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The Secret Return of Alex Mack

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Review of chapter "Return" from Zeviz
Review:
"Umm, that wasn't too cynical, was it? :D"

Maybe just a little excessive. :P (Although there probably would be tons of modern day snake oil salesmen promising instant results, including some on Kickstarter. Something I should consider in my story. For that matter, more fan-fanfic ideas if somebody wants to pick them up. :) )

I am actually thinking of a legitimate biotech startup. (And I will try to address the likelihood of lawsuits, difficulties in obtaining venture funding, etc.) And it's good to know that there are official toxic waste sites in the area, because this will give my characters a place to start, rather than trying to find unknown contamination in an unknown location.

EDIT: Phase? Now I wonder what Teraverse equivalents of Whateley characters would be like.
Comments from author:
Feel free to mention the weird venture capitalists, like the fifteen year old black-haired hottie who acted like she owned the Eastern Seaboard already but was probably conning them. Because... fifteen? :D
Review By [Zeviz] • Date [1 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Return" from Zeviz
Review:
Thanks for the information.

So it sounds like between knowing that Terawatt started out at Paradise Valley, the city had way more than its fair share of supervillain attacks, there was a huge scandal around GC161 shortly before the attacks started, and there is a suspicious lack of whitepapers from PVC, it wouldn't take a genius to figure out GC161's side effects, but it would take a genius (and a lot of looking for toxic waste in the area) to even try to recreate it.

Now that I think about it, did the Japanese superhero's coworkers ever compile a full list of the chemicals in the storage racks she got thrown into? (It wouldn't be nearly enough to recreate the effect, but it would give people a place to start.)

PS My idea is for a biotech startup to try to create a "superhero serum". The "take this miracle drug and you have a chance to become as powerful as Terawatt"* kind of thing.

* There is absolutely no warranty. Manufacturer is not responsible for any side effects. The included experimental antidote is provided as a courtesy only and not guaranteed to remove undesirable results. Any disputes with the manufacturer must be settled by binding arbitration in our home jurisdiction of Cayman Islands. Do not use the product if its use would break your local laws. Do not ship to locations where its use would break local laws. Manufacturer is not responsible for actions of or claims made by unauthorized resellers.
Comments from author:
[1] People are probably guessing there might be a connection between Paradise Valley and supervillain attacks, but the connect might be Danielle Atron, rather than the GC-161. Swiping toxic waste from the Paradise Valley area would be an *excellent* start.

[2] They would have a complete list of all chemicals ordered and kept in stock. Logistics rule!

[3] A superhero serum. Hmm... Kickstarter! It's at least as good as some of the stuff on Kickstarter right now! I think it is widely known that the North Koreans were buying teratogenic chemicals and radium, even if no one knows which chemicals. Some of the stuff from Dr. Deemer is in published papers, even if the 'get really gigantic if you're not a mammal' serum would not have been in anything published. So just go with Kickstarter. Then have all kinds of incentives and bonuses. "If you chip in more than $50 you will get our four-serum superpack and a quart of each!" Step 2: under a separate business name, you 'clean up' toxic waste sites by vacuuming up the loose liquids, then that's what you ship out to your Kickstarter funders. Step 3: PROFIT! Your cost: some shopvacs and lots of empty bottles and mailing costs (business class). Your gross: hundreds of thousands of bucks off Kickstarter plus millions in toxic waste cleanup funds, minus several hundred in costs.

Umm, that wasn't too cynical, was it? :D
Review By [Zeviz] • Date [31 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prom" from Starfox
Review:
Good chapter. I kept expecting some emergency to interrupt the prom.
Comments from author:
Alex did too. But remember that Jack has deliberately declared Alex off-limits for an evening, like at Homecoming.
Review By [Starfox] • Date [31 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prom" from DieselDriver
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Nope. Not a clue who the crossovers will be.

