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Review of chapter "Vine Street" from EdBecerra
Review:
Actually, it occurred to me that, while Danny wouldn't fit in the SRI directly, there would be a way to make something of him in my story - provided chapter three works as I want it to.

See, the guy they're looking for in Denver? He has a rep. You know him already. You just don't know that you know him. And Danny might be the right person to answer a few questions about our mystery man's past.

Hehehehehehehe....

(gadzooks, I love the evil laughter thing. Now, if only I can get my glasses to glitter like Gendo's...)
Review By [EdBecerra] • Date [29 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Vine Street" from Rune
Review:
Still great.
As you can tell I'm not reviewing each chapter. I'm like this on FFN too but they let me do reviews without logging in. I'm just a bit lazy.
Some might think Frank could take advantage of Alex, they don't know about Tera. But Frank seems like a good stand up guy, just unluckily single.
So here is My Idea, match him up with Laura from KPVC. That let's Alex matchmake, which I think is beyond cute. She is single too, right?

Thanks so much for writing and sharing it with us.
Review By [Rune] • Date [28 Aug 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Vine Street" from Starfox
Review:
Good chapter. I love those "casually mention hell dimensions, dragons and fighting gods" scenes! Good action scenes, nice dialogue with Frank, and some funny jokes. Well done.
Comments from author:
Thanks! Alex is modest, which is good, because who wants a superhero who is a big braggart and acts entitled? On the other hand, she is still *too* modest.
Review By [Starfox] • Date [28 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Vine Street" from djhardim
Review:
How does Daniel Jackson fit into the Alexverse?

Would you believe that he's the reincarnation of an ancient Egyptian prince?

EDIT: For those who may have forgotten, Michael Shanks played the part of Carter Hall in the seasons nine and ten of Smallville.
Comments from author:
I'm reading that line and hearing Maxwell Smart.

"Would you believe... I'm the reincarnation of an ancient Egyptian prince?"
"Well, would you believe... I'm the reincarnation of an ancient Egyptian slave?"
"Well, would you believe... I like Carnation evaporated milk?"
Review By [djhardim] • Date [28 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Vine Street" from DieselDriver
Review:
OMG! You've outdone yourself with this one. By the time I reached this point:

He slammed on the brakes. “YOU KNOW PEOPLE IN OTHER DIMENSIONS?!?!”

I was laughing so hard I had to stop and go do something else for a few minutes. Oh no here I go again... ROFLMAO!

edit: oh no, Reading the other comments set me off again. Don't you just hate it when something is that good? No? Good cause I don't either.

I really liked "HMaxMarius's" "Hollywood the Vine" naming even more since I grew up on Vine Street. No not that one, just a street in a tiny town north of Ventura, CA.

About your Cessna Ad... Hmm. Kind of hard to do an ad for a triple sonic spy plane made by Lockheed...

"Hello, I'm Terrawatt and my favorite plane for when I really need to get somewhere in a hurry is the Lockheed SR-71. Still a bargain at only $93 million in 1964 dollars. It's really Tera!"

2nd edit to your reply: Maybe a bit though, since she's had people other than her "In Group" reacting like that and commenting on how amazing the change is from mild mannered reporter/photographer into "SUPERTERA".
Comments from author:
Thanks. And yes, Alex is still not appreciating just how amazing Terawatt really is.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [28 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Vine Street" from SirLee
Review:
Bah! Sharknado! If you want flying sharks, at least go with the original:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qTLlnY4WSSY

(Yeah, that was a comic and song from 1984. The show got a number of awards here in Brazil)
Comments from author:
If I were going to introduce sharks, I would have used "Street Sharks", the 1990's cartoon in which four guys are injected with mysterious biochemicals and it permanently changes their DNA so they become half shark (human legs, shark heads, upper body and arms somewhere in between). And they find their own genius biochemist to help them.

Also "Sharktopus" which was even stupider than you would think from the title. And it had a mad scientist who was a biochemist!
Review By [SirLee] • Date [28 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Vine Street" from Vld
Review:
That was great! I loved Frank's "you made it look easy" comment... and her "it wasn't easy' reply. Loved her interaction with the guy she saved, too. And her calling Willow to get a heads-up on what happened to Frank when he couldn't answer.

Sam's reaction to Terawatt's secret ID was even better than i hoped, and the Alex using her Tera-voice by mistake made me laugh.

And i just love how you canmanage so many crossovers and still add more...

Speaking of crossovers... there's one i hope you WON'T do. I just saw a little... can't even call it a movie last week... if you ever get the idea of having sharks flying through a storm... PLEASE DON'T! Yes, I watched Sharknado... (so sue me, i was with friends, and we were a little bit drunk), even started the second movie... and... no. Just NO!
Comments from author:
Are you aware that there's a sequel? Sharknado 2 is now out. For the next time you and your friends are drinking too much... :D
Review By [Vld] • Date [28 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Vine Street" from Eureka
Review:
Finally caught up after being gone for a bit. Loved these chapters! Frank is a hoot, Sam's reaction...LOL Can't wait for more.
Comments from author:
Glad to have you back! And I'm still maintaining my publishing schedule which has not slipped yet.
Review By [Eureka] • Date [28 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Vine Street" from (Recent Donor)draconin
Review:
Huh. I've always wondered if there was a critical number of people to know the hero's secret identity before it becomes inevitable that it gets out.... :-)
Comments from author:
One would think that for every person X there is a probability P(X) that eventually the secret is released, and there's a probability distribution for P(x). But some people are more likely to drop the ball than others, so maybe it's a Bayesian problem. And are these probabilities independent? I think the answer is 'only to a certain extent' because it doesn't matter if someone leaks the secret to someone who is already protecting that secret.

