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Review of chapter "Wind-Carried Passion" from Destrark
Review:
would Xander be a good Zenith caste?
Comments from author:
Eh. Probably not, but that's not my plan, so whatevs.
Review By [Destrark] • Date [22 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Wind-Carried Passion" from Jearom
Review:
I just found your story the other day and have finally caught up. I just wanted to say it's awesome!
Comments from author:
Thanks, I'm glad you're enjoying it! Remember to check the SpaceBattles thread for extra content and the new vampiric Charm Set!
Review By [Jearom] • Date [3 Mar 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Wind-Carried Passion" from brokenmimir
Review:
That was a good chapter -- the thing with Spike was painful. I mean, you had me wincing with the cratered part, the rest was just overkill. Also, really not his day in general, although that fits most of his life in the original series.

Kendra was interesting and unexpected -- very harsh. I foresee some serious friction with her, and look forward to it. Good stuff in general.
Comments from author:
Buffy used a Two Die Stunt with Sledgehammer Fist Punch on the wall behind Spike. She punched his groin with enough for to dent tank armor (which is actually about what Spike's soak/hardness/health levels even out to). That shit be painful.

Yeah, Kendra's gonna be fun to write. She very much believes in her authority as a Solar. She is the second-lowest ranked Celestial Exalt in Sunnydale, only beating out Buffy, who doesn't care in the first place. CULTURE SHOCK!
Review By [brokenmimir] • Date [28 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Wind-Carried Passion" from zombielord
Review:
great chapter allot of good character development. I have missed this story and am looking forward to see where you take it. You have set allot of good ground work for further stuff. I also can't wait to see Buffy meet Kendra, should be a shock to see that that she is not the only solar around. I also can't wait to see what you have in store for Xander sense he still has that mental command in his head for a major death lord no less. Some how I have a feeling that its not only going to be bad for Buffy but Xander , Angel and the other also
Comments from author:
Glad you enjoyed it. A reminder, though: Buffy's aware of the other Solars, she just hasn't met them.
Review By [zombielord] • Date [28 Feb 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Background Details" from sanityfaerie
Review:
This is a few things - review, response to email, and probably some other stuff.

- With respect to Spike, Well, Ch3 has Wesley telling Angel that the Slayer is coming for him and probably Buffy, but that he's redirecting it to Montreal to kill a death knight. Ch11 has Spike, in Montreal, killing a Death Knight. I guess this was a play on Slayer (as Vampire Slayer) vs Slayer (as infernal type)? I dunno. There's some stuff that seems off about it to me. First, it's a joke that is simply impenetrable unless you've had enough exposure to the Infernal book (one of the more niche Exalted books out there) to actually know what the Infernal caste names are. Second, in a world where the different types of Exalted are important and powerful enough individually to bear their castes as sobriquets, why on earth would anyone give two of them the same title? Either the Infernals would have named theirs differently (so as to avoid the idea that they were so uninspired that they had to steal a name from some grubby Sidereals) or the Sidereals would have named *theirs* differently (so as to avoid any association of their dearly-bought protector with the Infernals). As a mark of that, even knowing the joke now, it's *still* unclear, in Spike's backstory, whether he was going for suicide by Slayer or suicide by Slayer immediately prior to his exalt.

- With respect to Angel/Giles... well, Angel at least knows that Giles and Buffy are still hanging out and sparring pretty seriously, given that Buffy left a panicked message on his machine worried that she'd killed him - and there's apparently been enough time between that and the latest episode for Giles to have finished healing (so as to be hanging out at Willow's bedside) and for Angel to allow himself to get back in touch with Buffy... except that he's going over "the day's events" ...suggesting that he's standing guard over her bedside while still largely crippled by Buffy? Oh, and Giles is sufficiently unworried about Angel's reaction to this revelation that he's quietly planning to sit down with Angel and discuss strategy. His greatest worry is, apparently, that Angel is somewhat infuriating. This fails to compute. Okay, I admit that the "stay out of her life" line could have had an unspoken "I mean emotional life - teaching her charms is still cool", but I haven't seen anything that would let *Giles* be sure of that, and it seems like he'd at least have some trepidation associated.

- With respect to the timeline, I was highly entertained. Go you.