I wish I had Alex's problem with food. Bleh. On the other hand, she'd starve to death on what I can maintain my weight on in terms of calories. Advantages and disadvantages to everything. It's all a big compromise. Except, why couldn't my compromise have included a better memory???
Comments from author:
I'm not sure I'd wish Alex's food problem on anyone. It makes it nearly impossible for her to pose as a normal person Alex is doing anything away from her support. She's going to spend her college years saying 'yeah, this much food? My boyfriend's a great big college basketball player and he and his friends are always eating me out of house and home.'

Response? "Okay. That'll be $345.79 and we don't take checks."
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [31 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prom" from Magi
Review:
Diane: :D If you re-read the little teaser, you should find another clue, telling you which story it is.

Given the "crazy fundamentalist lady" you mentioned, I bet on Carrie. Thought maybe The Mist, but wrong town.
Comments from author:
Yes, the crazy fundamentalist lady. But you can call her Mrs. White.
Review By [Magi] • Date [31 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prom" from asqwerth
Review:
Whew! I'm actually relieved nothing blew up during prom and the Pulitzers!

Still an engrossing read, and the one story I check on every Wed/Thurs and the weekends.

If it is indeed My Secret Identity, it'll be a series that I always kind of linked with Alex Mack.

I'd only watched 1 episode of each series, so I couldn't recall what they were all about except that they were kids with superpowers. And that Alex had her silver puddle form.
Comments from author:
Yep, the silver puddle, all many people would know about Alex Mack. (Most people would have no idea whatsoever.)
Review By [asqwerth] • Date [31 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prom" from (Current Donor)vidicon
Review:
She actually got to go to the Prom? I kept waiting for the t-phone to ring and all hell to break loose...

No idea on the new crosses other than S. King, until I read some other reviews. Haven't heard of it. Sounds a bit 'Matthew Star' to me...

Thanks for writing
Comments from author:
Yeah, the reviews have pretty well spoilered it. I like smart reviewers, though, so I'm good with that.
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [31 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Return" from Zeviz
Review:
Thinking about Teraverse in general, I have a few questions (and maybe a fan-fanfic idea, depending on what the answers are). Could you tell me:

1. How common is the knowledge ...
1.1. that superpowers can be gained from exposure to some chemicals?
1.2. what the "side effects" of GC161 are?
1.3. how Terawatt gained her powers?

2. How much effort was put into suppressing the knowledge necessary to recreate GC161? (Especially if the answer to 1.2 is "can be found in FDA's public records".)

3. How much useful information can be derived from Maggie Walsh's published works, George Mack's published works, Paradise Valley Chemicals' whitepapers, published works by other geneticists, etc?
Comments from author:
1.1 becoming more and more widely known every day, by now pretty much anyone can learn that
1.2 only known in tiny technical circles around Atron, Alex, Jack, Dr. Mack, and Annie Mack
1.3 ditto, since Atron worked it out and gained herself some powers

2. Ask Jack, but it was probably some serious (and sneaky) work involving disinformation

3. Pretty much everything can be derived from Maggie's published works... if you are smart enough to understand them. Brains in the field can replicate some of her published work and speculate on her unpublished work, but only with massive computer power for the computational genetics (which is how Maggie does it). So to replicate Maggie's work you would have to be one of those computational geneticists with a top-notch lab and top-notch computer hardware; to make new monsters you might just need the equipment and be willing to spend a lot of time failing. // George Mack's published works are not on GC-161, so you would have the ability to make a really great burn cream or foot powder. Danielle torched all the PVC whitepapers, so only George and Danielle and Annie and Jack's biochemists have any copies. // Other geneticists and biochemists may be releasing crucial information as we speak... or may be releasing new problems. And no one has fixed that radioactive lake yet either. And if you can get superpowers just from falling in the wrong toxic, radioactive waste, then many, many areas of the world are potential problems waiting to happen.
Review By [Zeviz] • Date [31 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prom" from RevDorothyL
Review:
Things are working out so well for Alex and the Good Guys right now that you've got me really scared!

Is something awful going to start chowing down on the Outward Bound folks in Maine? Will there be Evil Orphan Hijinks?

