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Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from DieselDriver
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Sheesh. How many heros do they have? Seems like a lot of them have gotten themselves swatted. At least I was right about Jo and Riley. Hurray!

I see questions about disembowelment so I looked it up on my favorite "lookitup" site, dictionary dot com. Here's what I found:


disembowel [dis-em-bou-uh l]
Word Origin
verb (used with object), disemboweled, disemboweling or (especially British) disembowelled, disembowelling.
1. to remove the bowels or entrails from; eviscerate.
2. to cut or slash open the abdomen of, as by bayoneting, so as to expose or remove the viscera.

That's it. So "disembowel" is a long word for "Gut" as in "Gut him like a trout". So sticking in a knife and twisting it around doesn't qualify as "disembowel" as such. Maybe classify it as "Horribly Irritated Bowel Syndrome" or "HIBS" for short.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [30 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from fpb
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Asqwerth, the particle "dis-" in "disembowelment" has a definite sense of outwards and negative motion. To dismiss is to send out, to send away; to disenfranchise, to place someone outside the franchise. So I would say that definitely, disembowelment is that kind of atrocity where people's digestive tracts are ripped out of their bodies.
Review By [fpb] • Date [30 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from LFW
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Hey, I read this addition again and I have to wonder where Willow got the material to pad her Cordelia bra and shoes?
And why did she not do something to psychowhatever after she hit him?
Yes I believe that killing him is beyond her at this point, but tie him up with his shirt? Take his shoes?
Thanks
Review By [LFW] • Date [30 Oct 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Battlezones" from asqwerth
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Fun chapter.

I have a bit of a morbid question: does the definition of the word "disembowelment" include what allegedly happened to Riley, ie the guts are all sliced up on the inside but do not leave the body?
Review By [asqwerth] • Date [30 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Return" from fanreaderonetwo
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"Of course if _both_ survived, and the evil one escaped, everyone could nervously play "which one am I dealing with today", and running elaborate ID schemes.

Comments from author:

It's the ever popular 'shoot us both Spock!' scene. (Jack would just give the good twin some secret passphrases.)"

******


'shoot us both Spock, or _Man in the Iron Mask_ scenes,
"Do we put her on throne or bury her alive (in prison) or dead".

Recalling a movie final scene where Phillip orders the "imposter" (actually the real King Louis) be kept in solitary confinement, fed by a deaf-mute until he no longer ate the food after which the cell door was to be bricked up forever.

Could anyone see Bad Danielle doing that to her twin?? Answer, YES!!


With both version alive and (initially) intact (IOW still identical).....

Assuming someone smart and ruthless got hold of Bad Danielle but couldn't or wouldn't execute her, he would _permanently_ "mark her for ID" in some way she would find extremely difficult to impossible to correct or cover up.
KISSing, extracting one of her eyeballs, or amputating a hand or foot comes to mind as a probably effective method.

But at minimum, tattooing her face with something that prison or high security sensors could detect and was difficult to remove.
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [30 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from KuroPansa
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Still loving this story. You had me going for a bit with Jo. I really didn't want her to be evil and I suspected she was a double agent, but it was possible I was wrong.

Noticed a small mistake: Oxygen, regardless of its state, is neither flammable nor explosive. Liquid oxygen is a cryogenic liquid and when spilled will vaporize rapidly, forming an oxygen-rich vapor cloud. It will vigorously accelerate combustion in anything that was already combustible as well as some that would not normally be so in a regular atmosphere. Liquid oxygen may form explosive compounds when exposed to combustible materials or oil, grease, and other hydrocarbon materials which can explode on ignition or impact. So while it is possible to use liquid oxygen as a weapon, throwing it at someone and then hitting it with an electric current, of any magnitude, will do nothing.

Cheers.
Review By [KuroPansa] • Date [30 Oct 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Battlezones" from mooncowthree
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My coworker is showing off some Linux tools he uses and I was thinking "eh willow could do better... Wait, she's fictional, man I need help"
Comments from author:
Willow has *written* better tools. Oh wait... :D
Review By [mooncowthree] • Date [29 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from Zeviz
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Another great action chapter. I like Alex' plan to get Atron to self-destruct.

