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Review of chapter "Return" from FireWolfe
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I am so hoping the raptors get in. I absolutely love the idea of them playing hero. I mean they see AG as one of them and I so hope Maggie gets eaten. Fourth floor so what they can climb or maybe they have flying relatives lol. Come on the dino's have to be good for something. I mean really they are so cool. I can so see Alex wanting one as a pet or Willow. Love the neibors all having and hidding powers that is absolutely funny as hell. I so look forward to them working out as a neibor hood watch group. Criminals beware lol. The idea of a little old lady with laser Eyes is hilarious. I hope you let the german orphan gain redemptions sounds like the poor guys been punished enough putting up with Danielle. Still say you should bring Shar in to kick ass and take names really she could have survived eye of the storm and all that.
Review By [FireWolfe] • Date [22 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Confrontations" from MarcusRowland
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Oh good grief - I just realised who, or rather what, will probably be rescuing Hanna.

But will Jack let her keep them?

later - They could form a pyramid against the wall... Or build a catapult... Or use their claws as pitons...
Comments from author:
She's up on the third or fourth floor, well out of raptor reach.
Review By [MarcusRowland] • Date [22 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Confrontations" from HMaxMarius
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Hmmm... I think after this the Macks should organize a 'community meeting' and suggest fencing and gating the neighborhood. ;) But what to call it?

X-Acres?
Metaville?
The Village (with obligatory umbrellaed high-wheeler bike image)
Review By [HMaxMarius] • Date [22 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Confrontations" from Dragan
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Looks like Tera is going to have some combat Therapy time with Dani-kins ;p

I do have to wonder if Maggie might have forgotten that there is an invisible sniper not far away. :)
Comments from author:
Maggie never forgets anything! And she never makes mistakes! And she has absolute control over every one of her creations! And... other stuff! :D
Review By [Dragan] • Date [22 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Confrontations" from RobHumm
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HA I thought there might be a super powered response from the locals I was reminded of legion story ( from the cartoon I think) where some villain just kicked a cat on New Krypton just as Brainiac 5 turned the sun yellow not a good move.

really enjoying this story but I might have to keep notes to what going on where.
Comments from author:
Well, you might have to re-read the big finale once it wraps up, so you can keep track. The 'every three or four days' thing makes that more difficult.
Review By [RobHumm] • Date [22 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Confrontations" from ShalaDakiri
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1) Enjoyed watching the SRI folks tear through stuff. Alex really would be a scary saboteur since it would be near impossible to prove she'd ever been there.

2) I'm curious as to what kind of disinformation Jack filtered through Eddings to the Imperial forces. Eddings might find himself in trouble from that end if anyone thinks he flipped.

2) Of the names Carter came up with, I think Impact was the best. I came up with Blastwave as a possible code name.

3) Ouch on Action Girl. Don't know what Wacky Maggie zapped her with, but it sounds nasty.

4) I'm guessing Batman's refusal to use Baker is due to knowing it's also Azure Crush's real last name?

5) I'd wondered when Klar would make his move, since the whole point of Charlie taking the invisibility formula was to keep Eddings from noticing the real one board the chopper.

5a) I laughed about Eddings thoughts on Klar and Action Girl last chapter, since the guy he 'saw' actually was her boyfriend.

6) Looks like Vince forgot to be careful what he wished for. Dave Watts showed up as planned.

7) Loved the neighbors coming out to help.

8) I'm now wondering if Paradise Valley might end up as the location of a proto-Sky High for kids to learn to responsibly use superpowers.
Comments from author:
Well, we're now going to have to worry about just how many people in Paradise Valley have superpowers. Oh wait, I already worried about that. :D
Review By [ShalaDakiri] • Date [22 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Confrontations" from Zeviz
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" The boy calmly asked, “I wonder how many other people in your neighborhood have powers?”

Four other people nervously raised their hands."
Perfect!

That scene was very fun, and I guess I should have expected something like this with all the hints you've dropped about the amount of contamination in Paradise Valley.

And it looks like Alex came prepared for a death trap, but Hanna wasn't. Which sounds consistent with what we've seen so far, but I hope Hanna also has some surprises up her sleeve.
Comments from author:
It looks like Alex might be ready to rumble.
Review By [Zeviz] • Date [22 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Confrontations" from hamishog
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That's why there's a difference between a neighborhood and a community. Or maybe just between where you live and living somewhere. Oh, who cares. It takes a village and a place where your neighbors confront people with submachineguns is definitely a village in my book.
Have you ever heard the song "Hero" by Nickelback?
It looks bad for Action Girl but Charlie's out there somewhere and he's not going to be happy with Maggie who seems to have the bad guy trait thinks she's so clever. She may be smart but she's her own worst enemy. Or she would be if she weren't such a jerk.
It may be that I don't have a lick o' sense and I know bad guys win all the time but it seems to me that you just can't let that stand and here I'm not talking about you as an author. I'm talking about people. People are so in love with grey. I have two sayings that I really like.
There's black and there's white and there's dirty white. There is no grey. from Granny Weatherwax in Terry Pratchett's Carpe Jugulum.
You can't stop a man who knows he's right and just keeps on coming. Captain Bill McDonald, Texas Rangers.
Comments from author:
And I've been setting up Alex's neighborhood for quite some time now.
Review By [hamishog] • Date [22 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Confrontations" from cwolf
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Interesting. I wonder how many secretly saw Alex before they set her up with the below ground route and entrance. How many people have been pretending to not know who she is?