- WRT Buffy/Angel's First Age past... well, I have this image... FA!Buffy has the conviction flaw of Deliberate Cruelty - she wants to help people, but as she gets higher in permanent limit, she keeps lashing out. She knows she can really hurt people doing that, though, so she tries to contain it - channel it somewhere where it won't do *too* much harm - and FA!Angel is there - enduring as only a high-Essence Lunar can be, with a link so strong that, as you say, he couldn't leave if he tried. She can just let it out on him, over and over again, and leave herself cleansed of the awful stuff to better face the world without actually *hurting* anyone. To everyone else she is a shining example of all that is good in the world, while her compatriots slowly turn bad around her. To him - well, he knows what she's doing, and he kind of accepts it at first - is it not he place of a Lunar to serve their Solar in any way they can? Is it not the place of a Steward to protect Creation and its people in any way they can? - but it just gets worse and worse and she makes a game of tearing apart his psyche while telling him that he likes it until finally there's enough of him gone that the only thing he can think is to make the pain stop. Of course, by that point he's so broken down that he can't imagine that he could effectively resist her, so he slips into misery and despair, until finally the Viziers come knocking and he finally sees that he has a chance.

It actually ties into Ange's rant at Giles pretty neatly. The trigger for Deliberate Cruelty is listed (at least in my book) as "The Character is subjected to severe stress, in dire straits, or otherwise backed against the wall." If FA!Buffy seemed outwardly sane, competent and moral while the other solars were goign slowly mad, I coudl totally see the Sidereals (with Kejak taking a starring role) leaning on her more and more - piling mre on her until she couldn't help but fail some times, and, by their nature, never telling her everything - and then she would come home and take it out on him, getting increasingly vicious as she was put under more and more pressure, and he learned to blame them (as she would tell him what was going on). As far as he's concerned, before the Viziers started upping the pressure, he could take what she dished out without real problems, and the good outweighed the bad, and everything was golden and even in the worst moments he knew he was doing something worthwhile.

As for Spike's life as an infernal... well, he loves freedom and fighting, and he's bound to an elemental creature of wind and death. I figure that running around finding and killing other exalts (or really, anyone who can put up a decent fight) for kicks is pretty much what he *does*. Mind you, I think it would be hilarious if he wound up in some sort of a dysfunctional relationship with the current Slayer, starting off of a weird sort of "hey, if I don't *quite* kill you today, I can fight you again tomorrow" thing - kind of like his canon relationship with Buffy except without the strong emotional ties - more of a "ricochet off one another in a burst of sex and violence from time to time" sort of thing. He thinks she's a hell of a lot of fun and is trying to not get too attached. As for what she thinks - well, I don't know enough about her character for that.

