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Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from fourmenandanelephant
Review:
I like Buffy's description of how her face looks like re Joyce's view of Jack. Also, now that Xander has unimpeachable justification and the ability to get away with it once he hears about Parker Abrams in detail (likely from Willow) I can see Parker learning about the equivalent pain to being digested by the worm thing in Star Wars Return of the Jedi in a much shorter period of time... Also, it would be far more interesting if Willow and Xander were made from donated Sperm and Egg making their maternal side up for grabs and allowing some of the Stargate women to be the donors IE: Samantha, Janet, Elizabeth Weir, Kerry Johnson, Ganos Las, Oma Desala, one of Hammond's daughter's ect. Sam and Willow logically work as mother and daughter intelligence eye color and curiosity-wise and Xander works well with Elizabeth Weir with an outsiders view, general geniality and a hidden ruthlessness and brown eyes...
Comments from author:
Yeah, if Xander gets reminded of Parker for any reason and mentions him in front of Xander, I think that particular piece of garbage will be lucky to escape with just a major beating.

And if Xander decides to get *creative* in his punishment, well... *BIG* evil grin. ;-)

I can't make any further comments about Willow's and Xander's parentage at this point in time. ;-)
Review By [fourmenandanelephant] • Date [6 Sep 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Harbinger
Review:
Oh my god... You stole a plot from a Soap Opera.

Hilarious, and I'd love to see there reaction to this bombshell. Willow would most probably faint due to hyperventilation, Xander would probably shut down, buffy... I don't know, but keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Actually, the challenge's name is "Soap Opera Scoobies", so it's quite self-evident. ;-)

And the various affected Scoobies' reactions are shown in chapter 2. ;-)

Glad you're enjoying the story. ;-)
Review By [Harbinger] • Date [30 Jun 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from twlight
Review:
You are doing new and strange things to the whole kissing cousins/knots in the family tree thing that the trio have going on in the crushing on each other with Xander, Willow and Buffy. I do have to say that I really hope that Faith and Cordy are NOT Xander's half siblings also. I am looking forward to more in this wonderful series as soon as both real life and the muse for this story allow it.
Comments from author:
When I read this challenge, I just *couldn't* pass it up. ;-)

And we'll just have to wait and see whether Jack has any more previously unidentified children out there. ;-)
Review By [twlight] • Date [29 May 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from megan
Review:
Love your story and wish there were more like this
Comments from author:
Thanks. I appreciate your review and the sentiment. ;-)
Review By [megan] • Date [23 May 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from RevDorothyL
Review:
Glad to see you coming back to this! I'll be looking forward to even more, whenever you get the chance. :)
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing. The timing of the next chapter depends entirely on my muse's moods. ;-)
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [2 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from wildcore
Review:
Ok so far i am waiting to see were you are taking this
Comments from author:
Uh, second star on the right and them on towards morning, maybe? ;-)

Remember, I'm just following my muse's direction, so none of this is my fault. She made me do it. Yeah, it's all her fault!

Unless you like it, of course. In which case, it's all my brilliance on display! ;-)
Review By [wildcore] • Date [24 Apr 14] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from theunixer
Review:
My thoughts on this one are ... slightly mixed, but mostly positive.

Great idea. It should be ... interesting (and fun, of course).

An earlier review suggested that one of them was the actual child of Jack (almost certainly Buffy since Joyce knew him) and the half-siblings is a side effect of the joining spell. So you have to decide if that is true or that they have always been half-siblings. If always half-siblings, I see you are contemplating Faith and Cordelia as well. Oh, boy. This one is fun.

The phrase (from and earlier review), as I heard it was "Vice is nice, but ....". They could decide to flout convention (they do so for other things when needed, weapons in the HS library, stealing the missle, etc., so why not here?), become more than just friends, and move to North Dakota(?) where it would be legal. Or at least discuss the idea and reject the notion both due to a sense of duty about the Hellmouth plus that they are involved with others. Just a plot point idea.

I've never really liked it when the Scoobies explain about what bites in the night as well as magic being real already being known by any of SG-1. Part of the fun in these fics is their reaction to it. One thing I haven't seen and wanted to is Daniel's reaction to learning that there is a whole secretive world wide subculture (very fragmented though it is) that knows of and deals with the supernatural that he had never been aware of before. One bit of evidence might be one of the NID agents pretending to still be uncousious and suddenly trying something. Buffy looks annoyed, grabs him one handed by the shirt front, and *very* casually lifts and *holds* him up off the ground with his feet dangling in air.

I *really* hope you put in Jack's reaction and how appalled he (and the rest of SG-1 as well) feels as to both the Scoobies lives for the previous four years as well as what the Slayer line has done secretly throughout history. I've always wanted to see it phrased as "They were CHILDREN, fighting a WAR!".

Of course, SG-1's (and General Hammond's) reaction to what the Scoobies say about the Initiative and how it was run (Col. McNamara's total arrogance just being one example) as well as ADAM ought to be shown. One fic had Xander call him "A nuclear powered Frankenstienian cyborg super-soldier" with an additional "with a design flaw. He was evil."



On the negative side:

You do seem to have a bit too much introspection and background and not enough events (aka action, even if it's just dialog). You ought to tighten it up a little bit for a better ratio.

