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Review of chapter "Teaser for "The Flash of Lightning" Edited" from DarthTenebrus
Review:
Read this again, and I saw something that I didn't see the first time.

Rain, torrential rain...rumbling thunder...and Dawn's eyes staring blankly into oblivion as she bleeds out...

That, and the flash of lightning as the title indicates, you should have added. With the howling wind and the glowing runes, this would have made for a more climactic, nerve-buzzing crisis than you had with what you've got so far...

I would have loved to see the lightning illuminate Willow's face for a brief but memorable instant.
Comments from author:
I admit that I didn't quite detail the scene, but I always pictured when I get to the scene in the story I will be adding more build up and details. It's just a teaser to get the people hooked and I appreciate the review, because it really helps my muse figure out how to picture the scene better. Tx :D
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [14 Aug 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Teaser for "The Flash of Lightning" Edited" from DarthTenebrus
Review:
Anything with the return of Darth Willow is worth a solid 10 for the chilling horrors! I always see those yellow eyes of a Sith instead of those empty all-black orbs. When she seized Aimee by the neck, I envisioned her lifting the young Slayer off the ground with that same hand like Darth Vader, and the cloak I imagine had a cowl that hid half her face, because I only saw her nose and lips, peeling back in a rictus of hate to reveal blackened teeth, as if the dark power within her has infected even her bones!

But this old Star Wars fan digresses...how did Willow go bad once again, and what does it have to do with Dawn and a ritual, and WHY did poor Aimee have to die? I expect this is some sort of climax to the story as I have not yet read it, and I hope for a good runup to the event as described herein.

Thanks for the chilling intro!

Edit/Reply 14Aug2013: She's not described quite like that in "Rise" and "Balance of Powers"; for your description, I basically envisioned a hybrid Dark Willow/Emperor Palpatine. Either one of those characters possessed indescribably vast powers that they used for evil, and each of them frightens me more than anything, except perhaps Darth Vader before the armor...
Comments from author:
That is quite a chilling picture that you've described, and I kind of wished it was Star Wars cross to do something like that, lol. You've got a way with descriptions my friend.

All of that will be answered in the next story which is now up. I started it off straight into action, and I'm a little worried about that, but I digress. Thank you for the review! :)
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [14 Aug 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Teaser for "The Flash of Lightning" Edited" from slmncpm
Review:
omg seriously? that is how you end it?? bad writer! bad bad bad! but i did love the kitten part.
Comments from author:
It's not technically an end...merely the beginning of a new story. I know I'm evil. Thanks! :D
Review By [slmncpm] • Date [12 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Throwing Up Kennedy" from Taryn
Review:
LOL! The kid just aimed for her, didn't she?!
Comments from author:
What can I say? She's got good aim. :D
Review By [Taryn] • Date [11 Aug 13] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Teaser for "The Flash of Lightning" Edited" from banditdoz
Review:
That better be a dream! Great way to get me more interested ;)
Comments from author:
It might be, it not be. You'll just have to wait and see when I post the next story in the series up, lol. :D
Review By [banditdoz] • Date [11 Aug 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Teaser for "The Flash of Lightning" Edited" from burmafrdnow
Review:
yawn. bored now.
Comments from author:
It took me a second to get that, lol.
Review By [burmafrdnow] • Date [10 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Aimee's a Cat! (Faith's Payback)" from (Recent Donor)christytrekkie
Review:
Thats"s freaking hilarious
Comments from author:
Thank you!
Review By [(Recent Donor)christytrekkie] • Date [10 Aug 13] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Aimee's a Cat! (Faith's Payback)" from burmafrdnow
Review:
NOW that is truly EVIL.

Aimee hopefully will learn that her mother is a truly vicious person and trying to prank her is suicidal.
Comments from author:
Oh, it's only the beginning. Faith has more in store for her, and Aimee isn't completely helpless either, lol.
Review By [burmafrdnow] • Date [10 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Aimee's a Cat! (Faith's Payback)" from grd
Review:
Found this diamond tale! Ty
Comments from author:
Ty you for the review! :D
Review By [grd] • Date [10 Aug 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Of Angels and Monster Pt 4 of 4" from banditdoz
Review:
A great update thank you ;D and Im guessing she has the power of the storm?
Comments from author:
Thanks! And she does. :)
Review By [banditdoz] • Date [8 Aug 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Of Angels and Monster Pt 4 of 4" from burmafrdnow
Review:
There has got to be some kind of alternative to the PTB's that the Scoobies can try.

Maybe make a deal of some kind.
Comments from author:
There will be, eventually, but it's going to be quite a battle nonetheless. Thanks for thre review.
Review By [burmafrdnow] • Date [5 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Slayerbook Messages: Something Wicked" from (Recent Donor)christytrekkie
Review:
This is really good cloud I love it. Can't wait for more will be tracking.
Comments from author:
Thank you so much! :D :D
Review By [(Recent Donor)christytrekkie] • Date [1 Aug 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Slayerbook Messages: Something Wicked" from djhardim
Review:
They should considering purchasing from Duluth Trading Company.

http://www.duluthtrading.com/

It would be interesting to see how their clothing would stand up to the demands of slaying.

Edit: You're welcome.

They have a lightweight utility vest that looks pretty good.

http://women.duluthtrading.com/store/womens/womens-collections/gardening-clothes-apparel/51009.aspx
Comments from author:
Thank you for that. It would be interesting, maybe I'll right a chapter about it, lol.
Review By [djhardim] • Date [30 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "There Are Worse Things Than..." from banditdoz
Review:
hahhaha love it
Comments from author:
Thanks.
Review By [banditdoz] • Date [28 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "There Are Worse Things Than..." from burmafrdnow
Review:
I guess it's no surprise that a daughter of Faith would have a death wish
Comments from author:
Nope, not really. I mean, she was raised by the scoobies, lol
Review By [burmafrdnow] • Date [28 Jul 13] • Not Rated
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