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Review of chapter "Not Quite Magical" from Riniko
Review:
Arton likely retained enough of the genetic changes due to using the GC-161 and the antidote so many times. May not be good for her in the end as copy errors may have developed that will cause problems later. Wondering about Hermione and her magic, because if it exists then there is a change Willow may have the talent too. Likely nether has as much as their counterparts do.
Comments from author:
This Hermione has no magic. At all. Now if she went to canon!Hermione's world and stayed there a while, she might start developing magical powers. But if she was back in the AlexVerse for more than a few hours, the energy she brought with her would fade and she would be non-magical again. Ditto for Willow.

Here's the thesis for this series of stories:
Magic is just a little-understood energy source generated by little-understood mechanisms. It works in the PotterVerse and the BuffyVerse because their physical constants are just right so that energy can be summoned through the power of your own mind or body. Other universes have different physical constants, so it's a no-go. However, the differing physical constants of other universes mean that they can do things the PotterVerse and BuffyVerse may not be able to do. Just ask Superman.
Review By [Riniko] • Date [30 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Wrapped Up" from Riniko
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Good save with the anti-antidote was going for something like that. Expected that she would be somewhat protected by her suit. The overhead spray was a good trick followed by the floor spray. When Arton wakes up she will be really puzzled as to how Terawatt was able to resist her antidote. I also thought Alex might have used her own TK to send the antidote at her, but a fist to the jaw seemed to have worked too.
Comments from author:
Alex really should have 'played dead' a little longer so she could sucker Atron. Alex made several tactical errors there after making some good strategic decisions first.
Review By [Riniko] • Date [29 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Invisible Robbers" from Riniko
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Maybe Alex should look into tranq darts to use with her telekinesis abilities. She could move them slowly up to someone, along the ground an then hit them at ankle level. They would never see it coming.
Comments from author:
She has huge numbers of options. TK with really good control is a remarkably flexible power. Just consider Gil Hamilton. Or Jade Sinclair.
Review By [Riniko] • Date [29 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ceremonies" from Zorgdub
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Given the general tone of this chapter, the mood of the closing line gave me serious emotional whiplash.

:-/
Comments from author:
You may have to wear one of those neck collars for reading. :D
Review By [Zorgdub] • Date [29 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Interlude V" from Riniko
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Jo seems to be one of those that will never be reformed, because they don't want to take responsibility for their actions or just don't care. Well we have already had the first, so Jo is the second one. She will not be a real problem for Alex, but she may target Alex's family so that would be bad. The one behind her is the problem and as she is much older I don't see her not having problems from side effects, though she could just keep using the antidote till she got what she wanted, does not mean she did not get more mental problems out of it.
Comments from author:
Jo needs a wake-up call. But stay tuned...
Review By [Riniko] • Date [29 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ceremonies" from fpb
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A few points:
1) As a historian, Willow makes a great computer programmer. That business about Washington's expense accounts was pathetically stupid and ignorant when they first rolled it out, and she has not improved it. I suppose this is consistent with her character in BtVS - where she is the vehicle for Whedon's immense and embarrassing ignorance in the field - but sometimes it makes me want to grit my teeth.
2) Somehow, I doubt that the Arlington affair was quite as grim as Jack found it. Someone so desperate to be somewhere else was not going to enjoy anything that kept him there, even if it had been Pericles' Speech for the Fallen.
3) More evidence that the Macks are not Catholic. Apart that there is no doubt that her confessor would have heard about Terawatt long since - Alex being sure, if she were Catholic, that the seal of confession would have kept her secret safe - a priest is pretty much the first person whom a devout Catholic in terrible grief or having to deal with death would turn to. A shrink, if there was one at all, would come second.
EDITED IN: I am perfectly aware of the nature of Washington's expenses claims. Where history is concerned, I am your grandmother and I know how to suck eggs. I also know, having some slight idea of contemporary circumstances and context, that if that is all you have to call the man a crook, you are a blethering idiot. (By "you" I mean Willow, of course, and anyone else who would make such a statement seriously.) I will support this with arguments if I have to.
Comments from author:
[1] :D His expense account as submitted to the Continental Congress is actually considered an official piece of Americana. I've read over the actual document. There are some interesting entries. I don't remember the name of the author who turned it into a best seller back in the day [NOTE: I went back and looked it up - Marvin Kitman] but it's a best seller and it is still in print. It's a work of fiction. I think all serious historical researchers know that. It's still a funny book (unless it's a sore spot).

[2] Bonus points for the Pericles ref! And I think Jack would have complained about it even if they gave out candy and balloon animals. He really didn't want to be there.

