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Review of chapter "The Final Straw" from Chan
Review:
Wow talk about burning through the only warning Xander wasn't messing about he was making sure that this example would be remembered as he talked to other Agencies. While Gibbs and the team get to experience some of what they do potentially to other their wake as it were in solving cases seem to have caught up to them possibly leading to more sanctions or regs.
Review By [Chan] • Date [20 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Final Straw" from meteoricshipyards
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Love it! Unstoppable NCIS force, meet unmovable Xander object.

Thanks for the story.

Tom A.
Review By [meteoricshipyards] • Date [1 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Final Straw" from sekmarc
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Very nicely done. As good as Team Gibbs is, I'm kind of happy to see them get what was coming to them for getting in the way of another agency's case. Had to happen sometime and it was very well done. I'm curious how Xander ended up the director though. Any chance of getting a little more of this?
Review By [sekmarc] • Date [5 Feb 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Final Straw" from Absence
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Very well done, I especially liked that you managed to convey a hard Xander without having him kill anyone.
Review By [Absence] • Date [24 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Final Straw" from Downery
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Enjoyed it. Agree with you on NCIS but i still love the show. Just realized it's probably because i root for the bad guys.. well.. maybe more like root for anti-heroes. Something about good guys doing bad things for the right reasons. Loved 24 because of that too.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reading.

I've enjoyed the show since it's two part 'pilot' on JAG, but it does often bug me how many rules they break to catch rule breakers.
Review By [Downery] • Date [23 Nov 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Final Straw" from kano
Review:
good story i hope theres a sequel about what happend to the team from their POV i know gibbs is never gonna see a cell that guy he shot's crazy duaghter will probably put a bullet in his head before hes out of sight of the border
Comments from author:
Thanks for reading.

It has come to my attention that there are many ways this story could be followed up, but I don't know that I'm the one to do it. This story was more an exercise for me to get my writing juices flowing again, and I'm not sure I want to take it any further, but I'm perfectly willing to let someone else do it.
Review By [kano] • Date [10 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Final Straw" from Ravenmore
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Great story! I was laughing at what Xander did to Gibbs and his team. The only one who got off scot free in a sense was Ziva. Being deported back to Israel is not that big of a punishment for her. I mean she will just go back to the Mossad and resume being a spy. As for her name and picture being passed to governments around the world, well that is simple enough to get around with a new identity and some plastic surgery on her behalf. Spy's do it all the time.

I do feel sorry for Ducky though. I mean he wasn't a field agent and there have been a number of times he has gone up against Gibbs and chewed him out for his overhandling of things or the ways he goes about it to achieve his goals. If fact Ducky has been the only one who has done this. Even Gibbs has backed down on occasion from him. He respects him that much.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reading.

As far as Ziva is concerned, I do not believe it would be as easy as you make out. I believe that a lot of intelligence agencies know what their foreign counterparts are doing, but only use that information if their goals conflict or as leverage in other matters. Having her listed on international terror watchlists would be all those agencies would need to scupper any assignment she was given by her father; even if she were given a new identity and extensive plastic surgery, her mannerisms and tactics would be enough to identify her. Ultimately, it would not be in Eli's best interest to use her, as it would reflect badly on him and his agency if her mere presence was enough to compromise any mission she was involved in.

You're right that Ducky is the least culpable of the things Gibbs and the team do, but the way I see it Xander wasn't just retaliating for what happened to his people, he also wanted to send a message to Leon and the other agency directors that he would not tolerate something like that happening again, and that meant making an example of them. It might not exactly be the nicest or the most fair thing to do, but sometimes you have to make certain to drive a point home.
Review By [Ravenmore] • Date [10 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Final Straw" from Kindleflame
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I am going to play devil's advocate here and say that Gibbs will probably seek revenge against Xander once he escapes custody and believe me he will. You honestly don't expect a Mexican prison to hold him do you? I mean the security there is a joke at best and a man of his skills will have no problem escaping and making his way back into the country. Don't forget Gibbs was in Marine Recon as a sniper so if he wanted to find a way to kill Harris he would preferably with a sniper rifle.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reading.

Gibbs may well want to retaliate against what Xander did, but he would have a hard time doing it now his reputation is in tatters. He would be seen in the eyes of the law as nothing more than an escaped prisoner, a disgraced NCIS agent who thought that the laws he was meant to uphold didn't apply to him. Fornell couldn't help him even if he wanted to without kissing his own career goodbye, Leon wouldn't touch him with a ten-foot barge pole (and he would only be an option if he somehow managed to keep his position as Director of NCIS), Franks is dead and his team are either in prison or the other side of the world. Unless he hit up his old Marine buddies for help (which would be odd as he has barely spoken about his time in the Corps or about anyone he'd served with on the show), I don't see how he would be able to manage it.

For him to be able to do what you suggested he would have to become the same type of person he had been pursuing his entire career, and he couldn't even be able to justify what he wanted to do. After all, it wasn't as thought Xander had him set up for the murder; he really did do it.

