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Review of chapter "Teaser: Rewritten" from (Current Donor)deiticlast
Review:
Wow. Just. . . Wow. A truly masterful story. I eagerly await the next installment.
Comments from author:
I very much appreciate the praise. And the next installment is coming, I promise ^^
Review By [(Current Donor)deiticlast] • Date [19 Nov 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 22: Goodbye Sunnydale High" from Hyperion
Review:
Looking over the story again, especially the last few chapters, I have to agree with and see your point about the story being so close to canon, despite changes that Xander has caused with the Iron Coin, or other differences that have come up either directly or indirectly as a result.

At the end of this season and story, despite some different events, the same canon season 3 big bad still showed up, and was defeated in the exact same manner. The big differences so far being Faith is a good gal still and not in a coma, Amy isn't a rat and may not go down the road to evil later on, Giles is still officially working for the Watchers Council and Wesley hasn't been fired yet either, and Cordelia doesn't seem likely to end up in LA working for Angel and becoming a seer for The Powers that Be.

A lot of the other changes are more subtle. Xander being more into research and having Giles tutor him. Xander apparently getting some extra training or practice so he is more useful in a fight. Buffy and Faith bonding and developing a better degree of trust and respect between each other. Faith having a better general relationship with everyone else to an extent. No one thing in particular that's a major shift from canon season 3, and even added up not a major series of changes overall, but it lays the groundwork for potential future developments nicely.

Depending on what ideas you have or don't have going forward, I wouldn't expect any more radical changes or outcomes to situations to start to manifest themselves until you get up into the events Buffy season 4 or 5, or if you start looking at some of the events of Angel.
Comments from author:
This is all true - the changes ripple out, and they get bigger as time goes on. It takes a single snowflake to start an avalanche, after all :P
Review By [Hyperion] • Date [19 Nov 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 22: Goodbye Sunnydale High" from (Current Donor)Ironbear
Review:
Good touch sticking with the actual canon of Buffy coming up with the plan for dealing with Wilkins, and Oz and Willow researching and designing the bomb, rather than the usual fanon of it all being Xander's concoction.

Would have been an interesting touch if the Coin's vision of Faith had been a warning rather than a clue, but then again... I wouldn't have wanted to see Faith get munched, so it works out.

A shame that Spike was let go yet again, rather than becoming a dust pile. Oh well... that vamp always gets more second chances than he deserves.

Have to say: while it seems to be an unpopular opinion in some fandom circles, the "We're not in the business of curing vampires" statement and POV is one area that I don't have any disagreement with the Council on at all. They shouldn't be, and they shouldn't have made an exception for Angel, no matter how much it might piss off their Slayer.

Good chapter, and a nice ending even if it was a bit too close to a canon novelization despite the potential changes introduced by the Coin.


ETA: Hey, I always like the chapters. This is one of the very small handful of fics currently being posted here that's worth reading. ;)

Hmm. Naw. Not sold. Even had they decided to make an exception, given the nature of the poison - and sticking within known canon - what would they offer in that? That the blood of a Slayer is the cure? I can't see the Council arriving at a conclusion to violate their policy that involves recommending that either of their Slayers put themselves at risk by feeding their blood to a vampire, any vampire. (Add in that it's the Scourge of Europe and that he demonstrated a tendency to become the Scourge again only last year and... ) Either way, any answer they give her, Buffy's not going to be happy. And either way, either response puts their relationship with their Slayer at risk - by having her tell them to p*ss off, or by having her possibly end up drained right at the point of an apocalyptic crisis.

No good response for them there, no matter which way they go, so they might as well stand on policy.
Comments from author:
As a policy not curing vampires is just fine. And they should have made an exception for Angel. Not because he had a soul, but because anyone with a head not up their ass would have to gues the kind of reaction she'd have.

Like it or not, the Council should keep the Slayer on their side. There's a difference between complete servitude and working to at least not piss the slayer off too much. The morality of the ruling to not help angel is largely irrelevant, as is the right or wrongness of Buffy's response. The council made a tactically stupid move, and that's the real problem. They could hardly expect an 18 year old to not react badly to their decision.

As for killing spike here, well - like it or not, killing him off has ramifications, an there are better places to end him.

As for the ending being close to canon, well, we have to consider the limited nature of the coin and what Xander actually changed. The thing is, the world is made of independent actors doing their own thing, even in fiction. Wilkins isn't going to end up changing a century of plan on some minor personnel changes. And so they still needed to deal with an extra large helping of demon snake.

Glad you liked the chapter!
Review By [(Current Donor)Ironbear] • Date [18 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 21: To Hell With the Council!" from (Current Donor)Ironbear
Review:
Good chapter. I especially enjoyed Faith's reaction to Wilkins in the library. I enjoyed even more the revelation that it had been a calculated response, not the purely impulsive act that it might have looked like on the face of things. A lot of writers forget that Faith actually has a brain and she's not dumb, so nice touch with that.

