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Review of chapter "The Serpent Was More Crafty" from Starfox
Review:
I still don't get why no one among the four realizes that by not killing those two death eaters they let them kill innocents in the future. They cannot capture and keep them, and letting them live means countless dead muggleborns and normal people - often tortured to death.

Edit: That's easy to answer: Dumbledore is either senile and inept, or evil (and senile/inept). There is no other explanation for his Actions, especially when it concerns Harry.
Comments from author:
Why didn't Dumbledore get that concept? He's a lot older and a lot wiser (in theory) and a lot more experienced with these things (e.g. Grindelwald), and he's the one who has been telling them 'no, don't kill people, even bad people'.

Meanwhile, Ginny has the First Slayer inside her telling her not to kill humans, so that just makes things worse.
Review By [Starfox] • Date [2 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Earth and the Heavens" from Starfox
Review:
And that should be a lesson in why you kill death eaters. Dead monsters tell no tale.
Comments from author:
If they're Death Eaters then aren't they asking to eat death themselves? Just don't use those stupid curses. A nice, non-magical method would be better. Maybe even something traditional, like giving them a gift blanket with smallpox.
Review By [Starfox] • Date [1 Apr 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Blameless in His Generation" from Spica
Review:
Good story. I could be writing lots of comments, but that pretty much covers it.
Rare to see so many characters stay in canon character btw.
Comments from author:
Thanks! If you really liked it, you might enjoy some of my other stories. Or you might feel like lobbing me a recommendation to bolster my fragile ego. :D
Review By [Spica] • Date [25 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Blameless in His Generation" from dragonsey
Review:
A very enjoyable story. Interesting, easy to follow, and even included a few things I hadn't seen before. Bravo!


Although... I must admit to being a little disappointed on seeing that it was a HP/BTVS crossover. Based on the name I kinda expected the story to start with Hermoine on summer vacation with her family, caravanning through Moroccan desert, when they find a blonde-haired, blue-eyed stowaway...
Comments from author:
Thanks for reading and reviewing. If you feel up to a recommendation too, I won't mind.
Review By [dragonsey] • Date [24 Feb 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Blameless in His Generation" from SnowyMountain
Review:
I have to say that I thought that this story was exceptionally strong and deftly interwove Ginny as a Vampire Slayer into the Deathly Hollows story, even the last minute arrival of Buffy & Co. was superb climax. However, I did find the conclusion to be a bit on the weak side. You seemed to abruptly end it and it feels incomplete or unfinished in my opinion.

I'm not saying that you need a sequel but say like an epilogue to round it all off. Something like "Ten Years Later..." or something that just shows the influence that Ginny has on merging the Wizarding World with the Slayers. What sort of role does she play in the future of the Buffy storyline? What sort of changes do the Slayers have on Hogwarts?

Basically, it's missing that last element and I would joyfully give this story a MUCH higher rating if you did. Thanks.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the input. I appreciate the advice. I'm always trying to improve my writing.
Review By [SnowyMountain] • Date [2 Nov 13] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Blameless in His Generation" from MarcusSLazarus
Review:
Interesting idea, I’ll give you that.

The idea of Ginny becoming a Slayer under the circumstances described is simple but effective (Timeline issues don’t really matter in my book; nothing ever took place in either series where the real-world date would REALLY matter), to say nothing of the wizarding world’s limited knowledge of the Slayer leaving Ginny with an uncomfortable picture of what she’s become, even if it also gives her an excellent reason to stay with Harry during the subsequent horcrux hunt.

Your initial ideas about how the Watcher’s Council and the Ministry interacted were simple but effective- particularly how the Weasleys are so comfortable ignoring that rule considering the length of time since it was last relevant and the Council’s recent fate-, and Ginny’s independent exploration of her Slayer abilities without a Watcher as a guide is handled very well, as her friends and family work to help her deal with her new destiny, culminating in a very interesting final battle.

The only downside in this story is that you draw attention to flaws in some of the events the characters have experienced in the past without accounting for it (As an example, Crouch could have interrogated Moody under Veritaserum to account for his detailed knowledge of Moody’s background, and most of Moody’s personality could have been advertised enough for him to pull off a convincing enough impersonation, particularly since Moody doesn’t strike me as the type to meet people in private), and I disagree with the idea of Voldemort being able to make more horcruxes; his body and soul must have reached the point where he COULDN’T make more without horrifically mutilating himself even further.

Admittedly, things get a bit too easy when the Scoobies show up, but while I think you over-emphasised some of Voldemort’s mistakes- most of the flaws in his plans were just caused by his own arrogance and lack of knowledge of how many allies Harry had available to him, rather than Voldemort himself being stupid-, generally everything worked, with the Scoobies mainly able to help because they weren’t expected rather than Voldemort just overlooking them.

All in all, aside from some areas where I felt you were a bit too ‘X sucks while Y rocks’ (One complaint I have about some crossovers which bring two series together and make one side look like idiots while the other side are brilliant), in general you had a good bit of work here; keep it up!
Comments from author:
Thanks. I just didn't get to the 'Y has also done stupid, sucky things too' issues, so that's a glaring problem. (In my opinion, anyway.)

