Sunnydale Cylons, and their Toaster Lovers by Absence : I love this story but why no updates , If its required give your MUSE a few cookies as a bribe so I and other have more of your great story to read in the near future.

Just re-read the last few chapters of this. Still really liking this story; the newer stuff with the Brits coming in and more eyes on the Cylon group is very interesting and I'm looking forward to where you take it. Also interested in long term consequences- Kinsey mentioned here that most nations have restarted their alien hunting teams, so, I don't see a ha'tak or 30 showing up in orbit getting past anybody this time so the US might have to come clean a lot earlier just so the international community doesn't embargo them to all hell in order to get the gate from their control. Very happy to see Cam show up as well, here. I wouldn't mind seeing him interact with Helo in the future; Xander could use a male friend similar to his age. My only real complaint about this is how little of Xander we're seeing in Helo. I get why that is the way you set it up earlier in the story, but, I'd hope that more of Xander's carefree attitude and such would leak through over time. Anyways, hope to see you update this before too long

Okay, look. You've got a decent story, with a different plot than most, and the characterizations are fine. But you've got some serious flaws going on. Cheese and crackers, Batman! I think that every time you used the words then and than, woman and women, breath and breathe, ridicules and ridiculous, (and I'm deliberately ignoring any misuse of there, their, they're and your/you're) you use the wrong one! Spell check is not your friend, because yes, those words are spelled correctly, but they're definitely not used correctly. I may not speak for everyone, but every time I have to reread a sentence because it doesn't make sense as a result of the incorrect word being used, it robs me of some enjoyment of the story. I like where it's headed, and I like the potential to be great, but the simple mistakes are brutal, just by sheer volume.

If you're not using a beta, you should find one you feel like you can rely on and be willing to listen to in order to improve the story. If you *are* using a beta, well, that beta seriously needs to brush up on grammar and spelling.

I've been on a kick lately to read all the "Ship of the Line" stories, and I really enjoyed yours. I look forward to future updates.

I've been re-reading your story and I thought of how Ronald D. Moore could have got the idea for his version of Battlestar Galactica in the SC&TTL universe. When our protagonists got changed or drug through time and space a certain technical adviser got snagged and wound up in contact with Mr. Moore and is working with him as an adviser on the Colonies, the Colonial Fleet, and yes even the Cylons. Now this adviser could be Gaius Baltar, Kara Thrace, Leland Joseph Adama (call him Adams or Addams in the Credits), William Adama (again change last name to Adams or Addams), John Cavil, Leoben Conoy, Saul Tigh, Ellen Tigh, Samuel Anders, Simon O'Neill, Shelly Godfrey, Tory Foster, Cally Henderson-Tyrol, Galen Tyrol, D'Anna Biers, Laura Roslin, or anyone from the series you want to use. I think Gaius Baltar would be the best. He could have even recruited the actors who most resembled the people from his past.

Ouch, Travers is going to be spanked. Good narritive, the conflict between the various groups. Willow wants Old Xander. Athena & Dawn Want Helo. Xander wants to make them all happy. Cordelia 6 wants control. The Centurions want freedom from slavery. (They might empathisize with the Jaffa.) SG1 wants a powerful ally. Daniel wants the knowledge of the new. Who will get what they want? Will there be answers in the new chapters?

TTFN

I just wanted to let you know how much I am enjoying your story. Keep writing, you are good at this. Eagerly awaiting the next chapter.

I don't know why,
but I'll try.

This is a very interesting yarn,
but there's a potential for future harm.

Geeze, why oh why,
did I even try?

More please! Can't wait for more please. Need more Xander and Sharon and family. :)

I am currently reading responses to the 'Ship of the Line' Challenge and I find your work really impressive so far. You've done a really good job at not making it too easy for the Scoobies while as the same time given them a nice upgrade. And the addition of Sharon, with Dawn and Faith as their children, is a nice touch.
Cordelia as the business shark is scary, but oh so good! The mesh of Cordelia-Six is really my favorite. The SGC speculations are also quite entertaining. And the little hint of other possible Cylons/Colonials out there is both exciting and worrying.

There is just a little something that I don't understand. In the last chapter you have the USAF general say they are getting 2 Viper mark 7, but you have Jono only working on a blend of Mark 2 and 5. It doesn't really seem logical to me to give a better ship that what you plan to produce. Isn't it counter-productive to keep the edge? Though they do want the Earth protected so maybe it's a small sacrifice in their mind.

Well keep up the good work and Update soon, please!!

Wonderful tale. I can't wait to see what happens next... What happened to Fred? Or Giles for that matter?

I just thought of something; I'm too sure how your alternate history for the Colonials and Cylons went, but I think it's about time Leoben or one of the others show up.

They are coming, I've been holding off on them because their arrival takes contact with the Asgard. Even then they're going to start off in a form thats a bit weird. :D

Delighted to see another chapter to this story.

I really like how Cordelia reacted to the threat to the Centurions. It highlights how she sees them as 'people' not machines. Comparing Zabuto to the Colonials was a great touch.

The thing with the lower-tech computers was that the Colonials deliberately downgraded their computer systems to the lowest workable tech and upped the countermeasures to an extreme to avoid Cylon "phishing" or hack subversions of their systems.

True, but you have to consider who is here. Everyone in this fic from the nBSG verse who is colonial is from the military or they're a Cylon. All of their computers are Colonial military, or Cylon. A lot of what i'm doing is informed by that limitation... as for the size of the proposed computer, well it would have to devote a full half or more of its power to keeping the Cylons out because it was that important. At least that's where my head is...

Very well done!