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Review of chapter "Meet The Father" from bradsan
Review:
love those two chapters.

Buffy is very good in denying things with people or persons she is close with. She always does that. So no biggy. She notice the scar but push it away. It's only natural not for the reader because we know more but for her well he didn't show any other signs like he didn't know at first she was the Slayer. a part of her and his human nature I guess. So no biggy and nothing to do if she is smart or not.

I wonder if she will meet the other family members that could be fun. I also hope there will be a chapter where Bruce finds out or Dick/Buffy will tell him that she is the Slayer. I would love to read his reaction.

good job again
Review By [bradsan] • Date [27 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Meet The Father" from Amberdrake
Review:
I only now just found this. Very much fun it is. Please continue.
Review By [Amberdrake] • Date [27 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Meet The Father" from burmafrdnow
Review:
Just my opinion, but this dancing around is getting old. Need to get it all out in the open. Right now its reading a little too much like the same old stupid Hollywood stuff where everyone acts dumb and oblivious.
One reason I love fanfic is that most of the time the writers let their charactors actually have a brain; and lots of stupid Hollywood garbage is never seen.

UPDATE:
OK, see your problem. That is why flashbacks sometimes are really stupid in many stories. You wrote what was supposed to be a one off and now you are stuck with it.

You could redo a little of chapter 1, but that would take more work and then you would have to redo the rest as well. Yeah, you are stuck. Either do a lot of rework or make Buffy look kind of stupid.
Comments from author:
I feel you! Normally, I'd agree that the idiot ball tropes are dumb - especially since you'd think Buffy would get over her super strong denial about Dick being normal, right??

Problem is, I wrote myself into a corner way back in the first chapter. Buff doesn't figure out Dick's Nightwing until long after Spring Break :') so alas, the awkward dance happened in the bonus chapters since it was all supposed to be self-contained. I appreciate the feedback, bro - it's solid advice for next time.
Review By [burmafrdnow] • Date [27 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Meet The Father" from raxadian
Review:
Oh, this is amusing.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [27 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Spring Break" from raxadian
Review:
Denial your name is Buffy Summers.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [27 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from raxadian
Review:
I am liking this-
Review By [raxadian] • Date [27 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Meet The Father" from Starfox
Review:
Good, funny chapter! Buffy's traouble with her family and the bat-fmaily were very entertaining.
Review By [Starfox] • Date [27 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Meet The Father" from grd
Review:
Excellent dinner. The multiple conversations going on was funny. Buffy knocking Croc out wad a bonus. Bruce calling B normal was over the top. Dick wanting it too was classic. More soon please.
Review By [grd] • Date [27 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from eternalfox
Review:
It's interesting to note that only Dick and Xander figured out for themselves that Faith was in Buffy's body and vice versa. Which means that not even Willow knows her as well as Xander does. Also, it's nitpicky, but why is this under Young Justice. Dick was never part of it, despite what the animated series portrayed. He was a founding member of the Teen Titans. It would make more sense if it was Tim instead. Tim was a founding member of Young Justice, the second greatest deductive mind behind Bruce, and in his adulthood, he's Red Robin.
Comments from author:
It's under Young Justice because the fic mashes up Buffyverse with Earth-16, which IS the animated show. If I were using comics canon, you'd know (because I would never pass up the excuse to throw Cissie in a Buffy fic). No worries, bro, I know my comics c:
Review By [eternalfox] • Date [18 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Spring Break" from TheDoctor
Review:
I absolutely love reading this FF, how you mesh both worlds together works well. Hope to see more of Buffy and Dick together...
Comments from author:
Aw thank you! I've admittedly been busy with life, but you'll (hopefully) see more of their relationship soon, since I've at least planned on extending Spring Break another chapter (and then maybe dealing a little bit with some extra stuff, depending on time/motivation) :)
Review By [TheDoctor] • Date [29 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Spring Break" from bradsan
Review:
Like what you wrote and can't wait for more. Great job mixing both worlds together and like how you change some things. Can't wait when they see Buffy fight because lets face it she is a really good fighter. Her different fighting styles and mixing while she fights is giving her an advance on her opponent. I always love watching her fighting.

Can't wait what will be next.
Comments from author:
Thanks! I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far, and I'll keep this in mind when I attempt fight scenes in the future. :)
Review By [bradsan] • Date [18 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Spring Break" from LallaBelle
Review:
this was a fun read... but um i'm confused, in the first chapter Buffy kind of found out that Dick is Nightwing, so what's up with the sudden switcharoo of not knowing?

edit: Ah gotcha. Hehe suppose I should've considered that before my review lol. But now that you said it the chapters do make more sense in relation to each other. anyway can't wait to see what you write next. :)
Comments from author:
Basically, the first chapter was intended to be a one-shot (and thus self-contained), but I'd recently decided that this fic deserved more expansion - and thus a bigger insight into how Buffy/Dick came to be. The second chapter's an expansion of the first, and it takes place before the "last part" of the first chapter, so to speak.

I'm sorry I caused some confusion! Hopefully when I'm done, I'll edit that last bit out so it flows better. Thanks for bringing it to my attention.
Review By [LallaBelle] • Date [18 Mar 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Spring Break" from Starfox
Review:
Good one! Now the last part of the first chapter serves as a sort of epilogue or teaser - any plans to edit that once the story is complete?
Comments from author:
Thanks!

I was thinking about it, yes. I don't know if the last part'll appear in the last chapter, or if I'll flesh out some other event in the first chapter to even it out, but there will (hopefully) be an edit of some kind.
Review By [Starfox] • Date [18 Mar 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Spring Break" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Nicely done. Could be expanded just a little more, but basically works. Thanks for sharing.
Comments from author:
Thanks! I'll see what I can do about the next chapter, expansion-wise, since I'm definitely not done with this universe just yet.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [16 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Spring Break" from brokenmimir
Review:
This chapter had much better pacing -- you let events have more time to breathe, and the writing was definitely better for it. Also, kudos for bringing in Shadowpact and the Oblivion Bar -- I love those guys, and they never get mentioned enough.
Comments from author:
Thanks! I'm glad the pacing worked out better here; it's something I struggle with, so I can only hope it gets better from here. I'm also glad you know the Shadowpact! They're one of my favorite teams within the DCU, and I try to bring them up whenever I can - I'm not sure if this'll be the last mention of them in this fic, but I'll definitely be writing about them more in the future.
Review By [brokenmimir] • Date [16 Mar 13] • Not Rated
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