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Review of chapter "Interlude XXXI" from DieselDriver
Review:
Ok, nice portrayal of evil. Funny for her to talk about another person being a psychopath.

One, er, two things...

1. Grrr. Your previous comment was that this would be up yesterday, not this morning. I sat around checking, wondering if I'd missed the notification. Bah humbug. You aren't supposed to make mistakes ...

2. "in southern Utah, just east of Las Vegas." There's no part of Utah that is just east of Las Vegas. Not in our universe anyway.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [26 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Interlude XXXI" from fpb
Review:
Dear Tera,
I really cannot thank you enough. Your hard work has made my life so much easier, and has helped advance several of my goals. I considered sending as a present for you some of my new flowering plants, but they ate the shipping company.
Yours,
Maggie

I really think you should, you know. It would actually be a much scarier, more sinister, and more unsettling thing to do than even that conversation in the fuel-air trap, and it would have everyone wondering just what they have done wrong that has got Maggie so happy. The only problem, I suppose, is that she has never shown any suggestion of a sense of humour.

EDITED IN: Waitabloodyminute. From Maggie's thoughts: "... Orphans that it would not be smart to grab, like... Bruce Paine". Does this mean that Maggie knows that Bruce isn't just a drunken lech? If she does, the Batman is in a world of trouble.
Review By [fpb] • Date [26 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Interlude XXXI" from EdBecerra
Review:
"Comments from author: Review ninjas! The absolute worst kind of ninjas, because they're the only ones we ever run into (and live to tell about it). :D The next thing you know, you'll find the review pirates, and there will be blood."

Well, there ARE worse. Burger ninja, pizza pirates and burrito bandits. I-- Whoa. Where did that samurai chicken sandwich with the blooming onion of death come fro... I owe you how much?! Err.. I. Am. Reaching. For. My Wallet. 1,250 yen, right? Please take the kunai away from my throat.
Review By [EdBecerra] • Date [26 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Off Days" from mooncowthree
Review:
How come janet hasnt done an MRI to check for brain aneurysms or other complications yet? After all whenever she is straining she gets a headache
Review By [mooncowthree] • Date [25 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Interlude XXXI" from fpb
Review:
Yes, i know Danny Kaye and Judy Garland and so on sang the Coconut Song - my question is, why that song alone? I'm only discovering the English music hall tradition now, and let me tell you, it's the greatest comedy and music encounter you've never heard of. How about this:

http://youtu.be/Hb1VavOM2uc

(this was actually done by Julie Andrews in STAR! - problem, that movie was such a gobbling turkey everyone prefers to pretend it never existed.) Or this:

http://youtu.be/pEmPWd4TuiU

or this:

http://youtu.be/a4GdWK_WoNs

or this:

http://youtu.be/OANwX8pFC8A

...and on and on and on for decades? Why did just one song out of hundreds make it?
Review By [fpb] • Date [25 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Interlude XXXI" from Zeviz
Review:
"'Hermione Granger and the Boy Who Lived' and 'The Secret Reunion of Alex Mack'"
YAY! These are the two stories I'd like to see the most. Especially the reunion one.

' "Help! I'm being attacked by big chickens with teeth!" :D'
Depends on just how BIG the chickens are. :P

And I liked all the Star Trek jokes: The ship made mostly of cookies; Khan being "a minor figure from the Terawatt era who proved that she is immune to nuclear blasts", etc.

About the codes for missiles being set to zero, on the bright side, the fact that we DIDN'T have WWIII despite all of that is a good sign for the future.

Oh, and I guess I was supposed to review the chapter here, instead of just replying to other review replies. :P I like this interlude. Poor Khan keeps getting outmaneuvered by Maggie and Co; we get to see just how evil she and her minions are, etc. And the idea of a thank you card from her to Terawatt would be even more amusing if she actually carried it out. :)
Comments from author:
I'm sure Jack would find that thank-you card really entertaining. Not.

Dear Tera,
I really cannot thank you enough. Your hard work has made my life so much easier, and has helped advance several of my goals. I considered sending as a present for you some of my new flowering plants, but they ate the shipping company.
Yours,
Maggie
Review By [Zeviz] • Date [25 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Interlude XXXI" from fpb
Review:
A filk of the Coconut Song? How about...

Down at a villain's roost, out looking for a boost
When I thought of all the guys with me
I’ve got a lovely bunch of psychopaths
There they are all marching behind me
Big ones, small ones, some as big as your head
Let'em loose, I can use, all their turgid burgid gurgic psychopathee.
And that is what I thought
I’ve got a lovely bunch of psychopaths
Every one thinks I'll make him rich
And so they'll start up strifes, and have fun taking lives
Singing rollerbollerball now use boiling pitch
Rollerbollerball now use boiling pitch
Rollerbollerball use up all the pitch
Listen to it sizz, crackle pop and hiss,
Singing rollerbollerball now use all the pitch
I’ve got a lovely bunch of psychopaths (they’re lovely)
Here they come all marching in a row (one, two, three, four)
Big ones, small ones, some as big as your head (and bigger)
Let them all loose for fun and abuse
That’s what I thought back then
I’ve got a lovely bunch of psychopaths
They all think that I shall make them rich
But guess what my friends, that's not how it ends
Singing rollerbollerball now use boiling pitch
Rollerbollerball now use boiling pitch
Rollerbollerball use up all the pitch
Listen to it sizz, crackle pop and hiss,
Singing rollerbollerball now use all the pitch

(I wonder why, of all the dozens hilarious and tuneful English music hall songs, this is the only one that's gone around the world?)
Comments from author:
Very nice!

