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Review of chapter "Not A Trend" from (Past Donor)KieriToews
Review:
I actually liked this story. I can see Mary reacting like that. I really like Marshall.

The only quibbles I have are:

1) Kendra was Called *after* Buffy died in 'Prophecy Girl'; so that makes Kendra Buffy's successor, not predecessor.

2) Natalianka? You're just "borrowing" from Anya's name and Natalie. Meh.

Everything else though? Pretty good. Kudos.
Comments from author:
Thank you for taking the time to leave feedback, I appreciate it. It's great to hear that you think I have gotten the characters' voices right, that really makes my day!

Look at things from Marshall's point of view: Kendra was the Slayer with whom Marshall was familiar when he went digging for information on the supernatural and found out that when one Slayer dies, another is called. He didn't know Buffy and had no idea that Kendra was called after Buffy drowned and was dead for a few minutes; he naturally assumed Buffy had been called when Kendra was killed.

Actually, -nka is a Slavic feminine suffix added to the end of a name as a diminutive (which is possibly where Joss Whedon got the idea for the name 'Anyanka'); Natalianka is a diminutive of the Slavic name Natalia, as Ivanka is a feminine diminutive of Ivan. Don't believe me? Google "Natalianka", then the phrase - baby names ending in "-nka". I extrapolated that it was a habit of D'Hoffryn's to use Northern European and Slavic names for his vengeance demons, though I have no clue how Joss came up with Halfrek (unless it's from the Northern European surname 'Halfrick/Halfrich').
Review By [(Past Donor)KieriToews] • Date [6 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Not A Trend" from Jazzibear
Review:
What a clever little story! And, apart from a one or two very tiny glitches, so very well written. I like it a lot.

It is so good to read a story from a author who knows the difference between a Marshal, an officer of the law in the US and elsewhere, and Marshall, a surname or a man’s given name, also the name of a group of islands. A modicum of research on Wikipedia reveals to me that Marshal Mary Shannon’s partner is in fact Marshal Marshall Mann, which is a splendid name.

This is almost entirely an irrelevance, but I have had the silly notion that Willow's squeeze might actually be Ms Kennedy Kennedy. Some parents are very stupid when choosing names for their children.

I suppose it is too much to hope that you might sometime write more about this crossover and these characters. I for one would read it avidly. Meanwhile I shall have the pleasure of reading the rest of your stories.
Comments from author:
Thank you very kindly for taking the time to leave feedback! By all means, please feel free to point out glitches, typos, grammatical errors, etc.; I can't improve if I don't know what I'm doing wrong.

As for knowing the difference between the word marshal and the name Marshall, I am of the firm opinion that dictionaries and Google are a writer's best friend. Spell check only goes so far and it never hurts to verify what you think is right. Yes, the creators of "In Plain Sigh" were very tongue in cheek naming that particular character and one would think Marshall's parents had a sense of humor, but if you're familiar with the series, you'll see that isn't exactly the case. I highly recommend "In Plain Sight" for anyone who loves great dialog, snark, great characters and characterizations and character growth. The writers of the show hit a few off notes in some episodes, but the general quality of this series is head and shoulders above the rest of the dren on the tube! I just wish it had gone far beyond the five too short seasons we got.

As for a sequel or continuation, I can't make any promises. I'm one of those people who can't manage a story of any length, because I always loose the thread of the plot. I tend to write when I can hear and see the characters in my mind and when they're gone and silent, it's useless for me to attempt to write.
Review By [Jazzibear] • Date [6 Dec 12] • Not Rated
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