You ended the first and started the second story too arbitrarily. It really is just one story. What happens after mutual full disclosure is made (Jack *will* need to get permission to explain the SGC and Teal'c) would be the best place to end the first story and start the second. Ending the first with a sort of "What next?" as the dividing point. Unless ... was there a particulr reason for breaking it up this way?


All in all, this is a fun fic you have here and I'm looking forward to more.
Comments from author:
Glad you're enjoying the story.

As far as Jack's and others' reactions to the news about the Scoobies' paternity, all I can say at the moment is that you'll have to wait and see what's coming down the pike. ;-)

And I also dislike the 'info dump' type of reveal to complete strangers, so that's not going to be happening here.

As far as the stories being separate is concerned, I view these as episodes, and have no problem leaving major cliffhangers when it suits me, just as Joss did on occasion. ;-)

Thanks for reviewing and commenting, it's much appreciated. ;-)
Review By [theunixer] • Date [23 Apr 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Rich
Review:
"I've found a prophecy."

The single most terrifying phrase in the Buffyverse vocabulary.
Comments from author:
Yes, indeed. ;-)
Review By [Rich] • Date [23 Apr 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from DieselDriver
Review:
This is shaping up to be a truly hilarious story. I'm very much looking forward to reading a LOT more of it. Please keep writing and sooner please.

Um, are you familiar with the old saying "Candy is dandy but incest is best"?

BTW, It's my humble opinion that the so called "Westermark effect" is pure unadulterated crap. Brothers and sisters have been engaged in sex throughout history. Kings and queens, Ancient Egypt, um, dare I say it, the south??? I'm sure it's in far more places than people admit. Do the gene tests see who is related to who and how much consanguinity there is.
Comments from author:
Glad you're enjoying the story, and that I've been able to make you laugh. ;-)

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [23 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from AllenPitt
Review:
And meanwhile Carter has probably discovered Buffy's numerous bouts with the law, stay in a 'clinic' and so on. Theft of rocket launcher, possibly. And so on. Meanwhile the way things are going, yep, Faith will turn out to be a half sister, too. Ouch.
Comments from author:
Carter's discoveries will be discussed - with many people - in the next few chapters.

And I think Xander's head - as well as Buffy's and Willow's - has a good chance of resembling Ground Zero, if it turns out that Faith is another half-sibling. ;-)
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [23 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from omnimercurial
Review:
Hoo Boy what a shock! :)

Very Funny situation! :D

The Squick factor is high in this one! :p

Amusingly enough if they started out related without the enjoining spell being responsible then the living in separate households and in Buffy's case living in LA means that the Westermark effect which prevents Sibling Attraction via Proximity and Pheremones would not activate. :eek:

This would potentially result in them suffering GSA which is exactly the problem that can occur between blood relatives not in receipt of the Westermark effect.


Very very Squicky!

Keep up the good writing and make me laugh more! :D
Comments from author:
Yep, it's the squickiest!!! ;-)

Glad you enjoyed it. ;-)
Review By [omnimercurial] • Date [23 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from CPTSkip
Review:
Lol! This had to be one of the greatest setups for a Buffy fanfic I've ever read. I have no idea of where your story is going, but I am loving these first parts. But I bet Xander's head would explode if it turns out Cordy, Faith or both are also his siblings.

I just realized what a nightmare your story actually is. What if all the girls you were most attracted to turned out to be your sisters? EEEEEEEEEEEEE! I need mind bleach. Lots and lots of mind bleach.
Comments from author:
Yeah, this is definitely the squikiest plot bunyips I've followed up on as far as the Scoobies are concerned. ;-)

And I think that it is more likely that Xander's brains would simply leak out of his ears after it turned to slag, if he learned that Cordy and/or Faith was another half-sibling. ;-)
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [23 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from KrisB
Review:
Let's see Willow's crushed on Xander. Xander crushed on Buffy. Buffy was in denial about Xander since Willow had dibs.

I actually like the idea that the NID got the DNA shortly after the joining spell and only Buffy was actually fathered by him. The other two just seem far too out there.

I think that Jack should accept the demon/vamp thing rather quickly. Daniel likely has heard of the Watcher's council. I'd love to see where you take this.
Comments from author:
More details about the Scoobies' genetic history will be appearing in upcoming chapters, as well as who knows what about what with regard to the darker side of life. ;-)
Review By [KrisB] • Date [23 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Starfox
Review:
Very interesting story. I wonder when SG-1 will find out about Vampires. Quite teh Revelation for Buffy, Xander and Willow - and quite squicky too, with the non-sibling Feelings of the past.
Comments from author:
Yes, that particular tidbit of news is quite surprising - and quite squicky, too, when you look at everything that happened - or almost happened!! ;-)

And I think all three of the Scoobies would be delighted to get a few minutes alone with the PTB to express their innermost feelings about the events in their lives. ;-)
Review By [Starfox] • Date [23 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from superbrutal
Review:
Excellent you updated.

LOL, some very funny parts. The Scoobies are probably much better off pretending that certain things never happened.
Comments from author:
Oh yes! ;-)

In fact, it is far better to believe that some things never happened. ;-)
Review By [superbrutal] • Date [23 Apr 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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