At any rate, the town just stepped up.
Comments from author:
There do seem to be a fair number of people in town who have figured out Terawatt's secret identity.
Review By [cwolf] • Date [22 Oct 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Confrontations" from fpb
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Uh, VillageOrchid, I take it you're not aware that in most of the world's languages "fig" or its equivalent is something extremely objectionable and female? I think Samantha would do well to accept Boom Boom and grin. (In a story I am writing, that is waiting for the denouement to see what Diane does, she is Hammer and a living Carrie White is Bludgeon.)
Comments from author:
Hammer and Anvil! "We put the supervillain in between us, and then..."
Review By [fpb] • Date [22 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Confrontations" from fpb
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A little quotation for Maggie and especially Danielle:

"She really is that nice too. All the time. I know people that fake being nice, but she really is that way. Get her in a fight though, and she will wreck you, I don't care how tough you think you are.... I have seen that woman go balls to the wall against an army and be the one standing at the end."
- Azure Crush, in Batzulger's It Is To Laugh, ch.21

And we still don't know what her big crazy idea was...

Department of Bitter Irony: Only after poor little Pyre is dead do we get to find that Paradise Valley would have been an uncommonly good place for her to grow.
Comments from author:
Well, I hope that Paradise Valley would have been a good place for her... right up until she fell in a creek and got a dose of GC-161.
Review By [fpb] • Date [22 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Confrontations" from VillageOrchid
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Good action developments and a demonstration of the neighborhood watch league of substitute superheroes. They can form a support group - in more way than one. I liked the humor in Carter's thought process and that she's smart enough to think about that stuff without getting too distracted. As for nick-names, Fig for "Newton" seems the least objectionable.
Comments from author:
I think you can count on Jack not picking the least-objectionable nickname.

"Ba'al? As in bocce?" ~ Jack O'Neill while being interrogated by a certain Goua'uld
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [22 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Confrontations" from Magi
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Okay, so that bit who-knows-how-many chapters ago about 10% or more of Paradise Valley residents being GC-161 cases finally mattered.

Carter's got a lot more power than I though, her TK is just blasts but they're Carrie White-level power.

Marsha managed to control her power!!! Yay!!

Action Girl's in trouble. Anyone taking bets on how long it takes the raptors to rescue her?

Finn and Lupo just walked off-screen to...something. Cue offscren mayhem, and the reveal as to which side Lupo is on.

Guess we have to wait to see what happens with Jack "Torture by Power Point" O'Neill and Willow "Naked and Pissed Off" Rosenberg.

As people have noted, the Collective has pissed a lot of very powerful people off. You sow the wind, you reap the whirlwind. Perhaps literally.

I'm going to nitpick the AA weapons you've mentioned. They've got Strelas/SA-7, which are Vietnam era junk, and S-300/400, which are bleeding edge, hundred-million dollar weapons. You'd be better off IMHO with SA-11/SA-17/Buk(Heavy SAM), SA-18 Igla(MANPAD), and/or the SA-19/9K22 Tunguska (SAM/SPAAG combo)

Oh, I hated the first season of "24" too. Watched the 8th (Live Another Day), which was good. And Diane, the mountain lion was Season 2
Comments from author:
Wait, you mean I missed all of season 1?
Review By [Magi] • Date [22 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Confrontations" from MarcusRowland
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Of all the neighbourhoods in all the world to attack...

Love it - I wasn't expecting so many supers, but it makes perfect sense.

And more cliff-hangers!
Comments from author:
The Bat does tend to over-plan. And now he has an Air Force major who over-plans too.
Review By [MarcusRowland] • Date [22 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Confrontations" from Harry
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Maggie, your days are NUMBERED! Its not just Action Girl and TeraWatt you have to worry about, Its the Bat, Azure Crush and a whole lot of others who are hitting your base. Basically, it is CALLING OUT THE CLAN time and your are the Vampire Queen trying to raise the Aztec God of War! Maggie, I have a small suggestion for you: Drop your pants, bend over, and KISS YOUR KIESTER GOODBYE! You are going to be Deadmeat before this day is done!!!
Comments from author:
Maggie still has plans in the works. But this could be bad news for her.
Review By [Harry] • Date [22 Oct 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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