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Chaos Comes to Hoggywarts

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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Sanabalis
Review:
I like this story. Please try to add more soon(ish). Please :)
Review By [Sanabalis] • Date [27 Aug 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from gmaniscool
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I like your story so far. I shows lots of promise. I hope to read more of it sometime.
Review By [gmaniscool] • Date [22 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Morgomir
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Great story so far. Keep up the good work. Please use spell check.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [13 Feb 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from CrystalBlaze
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Delightfully twisted. I have seen fics linking Xander to Harry by blood before, but Fathom's a new one...

Since we have a mischievious Michael, I do ask that "Mort" be either the John Travolta version or that one of the surprises be Jay and Silent Bob..
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [9 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from LordCorwin
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Nits: you need to work on the grammar and spelling.... editing

Good points: you've got me to follow the story. :)
Review By [LordCorwin] • Date [8 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from eriktheviking
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An intriguing and entertaining scene-setter.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [8 Feb 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from trongod
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Bad points: Errors in spelling, word usage ('then' when 'than' is proper, for example), some rather long sentences...

Good points:

Helluva start ya got there. Like what you've got and want to see more... maybe throw poor, shy, bookish Hermione into either Xander or Harry's love match - if 'Dite gets to play with Big Brother, why can't She feel sorry for poor, abused, down trodden Harry and his stalwart, loyal friend of the bushy hair, after all? - for more fun.

I would love to see her try to deal with Faith... then again, how much and what kind of briefing did Our Favorite Dark Slayer get, and come to that, Who was it that was doing the briefing????

Inquiring minds wanna know!!!!
Review By [trongod] • Date [8 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from michaelangelo
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You sir, need a beta. Besides that, I have a problem with Aspen (Matthews) being a Potter, seeing as she is a hybrid of two different none Human species the Black and the Blue and also has a half brother called Finn, it'd be like saying Kara Zor-El was a Potter and hoping nobody would notice she is actually an alien. Now I had no idea what Fathom comics was or who Aspen was until I read this and used my Google-fu. If Xander died aged 125 and Voldemort killed Harry and won, why didn't the world devolve into war? being that as soon as Voldemort ruled the Wizarding world his next step would be to take over the Muggle one, or destroy it? Also Harry was 17 in 1997, Xander was around 16 then since that's when BtVS started making him younger than Harry, probably making Xander a new born home birth when the Potters were killed.

I know this is your story but I can't help but feel it needs rethinking. One I'd lose Aspen, I can't see her relevance to the storyline, you could keep it a Fathom cross if you need to by reactivating Xander's aquatic genes and 'maybe' make him technically Aspen's half brother. Harry died in 1997 around Halloween I think the Exact same time as the Buffy episode of the same name, what if Xander dressed Harry just as Harry died and it changed him?
Review By [michaelangelo] • Date [8 Feb 13] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Studyofchaos
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Okay, the table is set, all that is left is to eat (read) what is put before us. Nice setup. There should be plenty for you to play with both serious and humourous. Let the games begin!
Review By [Studyofchaos] • Date [8 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from CastorandPollux
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Keep up the good work.
Review By [CastorandPollux] • Date [8 Feb 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Miranda
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The concept of this story is interesting, but, the overwhelming amount of errors are making it impossible for me to read.I am unable to immerse myself in the story. I suggest you put an alert out for a Beta reader to help improve the flow, grammar and spelling of the story.
Review By [Miranda] • Date [8 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from loretta
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this sounds like it will be a good story, i cant wait to see what will happen next
Review By [loretta] • Date [8 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from ronin
Review:
this is starting nicely. i hope you continue this story because i really want to see more
Review By [ronin] • Date [7 Feb 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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