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Ship of the Line: An Unlikely Hope

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Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from AceDreamer
Review:
Nicely done story, Xander works well as a character in this. Nice to see otherwise often overlooked, except as stock villains, characters like Warren well-used.

I think that trying to persuade the Navy that they should replace the name of the rank that is the ultimate authority on a ship, "Captain", with "Commodore" is going to be an incredibly difficult task. The idea that a Captain is the captain has a long tradition, and it almost wired into the ship-using nervous system. They'd also probably argue that space vessels are effectively ships, and hence using naval ranks is the obvious thing to do.

Your work is well worth reading, so I'd encourage you to write whatever works for you. This story is really quite fun, though. [grin]
Comments from author:
Warren certainly didn't start out evil. It always amuses me when people use him as a super-villain in YAHFs.

And you're right that there might be a fight (mostly Navy vs Air Force) if it were a US vessel. But since it's not, Xander can make his own ranks that may or may not have precedence in future space ships.

Thank you, though right now RL is rearing its ugly head, so we'll see what's next and when.
Review By [AceDreamer] • Date [20 May 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from gaulty
Review:
good chapter, byes
Comments from author:
Thank you. Always fun to get unexpected reviews like this.
Review By [gaulty] • Date [23 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from (Recent Donor)Hawklan
Review:
working 22h days....ok that is overdoing it a bit :)
Comments from author:
Xander shrugged. "Hey, there was a lot to do and only one of me to do most of it."
Review By [(Recent Donor)Hawklan] • Date [7 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from (Recent Donor)Hawklan
Review:
ahh i guess Jack is really happy now after how X has handled Kinsey ;)
LOL I had a good laugh about the pink saber :)
Comments from author:
Well Kinsey is still alive, so it wasn't ideal, but it was good.

And the Pink Saber was DreamSmith's idea. You should also read his SoTL story. It's very good.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Hawklan] • Date [7 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from SpacedCadet
Review:
I like this.

Please update!!!
Comments from author:
Real life issues are keeping me from my computer right now. So no writing any time soon. But there is more for this so don't give up.
Review By [SpacedCadet] • Date [10 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Sorry for the late review. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thats ok. It's nice to get reviews late too.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [16 Sep 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from greysh
Review:
nice :) I like xander with the force
Comments from author:
Thank you I think it's a cool idea that struck me.
Review By [greysh] • Date [9 Sep 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from Elleria
Review:
Looking forward to the next bit.
Comments from author:
RL issues are keeping me from my computer. So no writing any time soon. But there is more for this so don't give up.
Review By [Elleria] • Date [19 Aug 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from Delkatar
Review:
Great!
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Review By [Delkatar] • Date [15 Aug 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from Gideon
Review:
If he wants to keep up the intimidation his suit gives him he better not let any other members of the crew catch him sleeping on the job :) It might have a nice side effect of humanising him to Jack though. Although Jack is already working very closely with him anyway.
I pity whoever is the first to get Willow really angry. Even if she avoids going totally dark she is going to have a buttload of raw power.
Comments from author:
I'm sure if someone killed Xander in front of her, that would be the last thing that person ever did. Because Willow didn't become truly dark and powerful until after Tara died.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [7 Aug 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
Review:
Hmm, think a coffin would fix his body? If not that, Loki could pull it off...
Comments from author:
Coffins tend to be made to order. Unless you mean a sarcophagus? :-)
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [3 Aug 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Review:
Great chapter! Love the visual of Vader on skates!

Tom.
Comments from author:
Vader is badass enough to get away with it too,
-Nate
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [1 Aug 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from OlBear
Review:
Glad to see you've come back to this one. Really liked the way Darth Xander dealt with Senator Kingsley also Buffy asking for a pink lightsabre. Looking forward to the next instalment.
Comments from author:
Originally Xander was a lot meaner to Kinsey. I like the joking attitude better.
Review By [OlBear] • Date [1 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from DarthTenebrus
Review:
In regards to the comments about the durability of plastoid armor, how much more energy does a burst from an E11 pack versus a blast lance (the infamous staff weapon)? Plus in the hands of a trained user, they are much more accurate, as the primary function of a blast lance is mass destruction ergo intimidation. The primary function of an E11 blaster rifle is to place ranged fire onto a target with pinpoint accuracy, something a Jaffa blast lance is less capable of reproducing with much efficiency without going to over-the-shoulder fire.

In summation, I see some difficulty in a Jaffa shooter taking down a United Earth Forces Stormtrooper wearing plastoid armor as opposed to another of the same or the original Imperial-trained version. My sympathies to the Goa'uld...
Comments from author:
The E11 certainly delivers a more focused punch, but the staff weapon seems to deliver more total energy. I still haven't written a meeting between the two so I don't know.
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [31 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from removedauthor
Review:
Fantastic chapter again. I cant wait for the next one to come out.
Comments from author:
Thank you. Glad you like it.
Review By [removedauthor] • Date [31 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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