(I think one of the reasons the song is still known is it was a huge hit for two different American singers, and then was sung in the last Judy Garland movie so it became even more widespread. Also, it has been used in Looney Tunes and some similar fare, so it remains in the public's ear.)
Review By [fpb] • Date [25 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Interlude XXXI" from (Current Donor)vidicon
Review:
Ah, I have a lovely bunch of psychopaths...

Such sweet people.

Thanks for writing

Edit: Success! Muahahahaha! (That was exactly what I was thinking while I was typing.)
Comments from author:
Now my brain is writing a filk of "I've got a lovely bunch of cocoanuts" instead of doing what it's supposed to today.
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [25 Jul 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Interlude XXXI" from Jervic
Review:
Hmm.. is it just me, or is there a definite Jurassic Park vibe going on here? Personally, I think that that crossover is inevitable, given the whole geneticists gone wild theme of the original book.



*edit* bloody ninjas
Comments from author:
Review ninjas! The absolute worst kind of ninjas, because they're the only ones we ever run into (and live to tell about it). :D The next thing you know, you'll find the review pirates, and there will be blood.
Review By [Jervic] • Date [25 Jul 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Interlude XXXI" from HMaxMarius
Review:
*Starts looking around for Sam Neill, Laura Dern and Jeff Goldblum*

Hey, you went to the Crichton well once, why not again? =D
Comments from author:
Crichton is good for wacky concepts and the whole 'I can claim this is just around the corner from being real' idea.
Review By [HMaxMarius] • Date [25 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Interlude XXXI" from VillageOrchid
Review:
I had been contemplating your comment in a review that you might continue to write in this universe after the main story is over, but I see you are very focused still on this story. Good POV switch to show character reactions and forward the plot.
Comments from author:
Oh yeah, this story will finish first before I move to new stuff. I have about a dozen scenes to finish and polish, including tweaking the epilogue to my own satisfaction. Then the hard questions: can I make things work with a meaningful middle and a good conclusion? Here's a big hint. The working titles for my two pieces are 'Hermione Granger and the Boy Who Lived' and 'The Secret Reunion of Alex Mack'. Don't count on seeing either one right away.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [25 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Interlude XXXI" from ColBlack
Review:
Hmmm...lowering someone with a winch to feed them to something? I think Maggie has got hold of the Ravenous Bugblatter Beast of Traal.
Comments from author:
Well, it's not a sarlaac. :D
Review By [ColBlack] • Date [25 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Interlude XXXI" from fpb
Review:
I don't know where you are going from here, but if I were in your place, Maggie would be working her own destruction. You will not live long if every person in your base knows that you kill even privileged persons in horrible ways. The screams of a dying man DO NOT reinforce anyone's loyalty; they only make anyone think "that could be me over there." Stalin may have been an exception, but Stalin had been party secretary since 1919 and had spent fifteen years creating new generations of millions of people who were loyal to him alone before he set out systematically destroying all the remaining Old Bolsheviks. So the number of people devoted to him and in debt to him was vastly superior to those who would have been, had they acted in time, both able to see through him and able to do something about him. What is more, he made sure that not every one of his victims could be shown to have been killed by him - Kirov's murder was actually used as an excuse to crack down, and Muenzenberg vanished in France and his corpse was only found when it was far too late for forensics. Maggie, on the other hand, is a latecomer to the Collective - no later than one year ago she was trying to be hired by O'Neill and the SRI! - and basically owes her position to her father. Disloyal bastard or no, she should never have had Karenin publicly slaughtered. And she should never have been the only one to come out alive out of the secret lab in Pennsylvania. And she should never have done any one of a dozen other things that showed that nobody was safe in her neighbourhood. If the structure ever starts creaking, everyone in it will turn on her, and probably on her father too; in fact, given the notoriety she has achieved in the great world above, she will make an excellent scapegoat for everyone else's crimes.
Comments from author:
Maggie does have her own plans, but they primarily consist of arranging so she has more free time in her labs. She already told Alex that she definitely does not want to get stuck having to run things or be The Big Boss.
Review By [fpb] • Date [25 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Interlude XXXI" from Starfox
Review:
Evil Maggie strikes again. A good intermezzo filled with bad people.
Comments from author:
Evil Maggie is evil. :D Yeah, and she's still pretty much the same as the canon Walsh, only possibly more competent.
Review By [Starfox] • Date [25 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Interlude XXXI" from Rune
Review:
Short but that's ok.
I do hope that most if not all of the Collective is shot on sight.
Some people are just to dangerous to send to jail.

And "lost in space", was that a ref to the old tv show, well done.
Comments from author:
It was really just a convenient turn of phrase. But now I've got Jonathan Harris as Dr. Smith in my head. "OH THE PAIN! THE PAIN!"
Review By [Rune] • Date [25 Jul 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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