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Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from bookworm
Review:
Thought I'd add a note to say people are still discovering and reading this, and I'd be glad to read more should you come back to it at some point.
Comments from author:
Thank you. I haven't forgotten about it. I think the Dawn/River & Xander/Jayne is about the best pairing anyone has ever come up with. I also hope I can write more.
Review By [bookworm] • Date [16 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from ShyBob
Review:
And this is why I continue to read YAHFs: solid plot, good dialogue, plausible character interactions. Heartbreaking what you did to Dawn, though. Hope to see more X&D on their journey across Earth that was, is, and evermore shall be.
Comments from author:
I'm glad I could uphold your faith in YAHFs.
Review By [ShyBob] • Date [18 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from DieselDriver
Review:
This is excellent. Nice melding of the characters. I want more!!!

I am definitely going to have to watch more of the Buffy series and re-watch Firefly. First episode I ever saw was the one that started with Captain dressed as a woman on the wagon being accosted by robbers. I love that statement he made to the head bad guy. I think it was episode 8 but I'm not sure. And no I will not quote it. Anyone who hasn't seen it will just have to watch it themselves. But I like how he thinks. I shoot a Ruger Redhawk myself. Large calibers speak with great authority.
Comments from author:
I've got a Ruger Blackhawk myself. .357, which shoots .38 special too, but I've got an extra cylinder that holds 9mm for plinking. Lots of fun with that. And 9mm is cheaper to shoot.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [7 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DieselDriver
Review:
The idea that anyone who wasn't a Firefly Flan wouldn't know River is a girl's name isn't quite correct.

River Song, daughter of Amy and Rory. Originally named Melody Pond, but raised away from Mom & Dad, by people who had no name for rivers nor for melody, they used the best words they had.

Let me tell you my opinion of the actress who played her...HOT!!! and a damned fine actor.
Comments from author:
Some people would, some people wouldn't. It's uncommon enough that it would be easily assumed, especially with the addition of 'Jayne' to a male&female costume combination.

And yes, Summer Glau is awesome. Had bad luck with TV shows getting cancelled on her though. http://vulcanstev.files.wordpress.com/2011/02/demot-summer-glau.jpg
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [7 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from speakerthesilent
Review:
A shame that this seems to have been abandoned. A very good beginning. Lots of potential.
Comments from author:
Less abandoned; more stuck.
Review By [speakerthesilent] • Date [9 Jul 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Netchka
Review:
More please! More please! Wanna read more please!
Comments from author:
Thank you. I will pass on your requests to my muse. Hopefully she comes back soon.
Review By [Netchka] • Date [27 Jun 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Shadowman
Review:
Interesting and good story I hope you get through your block soon and continue it.
Comments from author:
Thank you. Me too.
Review By [Shadowman] • Date [14 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from removedauthor
Review:
Grate story so far I can't wait for the next chapter you put out.
Comments from author:
Writer's block right now. I also wish I had more for this.
Review By [removedauthor] • Date [20 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll
Review:
Nice setup.
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [21 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll
Review:
Jayne is from a bit down the timeline. Any major changes to humans since they went to the stars?
Comments from author:
No. Humans, as a species don't change much in 500 years. Far more likely would be that the language would be almost unintelligible to us. Though you could point to recordings of us as keeping the language homogeneous.
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [21 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from latina
Review:
I love the plot of this story. It will be interesting to see how the two of them turn out. I can see them doing work like they did in the black. It also makes me wonder if they will be living in a really small town or if they will find a place that is really isolated from others.

I love, love how you were able to incorporate how Jayne and River fit into Xander's and Dawn's personalities. I know you only see a few little things here and there, but it is amazing. I really want to see how they end up considering that they will only have each other to rely on from this point on.

I don' t know how Buffy and the others will really fit into all of this. I do wonder how Mrs. Summer is going to react to Dawn 'running off with' Xander.

I cannot wait for the next chapter.

~Latina~
Comments from author:
Thank you. I look forward to seeing how this all turns out as well. :-)

And I'm not sure how much of the repercussions in Sunnydale I'm going to show. I really want this to be a Rayne story.

Thank you for an excellent review.

-Nate
Review By [latina] • Date [19 Feb 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from ArjaiH
Review:
Gee your stories don't always go where you thought the would...come to think of it neither do mine! Doing great though keep up the great writing.
Comments from author:
I try to throw some plot twists into all of my longer stories. Don't want to become too predictable. But this one surprised even me.
Review By [ArjaiH] • Date [19 Feb 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from CPTSkip
Review:
I did not see the direction in which your story seems to be going. I like it, but it is not what I was expecting. I'm not sure how Joyce is going to take both the information about Buffy being the Slayer and that she's lost her youngest daughter, however. Too bad Serenity didn't come back with them. Lol!

I look forward to reading more of your story.
Comments from author:
I do like surprising my readers, but this one surprised even me. And for the rest, we're both going to have to see.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [19 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from kyro
Review:
question is how long is Xan/Dawn going be gone and how far are you going to deviate from btvs cannon cuz even if Dawn gets better shes still going be a bit odd Dawn's condition is probably worse because she's the key
Comments from author:
Even I don't know the answers to those questions right now.
Review By [kyro] • Date [19 Feb 13] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Gideon
Review:
Definitely not what I was expecting, although removing herself from the Hellmouth can only be a good thing. It will make it harder to convince Joyce of anything though :( I do wonder if it would be a better idea to stay in the dessert for a few days or weeks though. Xander or even Giles could deliver food without impacting Buffy's nightlife and Driver would have the solitude to work on her composure.
Comments from author:
I do pride myself on surprising my readers. :-)

I read your review and was thinking you'd left out a The for 'the driver' who would bring her food. Since Driver is already a word, I'm mostly going with Riven for now.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [19 Feb 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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