Even if you ignore all of that, and he did somehow manage to successfully kill Xander, there would be nowhere on the planet he would be able to hide from the IGD, and this time they would not be as kind as to just allow him to be arrested.
Review By [Kindleflame] • Date [10 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Final Straw" from brokenangel
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Oh you so need to make a perspective piece where the NCIS team learns of their mistake and gets read the riot act. My like of NCIS went down when it adopted the I can do no wrong mentality and no one ever gets called on it. Great story.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reading.

I don't know if I'm going to do a companion piece to this story, but I would have no problem in anyone else having a stab at it.
Review By [brokenangel] • Date [8 Nov 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Final Straw" from WmGeorge
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Can I just say wow? With a side of terrific? When writing Xander, a lot of people portray him - even as an adult - as very boyish and much too pure. They seem to forget that Xander will do anything for those he loves and protects. He's a white knight, yes; but knights are often known to be both expedient and filled with a righteous anger.

You captured what I consider the boiled-down essence of Xander in a few words, distilled for our pleasure. And what a pleasure it was. Thank you so much.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reading.

I think that when some people write the characters as adults, they pretty much write them as if they were teenagers trapped in 20/30 something bodies. I can understand why, as they were only 22/23 at the end of the show, and they only have whet they saw in the show as a baseline for how the characters would mature. Personally I don't believe that Xander is that out of character here, as I would think he would do something similar in the show had the power, influence and resources been available to him.
Review By [WmGeorge] • Date [8 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Final Straw" from AXanFan
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Interestingly you made me dislike Xander and he has always been my favorite fanfic character. The problem is you made Xander the guy that doesn't have to consider anyone else's perspective -- and made him vengeful.

I like a confident Xander, but I'd like to think that he would have handled the whole situation better if he wasn't so OOC. This was still a riveting story and interesting to see a different Xander than I usually read.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reading.

I can understand why you see things the way you do, but I have to humbly disagree. The following is simply my own thoughts on the matter to explain why things happened the way they did.

I believe that when you are in a position of power/responsibility, you sometimes have to take actions that seem to others to be excessive in order to ensure the safety of those you are responsible for. Whilst I didn't go into details just what Xander's job was, he was identified as being a Director of IGD, therefore he has to take into account the safety of everyone under him over his own wants/desires. If that were not the case, this would have been a story that showed each of Gibbs' team being taken out by different Taraken assassins.

As part of his explanation as to why he'd done what he'd done, Xander explained to Leon, who was in the know of what the IGD did, that he knew the other agencies would have problems handing over cases to them at times, which was why they had made the agreements they had, so that when conflicts did occur things could be smoothed out. That shows that, to an extent at least, he could see things from Gibbs' perspective. However, I don't know there is anything that can condone agents from one agency deliberately impeding the investigation of another just because they didn't like handing over a case, especially as they had already been ordered off it by their own Director.

Had that been the extent of things, however, Xander would not have gone as far as he did, but it wasn't; 67 people he was responsible for were killed due to the fact that Gibbs and his team could not follow orders. Ultimately, I do not believe that Xander was being vengeful in this case, but even if he were, the route he took to exact that vengeance was within the bound of the law.

I'll finish with this; if the situations been reversed, and this was a story of Leon dealing a team from Xander's agency because they had been a factor in the deaths of 67 NCIS agents because they wouldn't follow orders, I would have no problem in Vance doing something similar. In my opinion, no matter how good a team is, if they achieve their goals by ignoring the very laws they have vowed to uphold, they should be held accountable.

Anyway, that my quite long-winded explanation. I hope that helps to explain why the story went the way it did.
Review By [AXanFan] • Date [7 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Final Straw" from LFW
Review:
Good coldly furious Xander
A further option for these good agents is to let them know how many people they killed with this stunt, rather than the crimes that they are going to be convicted with.
Thanks
Comments from author:
Thanks for reading.

There were several different ways I could have gone with this, but I feel that Xander's responsibility to the rest of the people under him meant he would need to take more definitive route, which would also give the other government agencies he dealt with a visual of what could/would happen if they tried something similar.
Review By [LFW] • Date [5 Nov 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Final Straw" from Lyd
Review:
I like this story if only because it shows the less admirable side of the NCIS team. They are great at their jobs but they can push too hard and not pay attention when told to stop. And in some cases that can end with people injured or dead.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reading.

I do think that they do at times focus so much on on catching the killer, that they tend to not to notice the wake they leave in their path. My story simply takes that to it's extreme.
Review By [Lyd] • Date [3 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Final Straw" from Narf
Review:
Nice. Keep up the good work thanks and bye.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reading.
Review By [Narf] • Date [3 Nov 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Final Straw" from RedCalypso
Review:
I'd like to point out that when the Scoobies messed up, for the most part they were teenagers reacting to emotional turmoil. They weren't middle-aged adults on a power trip.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reading.

You're right about that, but if they'd been investigated then or later, it would not excuse them from the consequences of their actions. Anyway, I don't see Gibbs as being on a power trip, it's just that he firmly believes that he and his team are the best people to work a case, and will take steps to ensure that they do. Again, that does not excuse his actions, nor does it mean he shouldn't be taken to task for them.
Review By [RedCalypso] • Date [3 Nov 12] • Not Rated
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