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Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from DragonBard
I hope you're not going to try and explain away all the magic in Buffy as alien science, as turning fantasy in sci-fi just irritates me.

Try and explain magic using scientific principals, that I can go with, but leave magic as magic.
Review By [DragonBard] • Date [16 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from SeniorFleetCaptain
A little fast pace but I like were you are at I hope to see more.
Review By [SeniorFleetCaptain] • Date [25 Jan 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from NeverTooOld
Having the meeting on Dahak would be problematical because they are still considered mutineers and thus subject to the 5000 km kill zone. In the book, Colin held the courts martial first, convected them and sentenced them, then commuted/pardoned as appropriate and updated Dahak's records BEFORE any of them could be considered Dahak's crew.

Taking them there as prisoners to face trial might work, but Colin used his position as planetary Governor to sidestep some of Battle Fleet's regulations, so it might be difficult.

Giles might suggest some of the WC's retreats, but then again if Colin is right about the Mutineer origin of Slayer's and Watchers, that could back fire due to monitoring.

Might try 'security by obscurity' technique and rent a conference suite in a large hotel, secure it with magic first and then with Imperial tech inside the wards. Then have people arrive in disguise and covered as sales reps or something similar.
Review By [NeverTooOld] • Date [13 Oct 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Bobboky
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [10 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from eriktheviking
An intriguing addition to a great book.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [10 Oct 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from TroyGuffey
Having Slayers be using hereditary nano-tech cheapens the BtVS universe.

Writing too much tell and not enough show.
Review By [TroyGuffey] • Date [10 Oct 12] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Gideon
I forgot a third way you could go with the Slayer nanobot/ magic argument. Don't say what the truth is! The reviewers may not like it but it is your story. If you don't think you need to spend a lot of time explaining the nature of magic or slayer powers then just skip that bit and write the interesting parts of the story instead. Good Luck!
Review By [Gideon] • Date [10 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Gideon
This chapter seems like more of a summary of a story than the actual story itself. I was looking forward to the fight at Cal's house but you barely describe it at all! That was a crucial event in Colin's journey from ordinary citizen to Captain of an Imperial Battlemoon and really brought home to him the cost and the dangers of confronting Anu. I missed it :(
I like that Colin has got himself some help that he trusts in the Slayers, and I think that the scoobies and Dahak working together could accomplish more together than working apart on their separate missions. It also provides a few more "normals" for the loyalists under Horus to use in their secret war. New faces that Anu won't know, unless he was still heavily involved in the Watcher's council. Either way the political and spying side of the story could get complex very quickly.
I see that you haven't determined whether the Slayers are powered by nanobots or not. I would have expected the battleship to be able to do at least a preliminary scan.
Anyway, this is still a great idea! Feel free to expand it a bit more and don't feel you have to rush through the story. Show not tell. I look forward to the next chapter.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [9 Oct 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Gideon
Nanobot enhanced Slayers! That sounds like a great idea, and very original. It would provide some middle ground between fully augmented humans and normal people. You could go a couple of different ways with this idea.
Either go fully with science only and make all magic and demons only advanced science and aliens. Perhaps the demons were crashed Achuultani or other alien races on the run from them somehow? If the Slayer is only enhanced by nanites then you will have to explain vampires and magic with science too. Maybe the vampires were a rogue strain of nanites that got out of control? And I don't know how well it could explain Willow but you could say that magic users are just genetically engineered or that they are drawing on an imperial power source on Dahak, or perhaps somewhere on Earth itself. There would have to be some downside to the nanites or genetic engineering that would prevent Anu using them himself. Perhaps they burn out a slayer after only 20 years of activity or they are incompatible with full implants. Either way Dahak should be able to fix this.
Or you could say that Slayers are a mixture of magic and science. The first Slayer is still empowered by a demon and magic is real, but perhaps the Slayer or even just the Watcher's council was affected by Anu in some way so that there is still a tie in from Slayers to Dahak. That would allow you to show Slayers doing things that nanobots alone could not explain and would retain Willow as a "big gun" albeit a fragile one.
Can't wait to see which way you take it!
Review By [Gideon] • Date [9 Oct 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Gideon
Awesome idea! I loved the Mutineer's Moon and Empire from the Ashes books. Big honking space guns indeed! It was fun to see huge space battles with not such a large reliance on missiles as the Honor Harrington books, and I enjoyed seeing Augmented Humans doing cool stuff and blowing stuff up :)
It certainly would be handy to have Colin know about Hellmouths and Slayers, I just hope he will not bring Anu down on Buffy and the scoobies when he makes contact :( A slayer would stand little chance against a fully augmented human, especially with imperial weapons.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [9 Oct 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from burmafrdnow
Magic is clearly real.

Therefore the premise that the Slayers are tech made just does not hold water.

Does not explain the Powers that Be or Whistler.

While I liked Mutineers moon, there was a lot of it that frankly just did not work well. The so called upgrades to humans just being the most obvious.

The reason that you can have slayers is that magic allows muscles and tendons and bones to do things that they cannot.
THere just is no way that you can tech that kind of change.
Review By [burmafrdnow] • Date [9 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Ah having multiple people that can use imperial equipment really, really changes the dynamic, on the other hand they are very lucky that Anu's group didn't spot the ship as it was landing. I guess that is canon for the book, they also avoided the massive firefight at the Hidachi's house which changes things quite a bit.

Interesting, very interesting!
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [9 Oct 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from CPTSkip
Nice to see another update. I like the 'scientific' explanation of the Slayers. I wonder how Dahak explains Willow and magic without blowing his circuitry. Lol! I enjoyed the original series of books and look forward to more of your MM/BtVS crossover.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [9 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from AllenPitt
Maybe the slayer predates Anu, but he took over the Council? That'd explain how indifferent it is to the slayer's well being, the cruciamentum etc. He needs the slayer to keep demons/vampires from over-running the place, but doesn't want her as a possible opposition. So you still have a supernatural origin, but Anu has his fingers in the council, maybe.
Nanites are a great idea, but he doesn't have that ability. One major plot point was inability to 'upgrade' their children (he & his group were running out of people with the right implants to switch their brains into, etc). Only Dahak could do that stuff.
Anyway---having the slayers helping out in this story is great. Maybe Anu's group includes demons etc? He must also be toying with the idea of going vamp himself, that takes care of immortality after all, which he does want...
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [9 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Now that's an interesting variant on the Slayer mythology.
Slayer is tech not magic...could be interesting.
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [30 Aug 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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