My fanfic magic 8-ball says, "Chances are good -- as if you had to ask!" (My fanfic magic 8-ball has developed such an attitude, lately! Tsk-tsk.)
Comments from author:
My fanfic magic 8-ball is stuck on 'ask again later... sucker!'
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [31 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prom" from Letomo
Review:
Totally called 'My Secret Identity', ages ago! Will be interesting to see how the scientist from there, Dr. Jeffcoate, interacts with all the others who have studied the interactions with biogenetics and the drugs that alter them.

Also, I kinda felt the Pulitzers were a fast go-through. Granted, while that's a major moment in so many reporter, journalist and Photographer's lives, it isn't necessarily in Alex's [yet], it does give her the chance to potentially get a record for most Pulitzers, over the course of her career!

I have sort of been wondering if Danielle Atron ever tried to follow through on figuring out who Terawatt was from tracing all the females involved in the explosion at her business that last day. Just something that's been bugging me. A dangling thread. A 'what happened to the mouse?' type thing.
Comments from author:
[1] Yeah. You might even get a credit when I do the reveal.

[2] The record is (I believe) 4. She's got some serious work to do in order to catch up.

[3] A dangling thread? Ooh, that might get woven back into the patchwork one of these weeks.
Review By [Letomo] • Date [31 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prom" from ShalaDakiri
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Maine? Well, like the other reviewers, my first thought was Stephen King. Second and third (before you mentioned a town) were M*A*S*H and Murder She Wrote (both have Maine connections, neither is Chamberlain)

And it's a good thing nothing happened at the Pulitzer awards. At least there were two superheros on site, even if neither of them were in costume.

I think I'm going to pass on guessing Alex's mentor, though, since I honestly can't think of more than three fictional photographers right now and one is only because other reviewers reminded me of him.
Comments from author:
When I looked into it, I found lots of options for a mentor for Alex.

And everyone knows the truth about Cabot Cove, Maine. That old lady has psychic powers! She uses mental domination to make someone kill someone else, then she 'solves' the case so she can look like a master detective and sell more books.
Review By [ShalaDakiri] • Date [31 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prom" from Magi
Review:
Diane: Has Chamberlain Maine ever been used anywhere else?

Well, the very first Google Search result is the Steven King wiki. So it's Carrie or The Body/Stand By Me. The Body is short on superpowers.
Comments from author:
:D If you re-read the little teaser, you should find another clue, telling you which story it is.
Review By [Magi] • Date [30 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Return" from thapagan
Review:
carl kolchak would be a awesome mentor," They found out i was telling the truth, and told me to "retire" to teach, now your here and don't think I don't know why I was picked to mentor you little girl, I figured out tougher cases, but lets get to work..."
Comments from author:
Karl was a little too Buffyverse for the story, given everything supernatural he deals with. He made the final ten, but not the final one.
Review By [thapagan] • Date [30 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prom" from (Current Donor)Speakertocustomers
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The 'Hypergirl' novel could be extremely good with the right author. The set-up has masses of room for character development and with the right author the scene with the best friend dying could be devastating. If I didn't have so much on my plate already I'd write it myself. Of course it is more likely to be a publisher pushing an uninterested house author (Lee Goldberg, for instance, or someone of that ilk) into dashing something off and it will be unutterably dreadful.

I won't know the forthcoming crossovers; I Googled 'My Secret Identity' and it sounds dreadful (and it was never shown in the UK) and I can't see me knowing the other crossover either unless it's 'Lake Placid'. You seem confident Marcus will know it, and he's another Brit the same age as me, but I'll be surprised if it's not something else that I have to Google and am none the wiser afterwards.

EDIT: if, as other reviewers suggest, the crossover is 'Carrie' then yes, I'll know it, but I won't like it.
Comments from author:
Well, I'm hoping you'll like my take on it.
Review By [(Current Donor)Speakertocustomers] • Date [30 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prom" from Magi
Review:
Re-stating this more clearly: They're in Maine. Chamberlain is a nearby town, and the setting for Carrie

So, yeah, it's Carrie. (I think)
Comments from author:
Has Chamberlain Maine ever been used anywhere else?
Review By [Magi] • Date [30 Jul 14] • Not Rated
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