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Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from burmafrdnow
Review:
Depends on your source as regards Nikki Wood about how long she was a slayer. I have heard anywhere from 4-7 years from various sources. Clearly though a lot longer than normal. I have never heard how long India Cohen lasted.

Really hope you finish this story. Agree there have not been enough reviews. A lot of readers are lazy.

One quibble I have is that most sources agree that it was Buffy the girls saw as regards activation; not Willow.
Comments from author:
While Buffy and the Scythe were the focus and keystone of the activation spell, it was Willow who empowered it and actually called the Potentials echoing Buffy's words. At least that is how I always saw it.
Review By [burmafrdnow] • Date [4 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from (Current Donor)vladt
Review:
very enjoyable read, thank you. looking forward to more!
Review By [(Current Donor)vladt] • Date [18 Dec 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from Drachnyen
Review:
I like this story, but... you are wrong the second slayer Spike killed (Nikki Wood) survived seven years as a slayer and became 22.
Review By [Drachnyen] • Date [17 Sep 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from Tabercil
Review:
Nice chapter to a nice series. I gotta agree with becuzitswrong in that Raven is an excellent OC - I mean you're only six chapters in and yet it's clear she has a distinct voice. Can't wait to see where you go with this...
Review By [Tabercil] • Date [10 Sep 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from becuzitswrong
Review:
What a great story! I click on the site to update and there are so many great stories to read. I love Raven! Excellent OC! I like how you have her father be an ex-Marine, who has indocrinated his little girl in all of the fun things in life: guns and marine corp culture.

Xander and Faith were both convincing and true to character. I like how Faith is still telling her naked gator story, even after all this time.

I look forward to more.
Review By [becuzitswrong] • Date [9 Sep 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from Mcspender
Review:
Any chance to see the marine in Raven's dad giving her some professional After Action Review on her tactics??. Of course, after the shock of watching his daughter killing those monsters goes away =).
Cool chapter, see ya!!.
Comments from author:
I'm glad you're enjoying this. I'm having lots of fun writing it.

I chose to make him a retired Marine as a tie in to some ideas I have for later in the story and for possible future related stories but he will of course have to do a post mission debrief both from the military side of his background and the police side. I'm sure once he has time to think he will find all sorts of problems with her tactics but that's not surprising since Faith pretty much tossed her in to the deep end with no training.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [1 Sep 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Recent Donor)DaveTurner
Review:
So my question was answered!

Liked the chapter particularly the last quarter of it.

As usual looking forward to more.

DaveT.
Review By [(Recent Donor)DaveTurner] • Date [27 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Mcspender
Review:
Marines Semper Fi xD!. Why do I think that Raven is gonna have an AA - 12 as a side arm, with some very heavy deer o boar slugs, or an .50 Beowulf M4 carbine? I mean, her dad is gonna teach her the basic about combat rifles.
Cool chapter, see ya!!!.

E.T.A. Yeah, and Buffy will be soo jealous of Raven and her guns xD.
Comments from author:
I can see it now. Tiny little girl with a rifle almost as big as she is. Maybe bigger.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [27 Aug 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from war
Review:
Good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Review By [war] • Date [26 Aug 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from EasterCat
Review:
I have no idea what you're crossing over with, but I like it. As long as it isn't something lame like Supernatural, feel free to keep this shrouded in mystery.
Comments from author:
Thank you all for the great reviews and comments.
As to the cross-over. I have several in mind and there are some hints to the direction in the story so far. Part of the problem is having to pick from a set of choices that didn't really reflect where I am planning on going.
Review By [EasterCat] • Date [22 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from djhardim
Review:
Good. Just to be on the safe side, it might be a good idea for her to get an attorney. You can never tell what will happen in a case like this.
Review By [djhardim] • Date [21 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Rod
Review:
I've got to admit, I hadn't read this because it's a surprise crossover and the summary wasn't intriguing enough to overcome that. My loss. I still have absolutely no idea what the crossover might be, but your writing is well worth reading! Thank you.
Review By [Rod] • Date [21 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from FireWolfe
Review:
Very enjoyable story. I'm glad she was a slayer or it could have been a bad for her. I do hope those idiots get what they deserve. Nice to see a protective honest principle. I bet that will shock Xander after snyder lol.
Review By [FireWolfe] • Date [21 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from (Recent Donor)DaveTurner
Review:
This chapter brings up an interesting question; what do you tell your Dad when you've turned into a slayer and beaten up the local rapist...especially if he's a cop! Just as well Faith and Xander are there to help.

Yep, I think some sort of POV indicator could help, but I've not had problems with it myself yet.

Good update,
DaveT.
Review By [(Recent Donor)DaveTurner] • Date [21 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from oldscout
Review:
I have to agree with DaveT, you are not getting enough reviews. For as good as well written as this fic is. I only have one suggestion so far, put some kind of small break in when you're switching perspective. when you switched from the principle to the main character I had to reread a couple of times to figure out what happened. Please do not use section headings like "Principle's POV" just a couple dashes so we can that there is a break in perspective.

Keep up th good work.
Comments from author:
Thanks, I'll keep that in mind going forward.
Review By [oldscout] • Date [18 Aug 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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