Hope you find this helpful.
Comments from author:
- With respect to Spike, Well, Ch3 has Wesley telling Angel that the Slayer is coming for him and probably Buffy, but that he's redirecting it to Montreal to kill a death knight. Ch11 has Spike, in Montreal, killing a Death Knight. I guess this was a play on Slayer (as Vampire Slayer) vs Slayer (as infernal type)? I dunno. There's some stuff that seems off about it to me. First, it's a joke that is simply impenetrable unless you've had enough exposure to the Infernal book (one of the more niche Exalted books out there) to actually know what the Infernal caste names are. Second, in a world where the different types of Exalted are important and powerful enough individually to bear their castes as sobriquets, why on earth would anyone give two of them the same title? Either the Infernals would have named theirs differently (so as to avoid the idea that they were so uninspired that they had to steal a name from some grubby Sidereals) or the Sidereals would have named *theirs* differently (so as to avoid any association of their dearly-bought protector with the Infernals). As a mark of that, even knowing the joke now, it's *still* unclear, in Spike's backstory, whether he was going for suicide by Slayer or suicide by Slayer immediately prior to his exalt.
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RESPONSE: Deliberate misleading on my part. I was trying to obscure what Spike was until his introduction. As for the impenetrability, well, enough caught it that I felt it was worth it. Those who don't...well, a big part of my intention behind this story is spreading Exalted and inspiring more fanfiction of it, so forcing them to look some stuff up can only help that. Also, the Slayer (as I shall refer to the Buffy phenomon) predates the Infernals (who I will refer to by their nicknames, i.e. Brass Tigers, ect), by nearly five thousand years. The Yozis, who picked the names for the Castes, not the Infernals themselves, don't know/care enough about mortal affairs to bother checking to see if the name was taken. Also, this is the first time the context was ever brought up as an issue. Most people realized that it was the Vampire Slayer.
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- With respect to Angel/Giles... well, Angel at least knows that Giles and Buffy are still hanging out and sparring pretty seriously, given that Buffy left a panicked message on his machine worried that she'd killed him - and there's apparently been enough time between that and the latest episode for Giles to have finished healing (so as to be hanging out at Willow's bedside) and for Angel to allow himself to get back in touch with Buffy... except that he's going over "the day's events" ...suggesting that he's standing guard over her bedside while still largely crippled by Buffy? Oh, and Giles is sufficiently unworried about Angel's reaction to this revelation that he's quietly planning to sit down with Angel and discuss strategy. His greatest worry is, apparently, that Angel is somewhat infuriating. This fails to compute. Okay, I admit that the "stay out of her life" line could have had an unspoken "I mean emotional life - teaching her charms is still cool", but I haven't seen anything that would let *Giles* be sure of that, and it seems like he'd at least have some trepidation associated.
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RESPONSE: Giles is arrogant as *fuck*. It didn't even occur to him that the threat might apply to training Buffy. Keep in mind the nature of this universes' Giles: eight decades a Sidereal, reincarnation of Chejop Kejak, suffering from the Great Curse, ect. And he had mostly healed. The injuries she dealt him were short term bad, not long term bad. Pretty much nothing can truly hurt an Exalt for more than a few hours or days. That last bit is just explanation, by the way, not justification. I looked it over, and the scene was definitely pretty vague, so my apologies.
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With respect to the timeline, I was highly entertained. Go you.
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RESPONSE: Thank you!
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- WRT Buffy/Angel's First Age past... well, I have this image... FA!Buffy has the conviction flaw of Deliberate Cruelty - she wants to help people, but as she gets higher in permanent limit, she keeps lashing out. She knows she can really hurt people doing that, though, so she tries to contain it - channel it somewhere where it won't do *too* much harm - and FA!Angel is there - enduring as only a high-Essence Lunar can be, with a link so strong that, as you say, he couldn't leave if he tried. She can just let it out on him, over and over again, and leave herself cleansed of the awful stuff to better face the world without actually *hurting* anyone. To everyone else she is a shining example of all that is good in the world, while her compatriots slowly turn bad around her. To him - well, he knows what she's doing, and he kind of accepts it at first - is it not he place of a Lunar to serve their Solar in any way they can? Is it not the place of a Steward to protect Creation and its people in any way they can? - but it just gets worse and worse and she makes a game of tearing apart his psyche while telling him that he likes it until finally there's enough of him gone that the only thing he can think is to make the pain stop. Of course, by that point he's so broken down that he can't imagine that he could effectively resist her, so he slips into misery and despair, until finally the Viziers come knocking and he finally sees that he has a chance.
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RESPONSE: Pretty close, actually. A few missing bits, a few unknown details, but largely pretty accurate. Good guess!
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It actually ties into Ange's rant at Giles pretty neatly. The trigger for Deliberate Cruelty is listed (at least in my book) as "The Character is subjected to severe stress, in dire straits, or otherwise backed against the wall." If FA!Buffy seemed outwardly sane, competent and moral while the other solars were goign slowly mad, I coudl totally see the Sidereals (with Kejak taking a starring role) leaning on her more and more - piling mre on her until she couldn't help but fail some times, and, by their nature, never telling her everything - and then she would come home and take it out on him, getting increasingly vicious as she was put under more and more pressure, and he learned to blame them (as she would tell him what was going on). As far as he's concerned, before the Viziers started upping the pressure, he could take what she dished out without real problems, and the good outweighed the bad, and everything was golden and even in the worst moments he knew he was doing something worthwhile.
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RESPONSE: Very, VERY interesting observation, and more than a bit accurate as well. You're missing some cause, a bit off on some effect, and at one point have two unknown C&E switched, but still a good tablet for anyone going through these who want to theorize on this story's First Age.

