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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from ShyBob
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I like this road not taken. The way you used the key events, twisted juuuust enough to make things interesting and give us a plausible B/X ending is impressive. So, are Doyle, Cordy, and Wes running the detective agency in LA?
Review By [ShyBob] • Date [17 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Bill
Review:
Very nice!
Review By [Bill] • Date [19 Dec 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Difdi
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So, one could claim Xander has reached a happy medium? =P

> Buffy grinned. “High velocity armor-piercing does the trick, it seems. And it wasn't forged.”

Problem. Bullets are cast. Casting is a forging technique. Unless that bullet was made of an advanced ceramic or plastic, then it was indeed forged. The rocket launcher worked in the episode because explosions are not forged, not because modern weapons are made in factories. The heads of crossbow bolts are cast in factories, and that didn't work on The Judge in the episode.

Were it not for that error, I'd have given the story a 10 for the awesomeness of the idea, but the logic failure rates only an 8.
Comments from author:
Yes and no. The forging techniques used in the Judge's day are quite different from the process used to create bullets today (especially the high-grade armor-piercing types). For one thing, I'm fairly sure a sword couldn't be forged using old-fashioned methods with a depleted uranium core.

Not to mention that they probably had a rocket launcher too, they just tried the high-powered sniper rifle first. As witnessed by Buffy's comment, they weren't entirely sure it'd work.
Review By [Difdi] • Date [26 Oct 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Gideon
Review:
Well done! You covered all seven seasons in one page :) I liked how there was a bit more lead in with the costume too. Xander actually had to do a bit of work to get it all together. And a sniper rifle is always handy :)
Review By [Gideon] • Date [24 Oct 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Tjack
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And in the realm of "six degrees of seperation"... On The Equilizer the actor Keith Szarabajka who played Mickey, the ex-Seal who did leg work for McCall would later go on to play Holtz on Angel.
Review By [Tjack] • Date [24 Oct 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Lovely!
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [24 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Likiglok
Review:
Nice Story, good pacing.

The reason Sweet homed in on Dawn is because she had his talisman because she swiped it from the Magic Box
Comments from author:
Or, more likely, Dawn summoned Sweet (either by accident or unknowing of the consequences) and Xander covered for her. I mean, either Xander didn't learn a single thing about demons in six years of dealing with them, or Espenson and Noxon screwed up (they wrote large parts of the actual episode's script).
Review By [Likiglok] • Date [24 Oct 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Greywizard
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EXCELLENT!!! Very well done, and extremely believable characterization for everyone.

McCall would be a very scary person to deal with, and would only emphasize Xander's best traits.

You even made me believe that Angel could be redeemed as a character. ;-)

Great work.
Review By [Greywizard] • Date [24 Oct 12] • Not Rated
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