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Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-Nine" from (Past Donor)lucidity
Review:
Loving this! You are an excellent writer!

'Lucidity
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Review By [(Past Donor)lucidity] • Date [20 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-Nine" from DieselDriver
Review:
We most assuredly are not done. You can't leave us hanging like that and call it the end of a story. The sequel better continue from there or at least have a real conclusion. Grrrr.
Comments from author:
I have several sequels planned for this series. So conclusions will eventually appear, but it might be a while. A really, really long while.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [31 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-Four" from DieselDriver
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Like I said before, I'm not interrupting this story to read another one. If it is good enough to read and it should be in between these chapters then put it there. Otherwise I'll read it later.

BTW, the story is fine. Very enjoyable. I could have commented on the other chapters but it would have been more of the same. I don't really have any constructive criticism to make, not being a good writer. I'm only good at grammar and wording. A story teller I'm not but I recognize a good one when I read it.

Thanks for posting.
Comments from author:
Well, thanks. It's always nice to read such kind reviews.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [30 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty-Nine" from DieselDriver
Review:
There was a joke? Do you ever read these and comment back? I'd really like to know what the joke was.
Comments from author:
The "Outstanding in your field" joke. It's just so bad it's not even funny. But I couldn't stop myself.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [29 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty-Eight" from DieselDriver
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"I have a lot of desktops around here but they're all covered with books." Yep. Laughter would definitely ensue. Poor Giles. Was he really like this in the TV series? Dang! Even my father could work computers till he got Alzheimer's. Now he has trouble with the TV. Bleh! I wish I had a rejuvenation potion or spell. I wouldn't know whether to take it myself or give it to my dad. Sometimes I wish I could be one of the people in these stories but I'd probably end up wearing a red shirt anyway so never mind.

Good story. Sorry, pain pills and I'm babbling. But it's all in fun. Although the telemarketer who just called may not have thought so. hehehehehe! or maybe that should be MUWAAAahahahahaha!

Thanks for posting the story. Yum, good pain pills.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [29 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty-Three" from DieselDriver
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Umm. I think you or your proofreaders are hurrying a bit much. Here in the second paragraph:

"he'd gotten his some freedom back". He can get "some" freedom back or "some of" his freedom back or he can get "his" freedom back. But not "his some" freedom back.

Errors like this tend to jolt me out of my reading rhythm.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [29 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty-Two" from DieselDriver
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"Initiativd's"? Maybe "initiative's"? Last paragraph of the chapter.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [29 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty-One" from DieselDriver
Review:
Since I am completely unfamiliar with the episodes you mention (I hardly ever watch TV) you'll just have to continue doing a good job of telling the story, since I am relying on you to be the story teller since you ARE telling the story. Or something like that.
Comments from author:
I just mention it for people who care about such things. I don't want people to suddenly get confused. Because, surprisingly, it happens.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [29 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty-One" from DieselDriver
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The word "Goddess" however, has 2 "d's" in it. You spelled it with one "d" about a third of the way down. Unlike the word "begin" which has already a vowel after the "g", "god" does not. It's the last consonant that is doubled. "beginning" "Goddess". See? I don't know if that's an official rule or not but it's what I use and so far it's worked. It works for "beg", "beggar", "Begging". not sure of the other side though, I donno. "Begs" doesn't get the extra since it's only one syllable. You're not adding one.

And yes, I have been accused of being a "grammar nazi". But I admit that I'm not always right, I just read A LOT and I tend to know how it should look. Hope you don't mind. I only review stories I like. I like this one a lot too.

Thanks for posting it.
Comments from author:
That's... actually surprisingly helpful. I realise that'll probably come across as sarcastic, but really it's helpful.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [29 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eighteen" from DieselDriver
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Darn right you have threads to wind up. Willow's on the floor dead?
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [29 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen" from DieselDriver
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Oh my goodness: The situation has taken a rather hairy turn... Or not... Harry Maybourne and a formerly "hairy guy" I'm sure she'll ask him why, he's no longer a hairy guy (to paraphrase the song).
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [29 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Fourteen" from DieselDriver
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Really interesting story, however, there is one little niggling thing driving me coo coo... The word is NOT "begginning" it's "beginning". ONE "G" only.

And that's the worst thing I've found wrong. LOL. Fun story, interesting twists. I'm looking forward to reading more of it and its sequels.
Comments from author:
Gah. I'll fix that too. Thanks.

Anyway, I'm glad that that's the only criticism you have.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [29 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine" from DieselDriver
Review:
Someone needs to stamp out Senator Kinsey everywhere across all the dimensions and planes of existence. Calling Dr. Who. oh wait, that won't work, he's got good reasons for not changing the past. Drat!
Comments from author:
I have a really good scene with Kinsey several stories down the line. But yeah, in general he needs to be stopped.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [28 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from DieselDriver
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There's always a catch. And at least we won't have to worry about an enhanced Darthwillow. Or not for long if the virus dies... Unless of course, Willow's magic keeps it alive.
Comments from author:
Catches are always fun. And twists. I like twists.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [28 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from DieselDriver
Review:
You're thanking me for reading??? Dude or dudette (does that even matter to an energybeing?) I'm thanking you for writing this fun story.
Comments from author:
Well, readers are always good. Such positive reviewers are even better. But cool stories? Can't beat those!
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [28 Oct 13] • Not Rated
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