[3] Right. I made a decision on Alex's religion, along with things like her favorite color and her favorite soda and her handedness, back when I worked up her profile. She and her family are Presbyterian.
Review By [fpb] • Date [29 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Meeting II" from Riniko
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Alex needs to be more careful about her identity. Her gloves are fingerless to allow her to use her electric powers, but that also means she can leave fingerprints on that Diet Coke.
Comments from author:
Yes. And she can leave DNA traces on the can!
Review By [Riniko] • Date [29 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ceremonies" from mooncowthree
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Hey Rinko! welcome to the story! Hope you review often so we can watch your journey as you go through this story!
PS - DO NOT READ the current reviews!!! HUGE spoiler alerts! Seriously, stay away. In fact, hopefully you are not reading this one :D
Comments from author:
:D :D Sound advice, even if you don't want her to read it. 'The first rule of review club is... there is no review club!'
Review By [mooncowthree] • Date [29 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ceremonies" from mooncowthree
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1. 30-40 miles? Not good enough! I want to see her break the Karman line!
2. Hopefully once she starts thinking a little more clearly she'll realize what exactly it meant that she could go that high that easy.
3. Looked up Urban Harvest, I second Willow's "really?"
4. It's odd, these last two chapters have been so emotional that they seem to fly by length wise, even if they are at or above average for this story.
5. Since the I quit Terawatt obviously won't stick I am more curious if she will make it to the wedding or not.
6. Heh, Az and Ultraman as bouncers at the funeral *snicker*
Comments from author:
'Urban Harvest' was the worst 'third movie' I could think of off the top of my head that wasn't just 'Whatever 3'.

And you'll see Alex at the wedding VERY soon.
Review By [mooncowthree] • Date [29 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "I Got Trouble in my Town" from Riniko
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This is a really good story, can't believe I waited so long to start reading this series. As to Pink, I love her songs and have been happily listening to them for years. She is a great role model for girls, that you used her in this story just shows how great it is. As to Alex, I think she needs to worry about Danielle Atron trying to dose her with the antidote, but at least her suit would help protect her from exposure.
Comments from author:
Yes, yes, and yes. As you'll see in a while, Alex can actually think ahead when she has to.
Review By [Riniko] • Date [29 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ceremonies" from SirLee
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fpb, I don't disagree with you. I just thought that, generally speaking, readers were seeing just one aspect of the thing, and the other aspect is relevant too.
Comments from author:
And it is not as if I have never meant for multiple aspects of an issue to be relevant. Although I'm pretty sure there is no Chekov's Multiple Personality Disorder. :D
Review By [SirLee] • Date [28 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ceremonies" from RevDorothyL
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Crying now, but in a cathartic way. *sniff*
Comments from author:
:D That makes me feel like I have achieved some of my goals for the chapter. You should be able to cheer up starting in the next chapter.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [28 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ceremonies" from Magi
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I remember when a co-worker's daughter died in a car crash, we got people from other stores to cover ours and most of the store went to the funeral.
Comments from author:
I know what Louis was doing for the Macks, because when I was college-age, one of my best friends lost her little sister (age 12 - congenital heart defect we had all worried over since she was born) and I did what needed to be done: letting people in and out of the house, taking care of gifts and food people brought, making sure people ate, cleaning up afterward, making sure all the little things got done...

Sometimes the hard stuff is the most rewarding.
Review By [Magi] • Date [28 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ceremonies" from fpb
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SirLee, the two things don't contradict each other. I have stories like that, too. Three years ago, a Year Three class in junior high school (13-14 year olds) in the town of Catanzaro was scheduled to go on an outing. Now Italian law demands that, as far as possible, children with any kind of disability should be taught in ordinary schools, and this class had a child with Down's Syndrome. The school's headmistress decreed that the disabled child should not come on the outing.

At which point the children voted not to go.

The headmistress, having started on an illegal and immoral path, insisted, as people sometimes do, and demanded not only that the Down's child should not go on any outing, but that the class should, from henceforth, keep news of such outings from him.

The children replied that in that case they would not go on any outing either.

ON the other hand, the list of people present at the funeral included Donna and much of her cheer squad, whom Alex had tutored in spite of Donna and team being bitches during the Homecoming Queen affair (some of the team had slashed the tyres of Louis' car, indirectly putting Ray at risk, and Alex knew it); Kelly, whose hostility had been broken by Alex' sheer niceness twice over even before she realized that Alex was the heroine to whom everyone in the world owed their lives; and so on. So yes, people were there to show support, but also because Alex was a terrific person and many of them had found out personally. Even Donna's bitchy remarks about Alex getting the boys by doing a poor little me act show that she was aware of the power and reach of Alex' sheer goodness.

As for Sithspit, this person must have had a VERY HAPPY life.
Comments from author:
Alex has done a lot for a lot of people. Not Terawatt, but Alex. It's not surprising that people remember. How many people in her school look at Azure Crush and remember when little Alex Mack stood up to big Jo Baker and her thuggish sidekicks?
Review By [fpb] • Date [28 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ceremonies" from ShalaDakiri
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Why is it stretching credibility? Failing to save Carrie earlier shook Alex's confidence and now she's lost someone she'd not only previously saved, but had effectively adopted. Not to mention Shar's a kid. Massively overpowered and not nearly as innocent as Alex wanted to believe, but still a kid.

She's grieving. It's not an issue of 'getting it' and moving on. I think she understood on an intellectual level, but it was a vague maybe some time in the future. Now it's in her face and she has to *learn* how to cope with this type of loss. It's going to take time.
Comments from author:
Yes. Grieving takes time and space and the chance to talk it out. Jack's doing the smart thing by putting her on the sidelines and getting her a shrink to talk to.

Because otherwise, his Significant Other would throttle him. :D
Review By [ShalaDakiri] • Date [28 Sep 14] • Not Rated
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