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Review of chapter "Fairplay Wounds" from AnotherJD
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The story seems to be from Beckett's point of view; that makes it seem odd to have the sentence 'Javier mentally winced' in the middle.

Also, Faith is not 'statuesque' (tall and dignified). A possible alternative: 'striking'.
Review By [AnotherJD] • Date [23 Nov 12] • Not Rated
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