these two updates, thank you! :)
Comments from author:
Thanks!
Poor Buffy- there are some drawbacks to Middle Earth, and not being able to skip home as soon as you're done Slaying is one of them. Galadriel's going to find out before she even starts her journey home.
Review By [(Current Donor)Sulien] • Date [24 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Telling Truths" from bradsan
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They really don't know Buffy. Do they really think she will sit aside and watch others fight. Nope not Buffy. I don't think Joyce would be that mad. Buffy is a protector and if she can fight to protect she will do it and her mom should know that.

Great job the interaction between Bilbo and Buffy and Xander and Arwen. Arwen has much to learn.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [23 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Telling Truths" from DieselDriver
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Getting the truth out there before wild stories and exaggerations would be very very good.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [23 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Shadow" from DieselDriver
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Yep. The price of failure is as high as it gets. You lose everything.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [23 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Telling Truths" from AllenPitt
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Huh. The whole 'throwing her out of the house, she ran off and was missing for months' story if it comes out, Elrond & others might not be too happy about. Especially if they hear of the trouble she got into during that time.
Actually I have the feel in there's a lot about B's adventures in Sunnydale that they don't know. Dying (briefly)? Angel (heh)... and so on and so forth.
Comments from author:
There are definitely some family discussions to be had.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [23 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Telling Truths" from Littlestar
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I wonder who's gonna get scolded more; buffy (for fighting), her brother (for letting her fight) or Thranduil (for letting three of them fight. But he did try to stop them, it'll be quite a scene to see buffy defending Thranduil, lol).

That's Xander for you, he may not have super power but he does have good judgement and know his friends well.
Review By [Littlestar] • Date [23 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Telling Truths" from grd
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Beautiful. I miss Xan. Good to see he will not be eating lembas for a month. Great scene with Bilbo.
Review By [grd] • Date [23 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Telling Truths" from (Current Donor)vidicon
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I think Joyce/Celebrian wouldn't be pleased, but I doubt she would be as angry as Buffy fears. She's got some experience after all, and her elven 'cool' should help a lot too. And the Twins. Any woman who gave birth to the sons of Elrond and remembered it would not be phased by her daughter being, well. Buffy.

And Finrod didn't nick-name Galadriel Nerwen for nothing.

But battles like this are a lot different than the skirmishes she fought in Sunnydale. Even the battle with the Mayor wasn't anywhere near the same level, even if she had 'troops' who fought with her there.

Thanks for writing
Comments from author:
Celebrian does have experience with Buffy, but there's still going to be some Mom nerves- as you say, Buffy's never been involved at anything on this level before. Elrond, on the other hand, has zero experience with Buffy being Buffy...
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [23 Aug 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Telling Truths" from raxadian
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Yeah, that's Buffy for you.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [23 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Shadow" from AllenPitt
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Yep, the parents won't be happy with her. But they're going to have to accept all of her, not just the parts they like. Weird to think she'll still be around, young, when Frodo shows up with the Ring. I keep thinking it'd be interesting if someone else comes through from the world she came from. Maybe the First Evil? He does sorta/kinda sound like the sort of 'spirit of malice' that LOTR had a lot of. Just, please, no Whistler-he's way overused as a plot device...
Any chance she'll end up with a mithril coat?
Comments from author:
Celebrian/Joyce won't be too surprised- she knows about Slaying, after all. But it's going to be Elrond's first real experience with his daughter's talent for finding trouble.

Jury's still out on the mithril coat, but Whistler is a definite no. I wouldn't even know what to do with him here.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [22 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Shadow" from raxadian
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Elf or not, she is a warrior.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [22 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Aftermath" from raxadian
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Right, this is after all, not the battle hardened Buffy from later.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [22 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Preparing to March" from raxadian
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And yes the great culprit, Gandalf the gray, remains unpunished.
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To be fair, Gandalf was playing the long game- and if Buffy had known about it, she would have agreed with him about the necessity of getting rid of the dragon!
Review By [raxadian] • Date [22 Aug 14] • Not Rated
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