Review of chapter "Fangs in the Light Part 2" from JediKnight
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Very nice job on the new chapter, I'm hoping to read more.
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [1 May 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Fangs in the Light Part 1" from JediKnight
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Very nice job on the update, hope to read more soon.
-Any idea if you'll be having Kara be introduced in this story?
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [14 Feb 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Fangs in the Light Part 1" from Duchess
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Hey Martin, have you ever heard of something called "tact" before? If you want an author to write more or add more story, try using it. Perhaps you could have said, "That first paragraph had so much happening in it, was there any possible way you could have fleshed it out into more story?"
That way, the author can then feel like they might be able to open a dialogue with you and that dialogue might even encourage the author to WRITE MORE STORY than would have been given originally.
This is a tried and true method, give it a shot, you might like the results. :)
Review By [Duchess] • Date [13 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Fangs in the Light Part 1" from Martin
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Your first paragraph in this chapter was awful. Show not tell. That paragraph should have been turned into a couple of chapters.
Please get the seasons of "Smallville" sorted out; Clark didn't use a black outfit until season 9
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [11 Jan 13] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Fight at the Motel" from JediKnight
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Very nice work on the new chapter, I hope to read more soon.
-You seem to have some of the later seasons mixed with where you are placing the story. And some type-os.
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [29 Dec 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Fight at the Motel" from ElldenStorm
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Lex better leave them alone. I know Slayers and the council rarely kill. But if he makes himself a nuisance or worse a clear and present threat, the Council could conceivably waste him and I dare say they have the political clout and power to get away with it scott free! He's stepping into a completely seperate pit of vipers and they have a history of not playing nice with intruders.
Great chapter though, looking forward to more.
Review By [ElldenStorm] • Date [27 Dec 12] • Not Rated
I haven't watched Smallville for a very long time (season 2 or 3, I can't remember) but I still find this to be fun and entertaining. Thank you for updating it. I'll be watching for more.
Review By [Cutiepie] • Date [5 Dec 12] • Not Rated