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As for Spike's life as an infernal... well, he loves freedom and fighting, and he's bound to an elemental creature of wind and death. I figure that running around finding and killing other exalts (or really, anyone who can put up a decent fight) for kicks is pretty much what he *does*. Mind you, I think it would be hilarious if he wound up in some sort of a dysfunctional relationship with the current Slayer, starting off of a weird sort of "hey, if I don't *quite* kill you today, I can fight you again tomorrow" thing - kind of like his canon relationship with Buffy except without the strong emotional ties - more of a "ricochet off one another in a burst of sex and violence from time to time" sort of thing. He thinks she's a hell of a lot of fun and is trying to not get too attached. As for what she thinks - well, I don't know enough about her character for that.
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RESPONSE: Actually, Adorjan isn't an elemental being of wind. She's a Yozi. The comparison doesn't fit, though I can see how the mistake was made, and actually made it myself once, so no worries.
And Spike's actions are actually the result of the synergy between his Urge (kill all Solars) and his Motivation (live in a constant orgy of death, sex, blood and booze). Interesting thought about the Slayer, though. I never considered that. Not gonna happen, though. I've got *plans* for Spike.
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Review By [sanityfaerie] • Date [3 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Who Strikes the Wind?" from sanityfaerie
Review:
First, this is kind of awesome, and I approve.

Second... there are some odd inconsistencies here.

- Giles accuses Buffy of mind-rape. Angel responds by administering a truly savage beating and following it up with “Stay out of her life, or I swear, by Luna, the Maidens, and The Unconquered Sun himself, that I will kill you, Kejak.” Nothing appears to change in any way about the relationship between Giles and Buffy as a result (indeed, I was specifically looking for fallout, and the next info I saw on it was Buffy chirping at Willow's unconscious form about the new charms Giles has been teaching her), and Angel says nothing more on the matter.

- Giles describes the slayer as some sort of weird cobbled-together just-shy-of-lunar-exalt with easy access to the memories of all previous Slayers, put together by the Sidereals, and there are some strong implications that the Sidereals had a lot of control/influence over the Slayer shard for quite some time, and hoped to be able to regain it. The Slayer is built up as some sort of special and unique thing - and then it turns out to be Spike (which is awesome and I totally approve) who is apparently a fairly standard Infernal? Except maybe a bit more awesome than most Infernals because he learns really fast? ...and other infernals can be made as normal from Solar Exaltations? It doesn't seem like these things go together, unless somehow Spike exalted twice or something.

I admit, there are a lot of fuzzy confusing things here (Part of me is convinced that Emily is the Ebon Dragon in disguise, but...?) and maybe I'm just missing something, but these really do seem inconsistent.
Comments from author:
"- Giles accuses Buffy of mind-rape. Angel responds by administering a truly savage beating and following it up with “Stay out of her life, or I swear, by Luna, the Maidens, and The Unconquered Sun himself, that I will kill you, Kejak.” Nothing appears to change in any way about the relationship between Giles and Buffy as a result (indeed, I was specifically looking for fallout, and the next info I saw on it was Buffy chirping at Willow's unconscious form about the new charms Giles has been teaching her), and Angel says nothing more on the matter."

FENRIR'S ANSWER: Actually, it just has yet to come up between them. Buffy was unaware of Angel's intervention, and Giles didn't mention it.


- Giles describes the slayer as some sort of weird cobbled-together just-shy-of-lunar-exalt with easy access to the memories of all previous Slayers, put together by the Sidereals, and there are some strong implications that the Sidereals had a lot of control/influence over the Slayer shard for quite some time, and hoped to be able to regain it. The Slayer is built up as some sort of special and unique thing - and then it turns out to be Spike (which is awesome and I totally approve) who is apparently a fairly standard Infernal? Except maybe a bit more awesome than most Infernals because he learns really fast? ...and other infernals can be made as normal from Solar Exaltations? It doesn't seem like these things go together, unless somehow Spike exalted twice or something.

FENRIR'S ANSWER: Um, that is part misunderstanding on your part, part trolling on my part. I deliberate made it appear as though the Slayer was the Exalt Killer, solely for the sake of a pun. The Slayer is not Spike. Spike is the Infernal Slayer. The Slayer is not an Infernal. It hasn't shown up yet. And Spike is just more experienced (he kills lots of things) than most Exalts his age. And I'm not sure what you mean about the Infernal's being made form Solars. I mean, that's kind of, you know, how they're made. The canon Yozis got 50 Solar Shards and turned them into the Infernals, the Deathlords/Neverborn got 100 shards to make into Abyssals, and the other 150 escaped when the Jade Prison broke.
In this reality, first the Yozis busted one Jade Prison, got the Infernals. The Deathlords broke another prison, and fucked up, letting out the Solars. Then they tried again with a different Deathlord, and got the Abyssals. Please send me a message with any further questions. I love conversing with my readers:)
Review By [sanityfaerie] • Date [2 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Rules and Laws of the Exalted Buffyverse" from mendenbar
Review:
Still confused, but I appreciate the effort. I think I will just stay confused, doesn't get in the way of enjoying the story and it makes my life easier.
Comments from author:
This wasn't about story confusion, just helping people who weren't getting that the story doesn't use the exact rules from the Exalted books.
Review By [mendenbar] • Date [24 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Skyfire Seizing Repast" from mendenbar
Review:
Some day this will all become clear to me. Until then I am happy in my confusion.
Comments from author:
Clarity is obscurity. Confusion is understanding. Happiness is loyalty.

