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Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty" from FireWolfe
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I just had a chance to read this one. I actually like it a lot. I do hope you return to it oneday soon.

Fire
Review By [FireWolfe] • Date [2 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty" from Traveler
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This a good story with an original plot(at least for me). I hope you continue it as I will be watching for updates. Thanks for sharing.
Review By [Traveler] • Date [13 May 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty" from CuCernunnos
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I just read this in one sitting. This is really good work, set at a decent pace. Unfortunately, the written word is an addiction for me, so I must say...Please update soon, this is my newest drug of choice.
Seriously, great work, the original Manchester and the continued collaboration.
Review By [CuCernunnos] • Date [2 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty" from Eureka
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So what all spells and such were put on Buffy and Co.?
Hope you update soon.
Comments from author:
Still deciding.
Review By [Eureka] • Date [29 Nov 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty" from AlexanderMcpherson
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something tells me he wont be happy when he founds out exactly why magic took his vow so strongly...
Review By [AlexanderMcpherson] • Date [24 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
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As Giles would say, 'Good Lord!' It seems you will be interjecting common sense into Buffyverse! How novel!
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [23 Nov 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty" from draconis
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Very interesting spin on the Buffy-verse. Outraged Ethan Giles' (or character equivalent) plans to set things right in the Buffy-verse is not a common element in a lot of fanfiction and is a good choice. This is more than just "reform the Council"...this is remaking the Council without the contrived convenience of the First already having blown it up. Having "Magic" (capital M) acknowledge the oath was key...although I have concerns about your multiple references to Ethan Giles only having to complete a "majority" of the terms. It's an oath...it should bind him to all aspects.

Definitely looking forward to more.

The independent and virtually instantaneous removals of Spike and Angel are entirely believable in context of Ethan Giles' backstory. I rather suspect Buffy won't be overly hysteric upon learning of Angel's "death" once the compulsion spells are removed? (removal of the spells should be done before she, or any of the scoobies/Joyce are told anything further, of course).

If I have any major criticism, it's a temporary one...
The story is fairly weak on the military/President security and protocols. They are just too easily accepting everything, including two entirely un-vetted strangers that could represent an incredible security risk. Starting dialogue with and sending SG1 and 2 un-vetted strangers to the Council within days just wouldn't happen in "real" life...it's even hard to accept it happening in fiction. But, I do understand the need to move the story along and it shouldn't affect the story long-term...it did however made it a bit difficult to accept while getting through that part. It was "What the hell? They just wouldn't DO that!" time.

Thanks for writing and sharing the story.
Comments from author:
he does have to complete all the terms its just that magic will likely allow some time off to let him at least visit his home universe since its got the tricksters of the pantheons helping it. They are all sort of banking on it, no one is suggesting that magic wont enforce the entire thing, they're just sort of assuming that after a certain point he'll get a chance to sort of integrate and sync the situations in both universes. As the originator of the oath he's naturally assumed to be in charge of the integration.

The security protocols and Presidental order are actually not out of context in RL or the fiction of the universes. The "Red Phone" is an emergency measure that is in place in case of lack of time or a situation that is not only not covered in established protocols but also likely to drastically affect the country and/or planet as a whole. Basically the decision would normally only be made by the highest available known authority much less in an emergency.

As for the rapid transport and depositioning of 2 unvetted strangers... they technically aren't unvetted. The president was already aware of Rupert and the bump in the night world due to his own past association with the Watchers and both Xander and Rayne actually qualify under the Stargate program's mission statement as visiting off planet dignitaries their home planet just happens to be an alternate version of earth. Also both Xander and Rayne were vouched for by not only their arrival method but by Janus via the notes which were thoroughly tested, reinforced by the arrival of the Ancient Janus at the hearing. Besides they REALLY REALLY wanted to take Travers down! For that kind of urgent need people will ditch as many security protocols and as much red tape as they feel they can get away with in both fic and RL. I think the term they're using for it is expediency at the moment but I can't actually be sure that is the current correct term, and no, I'm not mocking you. This was a really good question/peeve. I may even re-address it in the story.


I'm very glad that you're enjoying the story. :D
Review By [draconis] • Date [23 Nov 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty" from AnFan
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Hmm, in regards to Magic's response to Ethen's vows: I can't imagine that Magic really cares much about Good or Evil (as long as they follow the rules), thus I'm not sure that Woolfram and Hart have caused an imbalance or other Evils like them (though I won't rule it out). Thus it seems that the fault likely lays mostly with groups that are not behaving like their imagined "charter" would say they should. The Watchers seem to easily fall into this description. The Power that wants to rule the world would also likely be a cause of Magics response. I wonder which others will be involved and thus get caught in the backlash of what's going on? Would the First Evil also push on this issue? Or would it play more by the rules, only taking advantage of what's happening?

It will be very interesting to see what you do with many of the situations in the future. Hope your vacation from writing has given you enough energy to share more of your imagination with us! I really like the story and look forward to reading more :)

EDIT:
Thinking on it further, I guess there is no reason to restrict anyone from the fallout of Ethen's vow. Just a need to look at how it falls out for each group. It could be that the Watchers were the first to go against what keeps Magic happy, then others noticed and after seeing that it wasn't causing the Watchers group problems, jumped on the band wagon. Meaning that Everyone could be impacted. Could get messy :)
Review By [AnFan] • Date [23 Nov 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty" from RevDorothyL
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Neat suggestion that there was something other than free will and 'young love' at work in throwing Angel and Buffy together in the early days -- possibly even more than the usual callous disregard for human suffering exhibited by the PTB and the rebellion-inducing dysfunction of the Council!
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [23 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty" from banditdoz
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Amazing I always thought the story arc and relationship between Buffy and the gang and Angel was disturbing and plain weird :-) I'm lying how mad Ethen gets to over all the thing wrong in the canon universe ;-) Really happy you back and I hope your back gets better soon :-D
Review By [banditdoz] • Date [22 Nov 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty" from Bobboky
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very good work
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [22 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty" from VillageOrchid
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It was lovely to see more of this story. Good follow through.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [22 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty" from (Current Donor)Katrina
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Go get 'em Ethan! :) And I look forward to seeing what happens next.
Review By [(Current Donor)Katrina] • Date [22 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty" from Dmitri
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Well, so far this is an interesting story. Lol.
Review By [Dmitri] • Date [22 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty" from CageFire
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Great to see a new chapter. Keep up the good work. :)
Review By [CageFire] • Date [22 Nov 13] • Not Rated
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