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Review of chapter "Chapter Nine - Megalomania" from tarrangar
love this series your 40k story are also good but this is better please come back to it.
Review By [tarrangar] • Date [5 Jan 15] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine - Megalomania" from madmanofdarkness
Plz update this story its rather left me in suspense with Mayan getting possessed like Illyria did with Fred
Review By [madmanofdarkness] • Date [24 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine - Megalomania" from buffyrazz
nearly 18 months since an update.. I'm re-reading for the umpteenth time.. and am about to start the cell games.. but not much left.. I read fast

hoping there is new stuff in the works.. or that there is another place to find it..

Dende n po-Po don't even return my messages anymore..
Comments from author:
I'm sorry, I've had a lot on my plate lately in terms of real life. Been ill, lost a job, started a new one, some other stuff as well. I've tried to get back into writing, I do want to finish this. I've even revisited my older stories to do some rework (nothing major, mostly fixing spelling errors and adding the odd thing here and there to tie things better together.

Alas my muse has been taking me on what little writing time that I have left to different pastures. Warhammer 40K that is and I feel that I must follow it through first. Know that I do plan to revisit Original of the Species, for I am just as curious to see where and how it will end. So feel free to harass me and badger me for updates, it might work. ;)
Review By [buffyrazz] • Date [9 Jun 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine - Megalomania" from eternalfox
I think in the actual show, the reason Glory had to suck the sanity from people was to push Ben aside and gain control because he was male. With a female body, she would simply have to overcome the occupying soul and she'd never need to resort to feeding on sanity. What I don't get is why she didn't take Angela instead, seeing that the remnants of Angela's mind would offer little resistance, unless the oozaru would be too powerful to overcome just as it was for Shenlong. If that was the case, then Mayan's soul isn't's only pushed to the subconscious with the oozaru; however, unlike Angela, Mayan, being a saiyan, wouldn't be overcome by it. If they can exorcise Glory from her, Mayan could be probably end up more powerful as a result. It's sort of the same thing as when Baby gained control of Vegeta's body. It couldn't kill Vegeta's soul, it pushed it towards the oozaru. As result, once Baby was driven out, Vegeta was even more powerful; not that it really helped against Super 17.
Review By [eternalfox] • Date [4 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine - Megalomania" from AlphaBeta
Auuu man, you killed her. I was really happy for Belmovekk that he got his sister back. Well there is the Dragon Balls, which I hope you use to bring her back. Belmovekk deserves a little happyness after all thats happen.
Comments from author:
Why do you think I brought her back to begin with? I'm just following the rule of cruel as established by Joss Whedon. Whenever something good happened for our main characters, something monstrously bad would inevitably happen. Remember Tara and Willow getting back together? Blam! Enter Darth Willow. Muhahahaha!!!!
Review By [AlphaBeta] • Date [2 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine - Megalomania" from superbrutal
Dang, I was worried that was the case at the second protect the sister, and now I've got to wait to the next chapters to come out. Oh well, great chapter.
Comments from author:
You did? Damn, I was hoping everybody kept thinking it meant Dawn. Well, thanks at least for not spoiling it. The downside with foreshadowing stuff is that some people might be smarter then the writer and realize what he's up too. Still, always better then having things come completely out of the blue, right?
Review By [superbrutal] • Date [1 Jan 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine - Megalomania" from MistofRainbows
Huh... I'm done... check please... fuck this. Total and complete crap. What the fuck happened to the wards... and well fuck that shit with no information by the dark/light... Buffy has been way too much of a bitch lately... lots of... never mind. Good luck or not on your next bit.
Comments from author:
I'm sorry you didn't like it. But this is the story I had in mind. That I always had in mind (I do sound a bit like George Lucas here though).

About the wards, they were only meant to keep out spying PTB's and their agents, not keep them out physically. As for the information by the two necessities, this is in keeping with the way they acted in both the Belgariad and Malloreon. Only ever giving the barest of information and most of that through prophecies. They did this according to mutually agreed upon rules, because if either side broke the rules that would free the other side to do the same. And that could cause an escalation that could lead to full confrontation between either destiny. The same rule applies here. The moment dark/light tell Buffy what's really going on, the new emerging destiny will be free to do the same with its agents. That's why they can only use cryptic. And of course the dark destiny is a bit of an ass as well.

As for Buffy being a bitch, I realized that I had made her quite bitchy as well. That's why I had her lament that she had gotten so bitchy as of late. To be honest I don't like her being bitchy as well. Then again she did became that in the series as well, especially season 7. I guess it came from having others do questionable things that set her on edge.

I hope my explanations can convince you to keep reading this story. There is still a whole lot going on that explains why things are happening as they are. You are free to exercise your right to move on and if you do I wish you find what you're looking for in other stories. Thanks for sticking with me for as long as you did.
Review By [MistofRainbows] • Date [1 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine - Megalomania" from TDMaster
Great chapter, Glory is going to be scary; I'm guessing Mayan-Glory is going Super soon, and level 2 as well.
Comments from author:
Well, what do you think? ;)
Review By [TDMaster] • Date [1 Jan 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight - Fury" from Morgomir
I've read this entire series in the past week and I can only say, I loved it. Being Flemish I was extremely surprised to see my native language suddenly pop up. While there are many spelling errors throughout this magnificent series I couldn't care less. Keep up the great work and happy holidays.
Comments from author:
Thanks for your kind words. I recognize the whole week reading benders, I did quite a few of them myself. ;) As for the spelling errors, well, that's what you get if the only spell checker you have is MS Word. It also doesn't help if English isn't your native language (ik ben een Nederlander overigens).

Happy new year by the way!
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [28 Dec 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight - Fury" from CageFire
Great new chapter. :)
Review By [CageFire] • Date [23 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight - Fury" from TDMaster
Ah, man, it's always the stupid, "turn into a human and obliviate your enemies minds trick!"

Good shit!
Review By [TDMaster] • Date [18 Dec 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight - Fury" from superbrutal
Well, at least Buffy wasn't a stooge, and at least tried to go all out and kill Glory.

We all knew that it couldn't work though, I mean I'm looking forward to reading many more chapters.
Review By [superbrutal] • Date [18 Dec 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Interlude - Bad Dreams Pt. 2" from MistofRainbows
How about no more of shit for brains Buffy's dreams? They're the most painful pieces of shit I've ever read... (baring a couple of Narrato crosses that some idiot friend suggested. Probably because you write them with her being remarkably stupid.) I'm not sure why they're so horrible. It's a twisted mess of stuff well written... maybe that's the problem as it seems like you're curb stomping the poor girl for no fucking reason and shouting that people should enjoy watching it.

Also it's just reminding me how much of an ass you are for having advanced healing around and various other things and hey look fucking railroad. Anyways, looking forward to you getting away from the dream stuff. Good luck on the next chapter.
Review By [MistofRainbows] • Date [11 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Interlude - Bad Dreams Pt. 2" from CageFire
Sigh, an okay chapter. But I am getting tired of the Hannibal Lector dreams, I never watched those movies, and I never wanted to.
Comments from author:
Fair enough. Don't worry though, it's all happening for a reason. ;)
Review By [CageFire] • Date [10 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven - Sing for Absolution" from TDMaster
Spike was actually dumb enough in this world to build android sex bot of Buffy?

He's dead. Buffy will go SSJ2 and as she goes to confront Glory and the rest of them, she'll smash him into itsy bitsy little pieces during her landing.
Review By [TDMaster] • Date [4 Dec 12] • Not Rated
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