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Review of chapter "Vagrancy and Reporters" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Why thank you!
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [3 Oct 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Getting Ready for a Road Trip" from MageMan
Review:
It sounds like the character is a depowered Anya, that went as Fem!Tony Stark for halloween. Only Anya was depowered after season 2 of Buffy. She was then flung to Apokolips where she was killed and then cloned and had her memories inplanted. After years of training and service she was allowed to train a group from Granny Goodness's Ophanage. Once that had been compleated she went on several "missions" that she never told anyone anything about. (This first part is interesting, because I dont think I've ever seen it attempted.)

Meeting up with the parents of Superman, offing Jor-El's deranged uncle, landing on Themyscira and bumping into Xena and Gabrielle 300 years before the story started. (This part has left me scratching my head thinking that she went to other dimenions to do her meet the people behind the heros before meeting the heros. Kinda bordering on BoSD for me). *I'm not sure if the Gabrielle mentioned is the same as the one from Xena.*

You have portrayed her as really messed up mentaly, which is good. People want a mystery, but they also want to unravel it with out ending up with a bad taste in thier mouths after sinking thier teeth into it. Hopfully questions will be answered but with more questions needing to be asked, but without the story devolving into an ass-pull.

One thing I wouldn't mind seeing more of is discription of what is around the characters. Where are they, are they in a room, out side, if they are inside what type of mood is the room aiming for, is the decor succeeding or failing. What gender are the characters, what do they look like (even though a lot of these characters have been establised in the minds of nearlly ever reader, you still need to show thier body language, which is hard to do using the writen word.)

Good start, I hope to see more.
Comments from author:
Couple things here. First, thanks for the honest review saying that you like it and how you like it.

Second, I don't remember the whole mention of meeting- Oh, yeah. But that wasn't meeting Xena people, it was meeting Hippolyta and her family that long ago. Though, I may ret-con the date.

Third, What's BoSD? And I'm not kidding here on this question. Email me please! Or just leave a new review.

Fourth, Thanks for the vote of confidence and the assurance that I'm doing it right! :) Still, more is to come on that subject. Heck, more is to come, period.

Fifth, I will do my best to keep that in mind, about the body language. Can't promise success, but I will promise that I will try.

Finally, Thanks for the final bit of recommendation. In the meantime, while we're waiting for a new chapter for this story, may I suggest my other stories (with The Misadventures of SG-6 in particular, since it eventually ties in to this one's storyline)? Or perhaps batzulger's stories or ShadowMaster's stories? Even JCHatten's stories and so on. I have a long list of people I could whole-heartedly recommend to you. (Final words here: And please, don't forget to review if you read one of mine, or really any amazing story that I can think of. I'm sure that the authors, along with myself, would truly appreciate the sort of in-depth constructive and caring comments like this one that you left for me.)

All in all, thank you whole-heartedly for the amazing comment, and I hope you have a wonderful day! :)
Review By [MageMan] • Date [30 Aug 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Getting Ready for a Road Trip" from deathgeonous
Review:
This is cute, fun funny, a little scattered and disjointed, but I'm SURE it'll all make sense sometime. 'Looks to the left, looks to the right, then shrugs.' Anyways, thanks for writing this, and goodbye for now. Oh, and this one seems under reviewed as well.
Comments from author:
That's my hope too! :) Hopefully, it'll turn out well because I seem to be digging myself into a hole in my head with this story. With luck, that won't be a problem.

Please, keep reading this as I write it. I hope to see more of your reviews as I go along.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [29 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Getting Ready for a Road Trip" from Dragonbaita
Review:
Sorry for not reviewing more but I am disabled and it is hard to type .
This story is FANTASTIC!! I really like Our Lady of Iron!
Comments from author:
Why thank you! Hopefully, I can get the next chapter finished and uploaded soon!
Review By [Dragonbaita] • Date [13 Jun 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Getting Ready for a Road Trip" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work. Sorry for the later review.
Comments from author:
Don't worry about being late. As long as you read, enjoy, and review (so that I *know* that people are reading and enjoying [that part goes more towards other readers reading the reviews]), I'm more than happy! Hope I can get more to you soon!
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [23 Mar 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The clone" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work. (Sorry for the late review. Internship)
Comments from author:
Thank you!
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [21 Feb 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Exposition and a small fight" from Letomo
Review:
I'm curious how come Batman didn't recognize his own story in her little spiel. And, didn't react to it.
Comments from author:
I told Crystalblaze one reasoning as to why he didn't react, and I'll let you know that he probably figured it out by the time she woke back up. Honestly, I'm a bit more curious as to how she's going to act when she wakes up on Earth.
Review By [Letomo] • Date [1 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Exposition and a small fight" from CrystalBlaze
Review:
I loved the way she told Bruce about.. Batman.