I also liked the Faith/Amy interactions, with Faith protectively stepping between Amy and the Mayor. She's come a long way: that's probably not something that an early season Faith might have done for anyone in the group.

Minor nits: I think it's "Wirth", not "Worth". You might want to check the Wikia and the shooting scripts on that for the right spelling.

Second nit: "Willow let out sounded like a half-suppressed gasp of surprise or maybe horror" - missing word: I suspect that there's supposed to be a "what" in between "out" and "sounded like" in that sentence.

Okay. On to the next chapter. (I'm trying to get caught up on my reading finally)


ETA: Snerk. Why impulse after the punch? Just makes sense at that point - if you're gonna *do* violence, do it thoroughly, follow through, and don't play at it. And if there's one thing that Faith knows how to do well, it's violence...
Comments from author:
My subtitles gave me worth. Which for my money makes more sense than 'wirth' as a last name.

Well it was mostly impulse with faith, at least after the punch. The punch was to shut him up and stop him fucking with Amy's head. The arm and kneecap were more impulse, but yes Faith has a brain. For one, an idiot would hardly be as good at torture :p
Review By [(Current Donor)Ironbear] • Date [18 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Teaser: Rewritten" from Hyperion
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These last chapters where excellent. For a second there I thought you might have decided to kill Angel off, but glad to see that wasn't on the cards. I like how you've developed Wesley's character more in this story as well. He's still bound to the Council and following orders to an extent, but he's learned that actually being on the ground in Sunnydale, sometimes simply following orders or doing things 100% by the book just will not cut it.

Nice to see also that aside from everyone else, Faith and Amy managed to come out of the Graduation fiasco alive and mostly well along with the rest of the Scoobies. Having Faith alive and not in jail and Amy not stuck as a rat and not going down the road to becoming evil, at least not yet, are going to make things very interesting going into your season 2 of this storyline.

One thing I didn't see mentioned, and if you can't or don't want to go into details thats fine, but while it was mentioned that there where fatalities at Graduation, did Harmony end up getting turned into a Vampire this time around? For that matter, I know he was just a minor supporting character, but did Larry Blaisdell end up getting KIA this time around, or did changes result in him getting a new lease on life? Or are you still up in the air as far as the fate of those two characters and if it will have any impact or relevance going forward.

As a every season of Buffy seemed to skip over events during the course of the summer months, will you be picking up right where BtVS season 4 officially began when you start season 2, or will there be any more looks or events in the more immediate aftermath of killing the Mayor in between.
Comments from author:
I will have a short(by the standards of ICC - probably a long single chapter fic of ~10k words) bridging piece for the summer, giving me a chance to develop some stuff away from the imperatives of the

But when ICC Season 2 starts, it will start with the beginning of season 2 of Buffy.

Larry is dead. Harmony - well, we'll find out. :P

Glad you liked the chapters.
Review By [Hyperion] • Date [17 Nov 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 20: The Prom Must Go On" from Hyperion
Review:
Sorry for the delayed review. Excellent chapter, and I'm sorry to say, I completely forgot about reading Chapter 19 until I had noticed Chapter 20 being posted. Two solid, excellent chapters, and it looks like season 1 is about to go out in style over the next few chapters.

I know you can't or will not post major spoilers, but once Season 1 of this storyline is finished, will you be branching off to cover events of "Angel" seperately, or do you plan to keep anything Angel or LA related more tied in with events in and involving the white hats in Sunnydale? While having Xander as a loyal sidekick of Buffy is never, bad, depending on how events on Graduation Day go, I could see Xander and Cordelia deciding to take what money she has and getting the heck out of dodge, at least for a short bit of time.

Once Mayor Wilkins is defeated once and for all, assuming of course both of the Slayers survive, along with Willow, Amy, Wes, and Giles, Xander might decide that there's not much else he can do for them now that the big threat that has been hanging over their heads(if until recently unkowningly), Cordelia also does have a bit more money to work with this time around, and given the friction that seems to be there due to not being able to tell Buffy more then what he already can, I could see him figuring that a change of location might be appropriate.
Comments from author:
Well, the issue with that is that Cordy only has enough money for a UC school - and only school. Not housing, not food, not anything like that. As has been established in fic, she's going to UC Sunnydale because that's her only option (with her staying at Xander's house).

Moreover, Xander has the Iron Coin - being Buffy's sidekick or not, he can't just up and leave Sunnydale as long as he has that. I'm not sure how you can see him, as shown in fic, thinking he could just leave Sunnydale (everytime its come up, he's emphatically against it).