Victor is watching you.
Review By [mendenbar] • Date [22 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Aftermath: Solar Hero Style" from brokenmimir
Review:
This story is really coming along nicely. I like the twist with Spike -- awesome. Can't wait to see where that goes.

I tried to find some fluffy spuffy for you, but after looking at my saved fics folder, I realized that I have over 100 spuffy fics... and most of them are really angsty. I'm not sure what that says about my taste. If you're still looking I'd recommend http://spikeluver.com/SpuffyRealm/ -- they have a few thousand fics, reasonably sorted, and an active forum to help you find stuff.
Comments from author:
Cool, glad you liked it. There's tons of crazy stuff to come, so hold on to your hat...

I'll check the site out, thanks!
Review By [brokenmimir] • Date [13 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Aftermath: Solar Hero Style" from RockyWilliams
Review:
Howdy! Been meaning to review for awhile, but I read at work on my phone (don't tell my boss) and can't really review there, and always forget when I get home. I love this story, it's the second exalted one I've read, and it's a neat world. I'll have to check it out if it's still in print. I love that (it appears) Spike is the Slayer. He's an awesome character, as long as we avoid the messy Buffy/Spike relationship. Just my oppinion lol. Eagerly looking forward to the second season. Keep up the good work!
Comments from author:
Your secret is safe with me. You can get all the Exalted stuff off of places like 4shared, I'll send you some links if you'd like.

The Slayer is an Infernal Caste, by the way. He isn't the Vampire Slayer, he's the Chosen Warrior of Hell.

I'm actually a huge fan of Spuffy, but no word on any pairings in this story aside from what's already been shown.
Review By [RockyWilliams] • Date [13 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Aftermath: Solar Hero Style" from arkeus
Review:
Well, that was a fun little first season!
Hopefully the next one will be fuller, i feel that you changing PoV so often means that there is 'less' time for the core that are not Buffy, as in Xander/Willow.
Comments from author:
Glad you liked it. I'll be including Xander and Willow a lot more in the next Season.

Are you the same Arkeus as on SpaceBattles?
Review By [arkeus] • Date [13 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Solar Hero Style: Part 2" from mendenbar
Review:
Ah, confusion abounds (at least in my head) but that's fine and I have discovered that I enjoy it.
Comments from author:
Good, because we're just getting started.;)
Review By [mendenbar] • Date [12 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Solar Hero Style" from zombielord
Review:
another god chapter very interesting development's I'll have go back to my books to read about the green lady, as for Xander very interesting think mores going on here after the clues you dropped last chapter. The whole memory thing is interesting and could lead to some drama later no. I did have one question are we going to see any death nights opposed to the lion and lover sense a few were against them any way look forward to more
Comments from author:
Listen, could you please do some spell checks, and add some punctuation to your posts? It's extremely difficult for me to read them as is.

Eventually, the other three Deathknights will make an appearance, but Drusilla and Caleb are the only one's we're seeing for this arc.
Review By [zombielord] • Date [11 Oct 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Aftermath: Impeccable Patterned Deployment" from mendenbar
Review:
Giles' ego may yet be the downfall of all. Hopefully Wesley's words will get through to him before that.
Comments from author:
Keep in mind that Wesley, too, is a Sidereal, and one of similar age and power...
Review By [mendenbar] • Date [10 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Aftermath: Impeccable Patterned Deployment" from zombielord
Review:
I liked this chapter as a set you for what's to come. I'm most interested in the Xander and willow arc as I think there going to be used as pawns by other exalted powers

funny thing I today just went back and read all my manuals of exalted classes to get a better grasp on your writhing I just wanted to let you I believe your doing a really good job of conveying exalted characters in the Buffy setting.
Comments from author:
Glad you liked it.
Review By [zombielord] • Date [9 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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