He's nowhere near stupid enough to have missed the descriptions of himself, Diana, and Clark.

This is really a wonderful piece. thank you.
Comments from author:
Two things. One, I thank you for the lovely comment, and two, how often does he exactly react in a noticeable way to things pertaining to him? Take, for example, Batman Begins, when they bring up Batman in that conversation in the Hotel. He doesn't react in an "I'm guilty!" sort of way like most people would. Instead he says "Well, anyone who dresses up like a bat at night *clearly* has issues.
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [1 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Elsewhere in the galaxy, right at that moment..." from Morgomir
Review:
First, great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Second, I'll read and review your and your sister's stories when I can. I'm currently very busy with real life BS. Good luck with your further endeavours.
Comments from author:
Thank you for the well wishing, and I wish you luck with dealing with real life BS!
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [9 Jan 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Elsewhere in the galaxy, right at that moment..." from MistofRainbows
Review:
Some parts of the story are a touch confusing, as in I'm not really sure who the main character is yet... she seems insane... or something close... with the voices... but we don't exactly have a name yet... or really even a goal for the story... I am curious where it will end up but it's sort of one of those... ah... 3 chapters in and I can't see the cross yet... or even where... anyways good luck with grades and life.
Comments from author:
Okay, few things to say to that. # 1) I like the fact that someone actually picked up on that, meaning I've actually got it somewhat realistic so far. # 2) The main goal is just life. That's the way it is for a number of stories that I have read, though for most of those they are more towards "50₵ romance novels" variety than what I'm aiming for here. # 3) She doesn't have a name. I'll try to have Batman show up and ask her name, but the universe that I'm writing about may not cooperate with me. # 4) The cross is mentioned, though not in these chapters that are up, and I'm thinking about crossing it with another story, but that's way down the line *if* I do it. Basically, she is the entire cross for the time being. I'll show a bit of how soon (hopefully). # 5) Thank you for the offer of luck with the grades. I will take it, care for it, ... (Brian Regan never said anything more on the subject. Nothing intelligible anyway.) # 6) Will you help me figure something out for a second future chapter? I'll email you my request for help right after I've finished this comment.
Review By [MistofRainbows] • Date [30 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Elsewhere in the galaxy, right at that moment..." from trongod
Review:
Really glad to see more of this. was thinking Real Life had truly mugged you and your Muse by this point. Enjoyinhg it, want more Batman/CrazyVoicesInHerHead Lady to interact more...

Please???
Comments from author:
*Slow smirk* Don't worry, I'll do my best to do so. And, yes, I have been mugged by Real Life a little, so here's hoping that my grades in school don't mug me this semester (or my lack of musicians. *Shrug*)

P.S. -Many thanks for enjoying it so far. Hope you enjoy my other stories and coming chapters just as much.
Review By [trongod] • Date [30 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Elsewhere in the galaxy, right at that moment..." from djhardim
Review:
Okay, one thing. You have this in the wrong category - it should be Justice League of America rather than Justice Society of America.
Comments from author:
Okay. Question: How do I fix it? Do I simply go to it and click the "Edit Story" button...
I'll find out and then fix the review comment.
*Edit* Actually, you're the one who had it wrong. I didn't pick the Justice ^Society^, I picked the Justice ^League^. Now, here's a question: ignoring any wrongs (percieved or otherwise) in the titular settings, how's my story?
Review By [djhardim] • Date [29 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "She woke up" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thanks! Hope you like the rest (as it is written)!
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [19 Oct 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Prologue" from Morgomir
Review:
Interesting start. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Why thank you.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [11 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Prologue" from SamTurner
Review:
Nice start.Can't be Big Barda can it?Batman would need help since he is hurting.
Comments from author:
No, it's not. She will, however, show up later with her husband. The girl and Big Barda are good friends. Not saying how they met just yet though.
Review By [SamTurner] • Date [11 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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