Anyway, as for What happens in L.A. - well, there are a lot of changes that will obviously be a factor in the course of events there - Cordelia ain't going there, Wesley's still got Faith as his charge, Faith is hardly likely to go to L.A. and hire on with W&H to try to kill Angel, etc. So always things to think about.
Review By [Hyperion] • Date [9 Nov 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 19: The Blackmail Box" from reiite
Review:
Awesome awesome chapter! Really.
Review By [reiite] • Date [28 Oct 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 18: The Risks of Gloating" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [12 Sep 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 17: Demonic Encyclopedia Salesmen" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [12 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 16: The Investigation" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [9 Jun 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 16: The Investigation" from Hyperion
Review:
Another excellent update you've given is to finish out the month, well done:)

Nice to see Mr Trick finally get what he deserves, and it was so nice of him to let the Slayers and Angel kill a few of his vamp friends as we'll. Sad to see detective Stein meet a bloody end, but such is life when you live in Sunnydale. On the other hand, I can hardly remember a vampire or anyone ever killing members of the Sunnydale Police at anytime in canon. If Wilkins is successfully defeated and his hold over Sunnydale is broken similar to canon, I wonder if having one of their own become a vampire victim might see some of the Sunnydale PD deciding not to act so deeply stupid.

It's also interesting seeing continued developments in regards to Amy Madison and Wilkins using her to do his dirty work instead of Faith. In some ways her position with Wilkins in this story seems worse then the relationship Faith had with Wilkins. If she manages to survive until Wilkins is killed, perhaps Giles might need to take her to England to visit that group of witches that helped Willow after canon season 6.

Now that Faith is likely not to join with Wilkins, perhaps Buffy and Faith could try to reduce the threat Wilkins poses by going after some local vampire nests and hangouts, try to trim the number of vampire cannon fodder that he can throw at them.
Comments from author:
That's the theory behind patrolling, after all, so definate point there.

As for Amy, well, that's certainly possible, but she's not so much dealing with magic addiction/overload as panic - essentially, she's transfered all the fear she had about her mother to this mysterious warlock. She's terrified he'll tell the others about how he gave her the spell, and how they'll react. Maybe not entirely rational, but since when are people rational when panicked?

I always did find Stein to be a bit of an odd bird - he actually seemed interested in doing the right thing, justice-wise, rather than being an irrelevant toady of the Mayor, like other cops seemed to be.

Glad you liked it!
Review By [Hyperion] • Date [2 May 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 16: The Investigation" from CageFire
Review:
Nice new chapter, keep up the nice work. :)
Comments from author:
I intend to. Glad you liked it.
Review By [CageFire] • Date [1 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 16: The Investigation" from bookworm
Review:
Well, things are certainly continuing to change, though not always for the better in Stein, Trick, and Amy's points of view. I'm interested to see where things go! Will Amy manage to come clean to someone and have some help getting out from under the Mayor's thumb?
Comments from author:
An interesting question that you will no doubt eventually find the answer to. :)

Thanks for the review! Glad you liked it.
Review By [bookworm] • Date [30 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Episode 15: Death of a Boring Man" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Glad you liked it!
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [15 Apr 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Episode 15: Death of a Boring Man" from Hyperion
Review:
Great to see this updated again, and looking forward to seeing where this goes.

Considering the various changes that have occured in this story compared to canon events, I'd say that overall your portrayal and handling of Faith's reaction to killing Finch seems reasonable given the difference in her development and interactions with Buffy and the other Scoobies being much better than in canon to this point. Having the support of Amy Madison also seems to be quite helpful, especially with Amy having recently been forced to kill her mother, having someone to talk to that has a similar traumatic experience can be a good thing if they've moved past it and learned to cope with it successfully.

It's nice to see also that Giles is managing to keep Wesley from throwing Faith under the bus right away. This might lead to Wesley developing into the person we was in "Angel" sooner perhaps, not necessarily a bad thing depending on how things go.

It's also interesting seeing the developments with Xander, and how this is effecting the actions of Cordellia quite a bit. With both of them still seeing each other, I take it no Anya showing up, or at least not under the same circumstances as canon. This could also result in butterflying away the Willow Vampire from another dimension down the line as well.
Comments from author:
Certainly all possible.

In the show, Wesley has a number of 'turbo points' (as I've been taking to calling them, in my mind) where his trajectory from incompetent fool to total badass/darker/edgier. He's always moving up towards that, but there are a few moments when the pace at which he improves increases - when he's fired from the Council, when he's shot in The Thin Dead Line, and when he gets his throat slit/his friends abandon him. Without those, while he may have improved, he would have done so at a much slower clip.


Anyway, glad you liked the chapter!
Review By [Hyperion] • Date [5 Apr 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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