Lol they didn't warn them about the portal then. Pease update some more soon.

When I read the first chapter. I though Oh no not Dawn again. Not that I don't like what you wrote but it supposed to be about the three of them. Chapter two made it up. Thank you.

got it on tracking so I'm waiting for your next update.

Interesting story so far, I loved it. I can't wait to read more.

Dani

please, i want to say some Buffy interaction with tony and Loki. When they meet it just seems so, awing!! Coz they're just so cool!! I think it's Natasha who's pointing the gun at dawn's head!! Please don't make it all about Dawnie, there are too many of those and Xander's on this site. Every time i want to read Buffy center with avengers it's always dawn and Xander- it's driving me insane!! I guess it's better than ocs though...yeah, very much, entirely, with a big leap better than those annoying things!
Hope you're well!
Grace

Great so far! :)

Please please please update this awesome story this is getting very very interesting I wonder if the person on the other end of the gun is Natasha or Clint? Well I will be patiently be waiting for a new chappie and I love Buffy Dawnie and Illyria and it is nice to see them in a story together.

Wow so Buffy has her super super powers and dawns using her key power and illyria ....is illyria I love this story hope u update soon

A much better second chapter. I think you probably don't really need the first chapter of this. In the second you've explained where they are going and why. You didn't touch on why Illyria was there or what Buffy has to do with the Avengers but you can work that info into subsequent chapters rather than relying on an exposition chapter, as the first one is. I'll be interested to see what you have planned next.

There's really no fanfic per say here. You've got a whole lot of telling, but no showing. It reads like a bloated, overgrown synopsis that an editor would tell you to trim down before putting it on the back cover of the actual novel.

I know, I know. I feel bad about it, but I am working on the chapters right now. That is kind of background info. I know it should be its own story about how Buffy got picked up by SHIELD, but I don't want to write about that right now. So until I get around to making it its own story, I think I will leave it just so people know what the hell they are getting into when they start this.

And as this goes, I might delete that chapter after I get some of the actual chapters out. I am realizing that it IS just an overview, so not really necessary, since the chapters will explain it all.

I don't know. You might be right and I am just being silly. It is actually most probable that you are right... Sigh.

But thanks for the review, and I appreciate the constructive criticism. Really, I do. It was said nicely, and I appreciate that.

This seems like it'll be interesting. Looking forward to more. Well, thanks for writing this, bye for now.

This seems like more of an overview than a story. There is no actual dialog or character interaction beyond that presented third hand. Perhaps don't be in such a rush to present the whole story to your readers. You could start the story from one point of view - say Dawn, and just introduce the rest of the info as Dawn discovers it. Or maybe write an intro story about how Buffy joins Shield and how Illyria joins up with the council. Show us how it happened rather than just telling us that it did.

I totally see where you are coming from, but the point of the story isn't how Buffy became part of SHIELD or how Illyria joined the Council. This WAS a bit of an overview, bu8t it was done on purpose. I know it could be done better and explained gradually, but I wanted this out of the way so I could progress with the rest of the story. Eventually I might actually do the intro story idea, but for now I am just going to explain it and go on from there. I want to focus on the interaction with SHIELD and Dawn meeting Loki, not how Buffy became an operative, though it will be brought up by the Avengers how some five foot blonde got on the team.

I understand where you are coming from, and you have wonderful advice that I will most likely take after I get more of this done. I hope it makes a bit more sense after I have some more of it up.

Ah, well, I am still throwing ideas around for this story, so it all might change. But thanks for reading, and I appreciate the review and the wonderful advice. I thought it came off a bit explain-y as well. I started it wanting it to be Dawn's POV but it quickly changed, something I might change back at a later date.

An interesting, if very short, start.