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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from JediKnight
Review:
Interesting.
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [11 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from bradsan
Review:
will you please try to update this interesting start. I would love to read more.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [13 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll
Review:
So/So. You had to nerf Clark and Harry to make the enemy even slightly risky and the three meeting up on accident needs some behind the scenes plotting to make it seem remotely possible.
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [9 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from purrfus
Review:
Fun.

Bind is an unusual word choice for an American teenager. Also at the end binding attacks looks like it should be binding attackers.

Edit: There can be variation depending on area - the US is just too big sometimes - and education, but tie up seems to be more prevalent. The last time I heard the term bind, in a non-sewing conversation, it was in reference to Japanese rope bondage forms (the things you learn in economics classes... *g*).
Comments from author:
Hmm what word would be better? Non-American here so I would like to hear what they would choose to say. And tx for the last bit, thats corrected now.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [2 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from FireWolfe
Review:
Great start I hope there is more.
Review By [FireWolfe] • Date [2 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from ThePureOne
Review:
Maybe shield should make some serum that's not compatible with other people but some way compatible with Buffy and her slayer essence changes it ......just throwing something out there
Review By [ThePureOne] • Date [2 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from KeiGinya
Review:
Like the idea.

I noted one potential mistake, ignoring the birthdays (not the year since you already mentioned the adjusted time-line but the month and days), being that you stated Kitty had flag-painted lips and eyebrows. If it follows the banner, you might have meant eyelashes. Or the most normal and probable: eyelids.

Also, hopefully you'll adjust the power so it's a bit more even. Buffy didn't give a great showing when she could easily at least end in a draw with Harry under certain circumstances. Clark is also... well, he's Super, so that's kinda unfair. Maybe consider how the dynamics for Batman, Superman, and WW are like?
Comments from author:
ok corrected that bid about the eyelids...thank you for that.

and here Buffy was just out of her element, considering she normally has people who favor close-cater combat, but thats nothing training and experience can't fix. Also she had the bad luck to have no long range weapon at hand, were Harry had his wand and Clark his speed.
Review By [KeiGinya] • Date [1 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from ThePureOne
Review:
Nice chapter .....but I think Clark and Harry outclass Buffy in strength and long range attacks
Comments from author:
yeah they do..i think i pointed that out with Buffy not being able to reach the shooter without clarks help.
Review By [ThePureOne] • Date [1 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Gideon
Review:
I think they still have a good chance of getting away from the helicopter. It should be chasing the bad guys anyway. Of course they would still be identified by surveillance footage if nothing else :(
But if you wanted to choose three young Heroes who would not stand aside and do nothing in that situation then you have picked the right three!
Review By [Gideon] • Date [1 Oct 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Bobboky
Review:
nice
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [1 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Review:
Interesting setup, moving the three of them into Marvel could be good.
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [1 Oct 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from brokenmimir
Review:
Interesting setup; I saw this on Worlds She Never Walked and thought it as great, so I'm happy to see someone pick it up. Looking forward to seeing where this goes!
Review By [brokenmimir] • Date [1 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from djhardim
Review:
So far, so good. Two corrections - 1. Buffy was born in January; 2. Harry was born July 31st.
Review By [djhardim] • Date [1 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from cloudleonsgurl
Review:
YOU ARE AWESOME! :D
Review By [cloudleonsgurl] • Date [1 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from eriktheviking
Review:
An interesting getting to know you set-up.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [1 Oct 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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