Then there's the 'superhero's friends' problem. How many people know Batman's secret identity but are keeping their mouths shut for one reason or another? If The Riddler and Hugo Strange know it, and yet it's not being leaked all over everywhere, then I think Alex is in good shape. For now.
Review By [(Recent Donor)draconin] • Date [28 Aug 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Vine Street" from Zeviz
Review:
Since I keep seeing Alex refer to her top 10 scariest things list, and there is no official one, I tried to come up with one myself. Does the following look reasonable? (Am I missing something, placing something too highly/lowly, etc?)

1. D'Lazza (according to Diane)
2. Darth Willow (according to Diane)
3. Psychically induced nightmares of everybody getting killed (based on her reaction afterwards)
4. "Baby" spider tunnel (from the eggs hatching while she was placing mines nearby to getting caught by a napalm blast this was one of the worst horror movie-type experiences, combined with a couple of the closest times she came to dying)
5. Silicates in the island town hall (when they seemed unstoppable, and only the people's trap working at the last moment saved her)
6. Godjirra (it says something about her list that a plasma-breathing giant dinosaur isn't even in the top 5)
7. Giant snails (deadly monsters with an extra yuck factor and suddenly erupting from underfoot for extra horror)
8. The Blob (another of the unstoppable all-consuming menaces that was actively munching on people by the time she got there)
9. D'Lazza's super-Daniel Atron (first fight against a far more powerful supevillain. The real thing didn't look as scary after that.)
10. Giant spider or dragon (not sure which one to pick)

Notable things that didn't make the list:
- North Korean supervillain battle (just another super-battle, even if this one had more participants and greater stakes.)
- All other super-battles for that matter (monsters are at least as dangerous, and tend to have more extra points, like ability to end all [human] life on the continent.)
- A ride on the nuclear missile (it was very stressful, but stress is different from terror)
- Any of the Umbrella stuff (Alex explicitly mentioned the snake being less scary than the spider, and the spider itself barely made the list at this point. In general, by the time Umbrella stuff comes up, it's "been there, done that".)
- Actual confrontation with Daniel Atron (she had a chance to plan for it, so it was less scary than the surprise in D'Lazza's trap.)
- Maggie's death trap (as mentioned in this chapter.)

So how does this list look?
Comments from author:
This list is pretty good. You should switch #1 and #2, because Darth Rosenberg is freaking terrifying. #3 and #4 are on the money. #5 is the giant spider, because she'd never faced anything like that before (now it would rank noticeably lower). #6 and #7 are right. #8 is the Birkin-monster.
Review By [Zeviz] • Date [28 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Vine Street" from ShyBob
Review:
You've done a nice (conscious, I'm sure) job of maturing Alex over the last couple arcs. And having West, as an outsider, point out the awesome was slick.
Comments from author:
Thanks. Alex is still a teen, you know. Maturity is hard! So it's a work in progress.
Review By [ShyBob] • Date [27 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Vine Street" from dcarson
Review:
In regards to the comment about Daniel Jackson. I just figured out where he could fit. In this universe he had a theory that some of the legends were about people with powers. Some lost formula that used a plant that they made extinct through over harvesting maybe. Figuring out what that was might make dealing with the biochemicals easier. There was that Sumerian prayer (The Hymn to Ninkasi) that turned out to be a beer recipe. Sadly I seem unable to write so this is up for grabs.
Comments from author:
{Homer Simpson} Mmmm, Sumerian beer. {/Homer Simpson} :D
Review By [dcarson] • Date [27 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Vine Street" from Maetch
Review:
He's a mean green mutha from outer space and he's bad!
He's a mean green mutha from outer space and Alex may yet be had!
Comments from author:
Someone else might want to make those jokes too, you know. :D
Review By [Maetch] • Date [27 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Aerial Act" from Deadpan
Review:
I went back to re-read this chapter. Two things that tickle my fancy:

1) When Kiran Singh tells the story of the day she met Terawatt, it's going to go something like this. "I was feeling proud of myself after knocking a couple of trucks with terrorists off the road. Then Terawatt flew in, figured out more about my powers in 30 seconds than I did since I got them, then dashed off to disarm and disassemble a nuclear missile in mid-flight."

2) If any of those guys in Russia got pictures of Terawatt drinking a Coke, the add department at Coca Cola must have gone absolutely nuts. Especially if they get word that it was literally the first thing she reached for after what she did.
Comments from author:
[1] "And she really liked my t-shirt but she flew off before I could ask her to sign it."

[2] Can you imagine all the income Terawatt could make as a spokesmodel?
"I love {insert brand name} energy bars! I always carry a few whenever I'm on a mission!"
"Mmm, Ben and Jerry's, my favorite ice cream!"
"Cessna. Their Citation X is my favorite jet when I'm not flying under my own power."
"Diet Coke. It's my favorite soda. I love the bubbly carbonation and the crisp taste!"
{add in a hundred other product placements}
As long as she doesn't end up covered in little ads, like Captain Amazing... :D
Review By [Deadpan] • Date [27 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Vine Street" from EdBecerra
Review:
> fpb wrote: Take, for instance, one of the less absurd technological contrivances of the incredibly absurd Marvel Universe ("bitten by a radioactive spider" - yeah, right) - Iron Man's armour.

Well, I think it's pretty obvious that Diane was bitten by a radioactive word processor... ^_-
Comments from author:
{blush} Yes, I have been accused of being... wordy before.

If you really want the weird and wacky, go back to the 'origin stories' of the Golden Age. Some of those make 'bitten by radioactive spider' look pretty darn rational. (Of course, in the Fifties and Sixties, everything was due to Magic Radiation which would do whatever the plot demanded.)
Review By [EdBecerra] • Date [27 Aug 14] • Not Rated
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