Review of chapter "Fairplay Wounds" from AnotherJD
The story seems to be from Beckett's point of view; that makes it seem odd to have the sentence 'Javier mentally winced' in the middle.
Also, Faith is not 'statuesque' (tall and dignified). A possible alternative: 'striking'.
Review By [AnotherJD
] • Date [23 Nov 12] • Not Rated