Just one question:
"Hanna had heard about people who were so frightened that they prayed to be saved. She had thought those people were cowards and idiots. She was re-thinking that really hard."
This is the third time in the last couple of chapters you've mentioned Hanna as being afraid, but I thought she was physiologically incapable of fear. (To the point that the attack of the Cuckoos was fun, rather than scary, and she made comments like "this is a situation where a person with a normal fear response would probably have been afraid".) So why did she become capable of feeling fear now?
Comments from author:
Hanna is not pants-wetting terrified. She is really upset.
Review By [Zeviz] • Date [29 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from LFW
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I guess Willow has worked out at least a few issues with Cordelia and creepy
I like Cordelia but I also like the idea a bad Cordelia getting her as kicked
Looking forward to more
Thanks
Comments from author:
First-season Cordy was not nice. Cordy after having her life saved multiple times and falling for Xander andsuffering through being poor and working for a living *became* nice. I don't see an Orphan Cordy who never went through any travails becoming a nice person spontaneously.
Review By [LFW] • Date [29 Oct 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from fpb
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SirLee, Halsey was a rapist and a torturer before he had anything to do with Willow. That is how Willow and her allies had him jailed. And the way that he calls all women "bitches", up to and including Maggie Walsh. Not language that suggests he could control himself when in the presence of a beautiful naked girl, whether or not she was anyone he knew.
Comments from author:
I waited and waited, but no one noticed that his nickname from William Robert would naturally be 'Billy Bob'.
Review By [fpb] • Date [29 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from fanreaderonetwo
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"Danielle let her twin have it. She hit the bitch hard enough to punch her and her grenade launcher through the wall into an engineering lab.

Unfortunately, her twin was just as smart as she was. The bitch stayed silvery and hurled a massive dewar at her. Danielle threw a tk shield up to stop it. But when the dewar hit her shield and her twin tossed in a massive lightning bolt, Danielle realized it was a dewar of liquid oxygen.

The explosion took down the wall. And the ceiling. And the labs overhead. And set off a series of secondary explosions somewhere around the second floor.

Son of a bitch, there was a munitions research lab up there."

******

I'm really hoping that the Good (or at least not-Bad) Danielle survived. Having her running around cleaning up "her" chemical and biochemical messes would be hilarious.

Of course if _both_ survived, and the evil one escaped, everyone could nervously play "which one am I dealing with today", and running elaborate ID schemes.

I'm wondering about the GC-Divide's effect on Maggie. Her good-twin getting a (or several) Nobels would be quite possible, NTM her value in cleaning _her_ genetic and biochemical messes.
Comments from author:
It's the ever popular 'shoot us both Spock!' scene. (Jack would just give the good twin some secret passphrases.)

And I don't think GC-Divide would work on any human except Terawatt-type morphers.
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [29 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from HMaxMarius
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*snort* Lemons into lemonade... Yup, note-to-future-evildoers, armcuffs must be soft and padded, not metal. (Starts hearing the 70's Wonder Woman theme-song) (Edit: Sees notes below about WW... Willow doesn't need the model... she BECOMES the model ;) )

Okay, I have now seen the ULTIMATE Judo move! Talk about turning someone's power against themselves!!! Typical Alex, /thinking/ herself out of the fight!

I think if I were Willow, I'd have stripped #Psychonaut and stuffed him in the cage with Cordelia, then wired it shut.

Yay Ayananta! NO Ayananta!!! And that just leaves one known superhero still out in the cold...
Comments from author:
In the cold. {snicker}
Review By [HMaxMarius] • Date [29 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from SirLee
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I don't think even Danielle's good side would be a goody-two-shoes. And, you know, "good" Danielle had no compunctions at attacking "bad" Danielle.

Also, regarding Willow stuffing Queen C in the birdcage... I don't think it was a *serious* attempt at getting Billy-Bob to rape and kill her. It was more like "well, let's see how you like being naked in a birdcage." A temporary distraction at most -- even with her nose smashed and her hair hacked off, P$ychon4ut wouldn't be fooled for long. He was just too obsessed with Willow not to notice the difference.
Comments from author:
Well, if Alex's evil side could be that bad, there's no telling with Danielle's good side.
Review By [SirLee] • Date [29 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from fpb
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The ultimate in obscurity is, of course, amateur publishing, especially if the project fails. Laura Lockridge is the civilian ID of a superhero character I tried to get off the ground twenty years ago. As I said, nothing could be more obscure - but if Diane goes digging up forties comics characters who lasted ten stories in the backs of others' books, then nothing is safe.

I am really surprised at the extent to which this Selina has deviated from the canon character. Not only is this Selina a determined villain, she also works for a conspiracy - which Catwoman never did unless she could head it and unless it was aimed at enriching herself. This Selina is a senior officer - the Orphans see her as of equal rank with Walsh and Locke - of a conspiracy to commit mass murder on an unimaginable scale. Something must have made a serious difference in her life.
Comments from author:
'Canon' for Selina Kyle is all over the place. There's everything from a universe where she shot Commissioner Gordon to a universe where she's been happily married to Bruce for so long that their daughter Helena is grown up and The Huntress. Personally, I prefer Chris Dee's version, because the Frank Miller version is the classic Frank Miller view of women.
Review By [fpb] • Date [29 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Battle Lines" from cmdruhura
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Actually, Allyson and Charisma all have shoe size 8 according to a couple of sites that five celebrity statistics.
Comments from author:
There is something weird about society that you can look up the shoe sizes of celebrities.

Okay, I didn't bother to do any research on this one. I just figured that canon Cordelia is enough taller than canon Willow that a half a shoe size difference was likely.
Review By [cmdruhura] • Date [29 Oct 14] • Not Rated
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