Honestly, the longer this goes on, the more awkward, random, and hamfisted the entire thing feels. It's a triple crossover that could be reduced to a double in either direction (BtVS/ME, BtVS/SG-1) without really losing anything in my humble opinion, there are some subplots that need far more attention than you're willing to give to them, and then other subplots that just feel like you've got hats full of nouns, verbs, and direct objects and you're drawing a slip of paper from each to decide how to flesh out your story.

To be perfectly honest, I'm beginning to think the same way. When I started this, I thought adding the third cross of Stargate SG-1 would allow the potential conflict that I would need but I'm starting to believe I rushed it through. You're right that it could be reduced but it would have to be BtVS/ME rather than BtVS/SG-1 because of the rather critical components Mass Effect parts.

I'm thinking about rewriting it and taking out the SG-1 part. My original intention with this fanfic didn't involve SG-1 and didn't have the other ME characters get involved as quickly. I was going to have Willow try to work through the new memories and other effects of the spell(s) without knowing about Amalia working in the background. This was actually what I had began to do when my computer fried and I was forced to get a replacement. Do you think I should try to resurrect the original story or what?

good her team arrived on Earth and nice trouble that damn slaver started.

All I can say is that was one Hell of a Spell!!!

Glad to see you're actually moving beyond Earth and into this whole universe it brought about.

One part Chaos Magic courtesy of Janus, One part Vengeance/reality warping magic care of D'Hoffryn, put in blender and hit frappe.

> “I'm not a Goa'uld.” Jacob said quickly in his defense.

> “You look like a duck.” Willow replied.

Willow is of the same species as Adolf Hitler. And right now she's quacking like a Nazi.

Remember how SG-1 had pretty much the same disbelief they had about the Tok'ra when Samantha Carter had Jolinar in her. That's the same disbelief Willow is experiencing as she hasn't encountered any Tok'ra before.

How quickly do you expect anyone to believe in that the Tok'ra are actually possible without ample evidence? The collar will be coming off.

Wait, Joyce forced Buffy to break up with Angel because he couldn't give her children? Setting aside the fact that planning children at her age (not to mention as the Slayer) is a bit... odd, but what if Joyce had a homosexual child? I mean, Willow and Tara can't have children either. That's a very poor argument for ending a relationship.

Remember, the journal entry is from Xander's perspective. No matter how close of a friend Xander may be, he might not know everything that goes on in the Summers Home. This is his assumptions and those of a rather older Xander. He might not have remembered everything correctly.

Intruiging.

still interesting read. SG1 is gonna get some surprises.

as always keep up the good work

Nice update... :)

Thank you.

very nicely done sir.

Thank you.

So let's see...

Willow is a hyper powerful Shepard. I'm on board with that.
Cordi is a highly talented engineer. I like it.
Xander is not just a Navy Seal, but one of the best of the best. Meh - kind of standard, and obvious, but whatever.
Harmony (Harmony!!!) is a talented scout/sniper. And the other Cordettes are 'coming along' too. Could be fun!
Joyce is a Asari Matriarch. Interesting.
Dawn as the Key. Has been world altering.

And Buffy is a fairly useless anachronism in this new world, who's 'other universe' persona was a sex slave who killed herself.(sigh)

Why do I feel a little let down that seemingly this trope - *marginalize Buffy/make her pointless*, is one that you decided to keep when you changed the YAHF Super!Xander to Super!Willow?

Willow as Shepard was a needed part of the story so it's good you're on board with that.
I made Cordelia an engineer to give her a complimentary skill set to Willow. It was either make her an engineer or make her a biotic of some type.
With Xander, I wanted him to still be a soldier but not just an ordinary grunt. An ordinary grunt wouldn't be able to keep up with Willow.
Harmony as an inflitrator and the other Cordettes training was actually the result of a coin flip. I wasn't sure if I wanted to use them like that so I flipped a coin.
For Joyce, I wanted another biotic in Sunnydale and I wanted that biotic to be more powerful than Amalia.
Dawn as the Key, nuff said.

As for Buffy, she's not going to be able to adapt to things as easily as everyone else. She's trying but she is wishing her world was back to the way it was before.

Great story even if I do not know where the other story line came from. I like the characters so far. Looking forward to more.

which storyline?

Considering that seemingly Miranda's sterile. . . .its a miracle. . a Key-related one i guess. . . .Oh shi. . . .if Miranda was deadly, how it will be a Mama Bear Miranda Lawson?

It's not a Key-related miracle. Dawn is still the key but she shown up earlier than normal. This is more in line with how the Mass Effect universe got brought back. As Commander Shepard, she knew Miranda couldn't have children thanks to information recovered from the Shadow Broker's database on her team.

Mama Bear Miranda would be deadly but think about this. The child is the child of Miranda Lawson and Commander Willow (Rosenberg) Shepard. I would pity anyone who thought it would be a good idea to kidnap or otherwise harm this child because you would bring not only the parents' wrath down upon them but also the extended family.

I love what you have done with this story I hope that you are able to keep writing it.

I will do what I can.

Given that Kinsey and O'Niell are related and about to find common cause, Harris is about to get his Ryback on, and Amalia is about to preemptively remove the organization and leader voted Most Certain To Be The Bastard Fusion Of Shadow Broker And Illusive Man, things are looking up.

(The people voted Most Certain To Get Their Cerberus On are actually NID/DRI...)

Kinsey and O'Neill get along like oil and water and always will. The fact that they are related will matter very little except that they might try to act civil around Willow. But that will be the extent of how they act together.

With Xander, I wanted him to have the potential to fit in with Willow's team and maybe be a part of the team while not making him a super soldier or more than normal human being. My first thought was having him go as O'Neill for Halloween but as I was writing the first chapter, Under Siege came on and I couldn't resist.

Amalia taking out the Watchers' Council and Quentin Travers was a planned event from the time I first started the story. As much as it is to eliminate a threat, it is also to send a very simple message.

Oh... Boy... Indeed. :)

I thought a well placed suprise would spruce things up a bit. What do you think? Anyone expecting that?