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Review of chapter "Battlezones" from (Current Donor)deiticlast
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Oh, shit! Terawatt cursing? It's about to go down! And I don't believe for a second that Lupo is a turncoat. Finn isn't dead, this has got to be a ruse. And wtf happened to Azure Crush? You can't do this to me, damn it!
Comments from author:
:D :D Fortunately, you only have to wait until Wednesday to find out what happened to Az. It's only 90 hours. 5400 minutes. 324000 seconds...
Review By [(Current Donor)deiticlast] • Date [25 Oct 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Battlezones" from (Current Donor)deiticlast
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fpb got me thinking: did Alex split herself again? Two Terawatts would be overkill, but totally of the awesome.
Comments from author:
GC-Divide is pretty dangerous. Remember what happened the first time: her other half was a psycho who tried to kill her. Twice. And nearly succeeded both times.
Review By [(Current Donor)deiticlast] • Date [25 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battlezones" from ShalaDakiri
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@hmaxmarius

She's not 'grabbing' the bullets. She has an angled TK shield the bullets hit and ricochet off.
Comments from author:
She might be trying to scare Danielle, or she might be working off some emotion. Either way, it probably looks pretty scary.
Review By [ShalaDakiri] • Date [25 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battlezones" from EnchanterTim
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You realize, Diane, that you're going to give all us fans overdoses of Awesome! at this rate.

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Thank you Atron for volunteering to help Terawatt work through all the frustrations and anger that's been building up the last few months. I'm sure Tera will feel much better afterwords. You? Not so much.

I agree with the majority view that Jo's 'betrayal' is a decoy. I wouldn't be surprised if her mike is on and transmitting her conversation with the defenders to the rest of the teams. And with all the gear he's wearing, it may be difficult for even trained soldiers to tell if she actually hit Riley's kidneys or just came real close.

As far as that last line, while it sounds ominous, it could also be read as 'Az has already pounded Ivy into unconciousness and has no need of help'.

Action Girl is in trouble, but Maggie has always been a dangerous opponent.

Since Cordy left Willow alone, I fully expect our favorite redheaded orphan to have freed both arms and provide a nasty surprise to Psychonaut and/or Cordy on their next visits (I suspect it'd be carthetic for Willow to mess up Cordelia's face)

Meanwhile Klar is active somewhere in the compound, Carter and Ultraman are heading up, and Batgirl and Shaman are still in play. This ain't over by a long shot.

I sort of wonder how many Orphans are left at this point. They lost a bunch in their attempts to grab Payne, Buffy, and the one sargeant's wife. plus all the casualties down below, casualties in testing, and conflicts between factions leading up to this point.
Comments from author:
Well, you could count up as you re-read the story, but they have lost a lot of Orphans and a lot of minions.
Review By [EnchanterTim] • Date [25 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battlezones" from HMaxMarius
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Diane's Comment Reply: All the bullets are getting subtly deflected to the side with tk. They're not going through her, they are just ending up in the back wall. Alex has been deflecting bullets for years now.


Out of curiosity, would it not be a more effective use of her energy to simply tk-grab the guns and point them somewhere else rather than grabbing each bullet? However-many stationary gun 'point source' adjustments vs hundreds/thousands of small moving objects.

Heck, once she has a grip on them, rip them off their mounts... or at least rip out the control mechanisms.
Comments from author:
All she really needs to do is exert a couple pounds of pressure to hold the trigger mechanism, or if they're electronically controlled, exert a couple pounds of effort to break a couple electrical wires. She might be trying to scare Danielle.
Review By [HMaxMarius] • Date [25 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battlezones" from LFW
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The Az and Batman fight with Bane is very impressive
The bits of Tera, AG and Riley have me concerned; so I am hoping for more soon
Thanks
Comments from author:
Thanks. Bats is pretty freaking dangerous. And you'll get more on Wednesday!
Review By [LFW] • Date [25 Oct 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Battlezones" from hmhughes
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OMG! I almost forgot what today was! And your right, I'm going to have to read the again once its finished so that I can do the 'oh!' and 'wow that was already planned' and 'man she's snicky', along with the 'I can't believe I missed that!' that will most likely just about every chapter.

Thanks for sharing!
Comments from author:
:D :D Today is R.E.A.D. In America Day. So get to reading!
Review By [hmhughes] • Date [25 Oct 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Battlezones" from RobHumm
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a closed door even a steel one is not a barrier to a TK attack I would of the Alex has shown see can shut of blood flow to the brain she seems a bit miffed at the moment. Has her range with TK ever been established?
Comments from author:
Her absolute limit has not been established. But if she doesn't know you're there, you're pretty safe. For now.
Review By [RobHumm] • Date [25 Oct 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Battlezones" from (Current Donor)Manchester
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The fire-wielding flyer looked at the other two and admitted, “We are all the supers we have. So far.”

Jo looked around and guessed, “So you’ve got three flyers. You’re a pyrokinetic. She’s a telekinetic. He’s something else. You’ve got that speedster. Don’t tell me you don’t have anything else.”

“How’d you know I’m a telekinetic?” the female flyer wondered.

“You’ve got a utility belt full of throwing knives and throwing spikes. You wouldn’t be bothering with that if you had something better.”