I agree partly with the Moody issue. There is no one at Hogwarts - except Albus - who would be having a private meeting with Moody, or dealing with him enough personally to realize the crazy guy wasn't THEIR crazy guy. And Moody's behaviors were pretty well known. But I still think Albus should have spotted him, and a plan where Crouch/Moody impersonates the real Moody for an entire school year with no one finding him out is just a bad plan. Next, you'll tell me the plan also has him lose his hat. :-) :-)
Review By [MarcusSLazarus] • Date [6 Oct 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Cattle after Their Kind" from DieselDriver
Review:
These are just way better than the originals.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [2 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Genesis" from kdakmmt
Review:
I really enjoyed reading this story, I did find the scoobies being blase' over the wizarding world to be highly amusing. I could almost hear Willow say "Bored now....." and we know what kind of stuff happens then....lol
Comments from author:
Thanks for reading and reviewing it. And I agree: we never want to hear Willow say 'bored now' ever again. :-)

If oyu really enjoyed it, I wouldn't mind a recommendation, or seeing your opinion of some of my other stories on this site.
Review By [kdakmmt] • Date [5 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Blameless in His Generation" from lunalurker
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Ah, Faith, don't ever change. I luv you so. And will always regret that spinoff show centered around her didn't happen.
A very fun story indeed, as well as some thoughtful reasonings on certain plot holes and oddness in the original material, which I always seem to enjoy. There was some swerving away from the dark scaryness and over the line toward silliness toward the end, but since that is a trademark of both the Potterverse and the Buffyverse, it's far more appropriate than jarring.
Thanks very much for writing, my reading habit appreciates it greatly. ;)
Comments from author:
A 'Faith the Vamp Slayer' show would have been awesome.

And yes, I simply can't leave massive plot holes alone. I either make fun of them or patch them, depending on the story.

Thanks for the reviews. If you really enjoyed the story, I wouldn't mind a rec either. :-)
Review By [lunalurker] • Date [20 May 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Heroes That Were of Old" from lunalurker
Review:
“Accio fist!”
Oh, giggled over that. And not for the first time. Very fun read and a nicely smooth blending of worlds. :)
Comments from author:
Well, Snape got off a lot easier this time.

Would there be any Snape or Draco fangirls if much less attractive actors had been used?
Review By [lunalurker] • Date [20 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Blameless in His Generation" from Starfox
Review:
A compelling, funny and exciting story, with the right amount of drama without falling into overly dramatic convulted territory. I loved seeing the slayers and scoobies kick wizard butt at the final fight, and the way Percy and Snape were acting. And Ginny was perfect, especially the way she handled Harry's attempt to break up with her for her own good.
Comments from author:
Thanks! I appreciate the review. (I wouldn't mind a recommendation either!)
Review By [Starfox] • Date [24 Apr 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "When They Were in the Field" from Zarohk
Review:
I really love this chapter, especially the abolition of the House system at Hogwarts

"There are no more houses…no house points or house rivalries or house Quidditch teams. Classes will not be segregated by houses either."

This just seems like EXACTLY what Snape would do. Even if he's only Headmaster for a year or two, he will create at least one grade that has no sense of the senseless rivalries that (for him) made Hogwarts such a cruel place. Even though Snape's by no definition a "nice" person, he almost certainly considers this the "right" thing to do. Good for him.
Comments from author:
The house system at Hogwarts seems designed to cause trouble. Of course, it's necessary for meta-reasons, but it did seem like all it did was make certain blocks of students hate other blocks of students.
Review By [Zarohk] • Date [1 Mar 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Blameless in His Generation" from DieselDriver
Review:
Like all of Diane's work this is really fun to read. I started it some time ago then went away and waited for it to be finished. Reading the parts I'd already read again were like coming back to a favorite easy chair or a favorite pair of shoes. Then the finish is great but I'm sorry it's over.
Thanks Diane,
Chris in CA
Whately fan too.

PS: anyone who hasn't read her Whately Universe work is missing a real treat!!!
Comments from author:
Thanks and thanks. I appreciate the compliments, and I appreciate your reading my stuff!
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [13 Jan 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Blameless in His Generation" from Gideon
Review:
I put off reading the last couple of chapters of this story for a few weeks just because I didn't want it to end :) Sadly all good things come to an end and I finally got around to reviewing this one. Great story. I don't know if you planned it all out before you wrote it but the plot filled the whole story flowing from one scene to the next and coming to a satisfying conclusion at the end where Tom Riddle got his due reward - a final death. I found the Harry Potter characters very convincing and their reactions realistic considering the world they lived in. I liked how they put to use what information they could find about slayers and what they could do. And the little hints throughout the story about the scooby gang paid off at the end when they came storming in to save the day. I did feel the first couple of chapters with the scoobies showed them to be a bit blase with the whole wizarding world and the threat that Voldmort posed. But the scoobies soon learned that their were more useful spells to be learned from their new friends even as they easily handled the "Death Suckers" and other minions of the most feared "Dark Lord" in the last generation or two. I just hope that Faith isn't the only slayer assigned to Hogwartz to help Ginny train or a whole generation of school children may be forever scarred in all new ways. This time their scars consisting entirely of things they wish they did not know!
Comments from author:
Yes, I plotted the entire thing out in a lot of detail before I started writing the first full chapters. However, things still changed; for instance, Willow did some sort of spell and got my muse to control what I was typing about the battle, so it turned out more dea ex machina than I wanted. (Okay, the Battle of Hogwarts was pretty deus ex machina'ed in canon too, just with a lot more death.) And if Faith really is the Slayer on duty at Hogwarts, I think Minerva will have a nervous breakdown. :-)

Thanks for reading and making so many helpful comments.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [5 Jan 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Blameless in His Generation" from yuiop
Review:
Nice
Comments from author:
Thanks.
Review By [yuiop] • Date [4 Jan 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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