The guy she’d mentally dubbed ‘flyboy’ admitted, “Two of our infantry over there can do the silvery shapeshift, and he can hurl lightning, but not as accurately as Terawatt. Atron’s still working the kinks out of her GC-161 variants. The latest one had about a thirty percent success rate, but it also had about a thirty percent death rate.”



Hmm.... They're in the middle of a war, but Jo still took the time to identify and list out loud all the Orphans around her by their powers and weapons, and also killed some more time talking about her own personal weapon. It's almost like someone else very close by might be listening and healing up in the process...
Comments from author:
:D :D :D That's not all she heard.
Review By [(Current Donor)Manchester] • Date [25 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battlezones" from (Current Donor)Sithspit
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I'm thinking, Lupo's gotta be faking...and Finn can't really be dead. I find it odd how Jo made sure to mention each power set specifically...and that bit with Terawatt and the weapons...going THROUGH her? Did I read that right? There's all kinds of weird shit going on this fight...
Comments from author:
All the bullets are getting subtly deflected to the side with tk. They're not going through her, they are just ending up in the back wall. Alex has been deflecting bullets for years now.
Review By [(Current Donor)Sithspit] • Date [25 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battlezones" from fpb
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A question: "let's dance, bitch" sounds like a quotation - is it? and where does it come from, if so?
Comments from author:
It has been said to Alex a couple times now. And each time, Alex stomped the speaker. I was thinking 'Ironic Echo' (from TV Tropes) when I wrote it.
Review By [fpb] • Date [25 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battlezones" from MarcusRowland
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Maybe Shaman can get the velociraptors to join in on her side?
Comments from author:
You're not the first person to suggest that. :D
Review By [MarcusRowland] • Date [25 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battlezones" from ShalaDakiri
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Re: Alex

I don't think it was the GC-Divide. She's proven she doesn't need to see something to use her TK, so she probably took out Klaus from the other side of the door.

Danielle Atron... yeah, she's screwed. She probably had no idea that Alex has been pushed into "out for blood" status. We already knew Alex has been training herself to be smart in combat. It's unlikely Danielle really has much that Alex hasn't already faced something similar enough to have a counter.

She can use a TK shield to deflect bullets, has faced shoulder-mounted weapons, and knows how to rip apart electronics. I wonder how long it would take her to figure how to either jam up or loosen key features on Danielles power suit?

I'm curious as to how, raw power-wise, Alex's TK measures up against Danielle's. I know Danielle was more powerful at the start of this, but Alex added over 100 pounds to her TK lift since her intro back in LoEW.

I'm guessing we're about to find out what she grabbed from the Garage and the Kitchen before leaving? I bet there's a few powerbars, but there's lots fo random bits and pieces a creative hero can use. I mean, all it would take is a paperclip or bit of wire in the right spot to cause a short without Alex having to use her much flashier lightning powers.



Re: Jo

I'm in agreement with the other reviewers that she's bluffing out the EE. Of course, there's another reason for stabbing Finn when she did. Proof that he's out of commission. Without a body, I doubt even the most loyal Orphan would be believed that Finn is truly down. I look forward to the upcoming throwdown and hope at least a few will survive long enough to curse her sudden and inevitable betrayal.



Re: Shaman & Batgirl

I loved the Howler monkeys. Truly underestimated until they actually swarm... as the Druid from my old Pathfinder group proved. Yes, she summoned a monkey swarm.

And I loved Julies final thoughts from this section about Captain Planet.



Re: Az & Bat

Somehow, I doubt Az is in any trouble. And I like that she's aware of herself enough by now to know when she's in trouble and how she's prone to sabotaging herself when she gets angry.



Re: Carter & Ultraman

More proof of the awesomeness that is Carter. Her brain is probably one of the best weapons the SRI could have.
Comments from author:
Captain Planet! Ma-Ti stands around looking harmless, but who wants him to summon a stampeding elephant herd on top of them?
Review By [ShalaDakiri] • Date [25 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battlezones" from hysteriumredux
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Hooray for Shaman. A pity she didn't use squirrels. :)
Comments from author:
Everything's better with squirrels! Just ask Doctor Doom. :D
Review By [hysteriumredux] • Date [25 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battlezones" from fpb
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Terawatt split herself into two with the GC161 divider (if I remember correctly what it was called), and Dani is facing the murderous half. Right? SOMEONE'S in big trouble. Klaus has been taken out by the other Terawatt. The medical gear glued to Finn's body was to pretend the kidney injury in some way, and Lupo collaborated, though she hated it - and that was why she was so angry when pretending to brief the Orphans. On the other hand, Locke is not just wasting time with O'Neill - one of the minions said that he was "working on a time-sensitive project", so whatever he thinks he is doing, it needs to be done, and it needs to be done fast.

Other things on which the Collective had not reckoned were Shaman and her little pets - and that alone would mean bad trouble. Suppose she sent a march of ants and termites to stop the air conditioning and crumble all the wooden elements within the walls?

It was disappointing to find that Selina seems to be not only among the baddies, but among the commanders.
Comments from author:
Selina is not a hero in a lot of DC dimensions, so you should have expected it was iffy that she would remain a hero in this universe.
Review By [fpb] • Date [25 Oct 14] • Not Rated
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