Review of chapter "Chapter Six: Back In Your Head" from RogueAngel
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I really hope you come back and update this soon. I know you said that it would be awhile before she makes it back to Sam and the Autobots, I'm just hoping for now that she can get the sparklings and herself away from the people that are holding her. looking forward to more.
Review By [RogueAngel] • Date [1 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six: Back In Your Head" from Markelo
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Aww she named after Superman,Batman, and Woner Woman.
Comments from author:
That she did. I was going through a few different choices for the new little ones in my head but when I thought of those three I knew I wouldn't think of anything else that would delight me more (and perhaps that's not a responsible way to write but it does tend to be an enjoyable one *laughs*).
Review of chapter "Chapter Six: Back In Your Head" from Grindhall
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Wow, I'm really enjoying this lots of questions about what/who/why is going on of course but its a great character piece and an intriguing plot. Would appreciate a bit better description of what Lovely Clark Bruce and Diana look like but that's the only thing missing.
Thanks for sharing and I hope for an update soon.
Review By [Grindhall] • Date [14 Mar 13] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Six: Back In Your Head" from HebiR
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Oh, I loved every moment of this. I eagerly await more to love.
Review of chapter "Chapter Six: Back In Your Head" from SamTurner
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Nice start.
Review By [SamTurner] • Date [26 Feb 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Six: Back In Your Head" from Sithspit
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Clark, Bruce, and Diana...may they live up to their namesakes.
Review By [Sithspit] • Date [26 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six: Back In Your Head" from RogueAngel
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really enjoying this. I love how Lovely is taking note of mikaela's actings and reusing them. kinda like a human baby would but at a faster rate. just a question did you name the new sparklings after the main DC three hero's. If yea, then shouldn't diane be diana? sorry it's just i'm abit of a comic nut, so when i read clark and bruce I automatically thought Diana (Wonder woman)
Comments from author:
Oh, I knew I needed to double check on those names. I'm posting as soon as I finish chapters and -thought- it sounded right, I guess it was just one letter off. *laugh* I'll go change it now.
And I'm really glad you like how Lovely is reusing Mikaela's action's - I figure it's how human children learn so why not Cybertronian?
Thanks for taking the time to review - I'm really glad you caught that name for me early!
Review By [RogueAngel] • Date [26 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six: Back In Your Head" from FireDragon
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I am enjoying this. Is Sam and the Transformers going to come save her and the little ones? Or is she going to have to get out of it on her own? looking forward to more. and I like their names all names of superheros, except Lovely. (Which is a cute name) more please.
Comments from author:
Sam and the Transformers won't come back into this until quite a bit later - I feel hesitant to say more because I have a few weird twist along the way that I don't want to spoil. And I'm glad you like all the names I really like Lovely - and I felt she would always think herself special no matter how different her name was from the others. But I wanted the triplets (what I refer to them as later) to have something that grouped them together and went with the (Male-Male-Female) dynamic I also knew I wanted.
Thanks for reviewing!
Review By [FireDragon] • Date [26 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five: Breathe In" from ShalaDakiri
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I'm liking the development in this. I liked Mikaela in the first two movies but never saw the third, so I didn't even know she wasn't there. (As much as I like Optimus Prime, I thought they cheapened the second movie by bringing him back to life).
Anyway, with the way Mikaela is bonding with the sparklings, those scientists might find themelves on the receiving end of a few pranks and a breakout once they've matured a little.
Edit: Well, part of my opinion about O.P. is from the original 80's animated movie. He died, and leadership passed to Hot Rod, who became Rodimus Prime.
Comments from author:
Thank ya. To be honest my watching of the movies is patchy as well - I know for certain I saw the first, I watched at least parts of the second and anything more than that I got from Wikipedia. *laughs* It's probably terrible to admit, but my actual love of the characters came from reading -way- to much fanfic.
As for Optimus coming back I feel rather odd about that because within that world (if only just the Movie-verse) death was set up as having actual permanence - such as Jazz's death in the first movie. It's not the Buffy-verse where dead things don't stay dead. So, the screen-writers should have either decided to kill him or not because if bringing a bot back to life was an option it should have been something on the table all along.
Anyways, thank you for taking the time to review - I appreciate the feedback and am truly delighted you're enjoying the bonding.
Review By [ShalaDakiri] • Date [25 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five: Breathe In" from rpgwarrior
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This is a very interesting explanation for what happened to Mikaela during the third movie. I hope you keep up the wonderful work (and update rate).
The one problem I found in this chapter is that Mikaela somehow decided there were three more transformers before anyone actually told her a number. That could use a bit of an explanation.
Comments from author:
Oh dear, that is what I get from writing bits of multiple chapters concurrently - I lose track of where I am information wise. *laughs* I was already a few ahead as I was doing this in which Mikaela is already mentally referring to them as the triplets. So, for one, that says good things for my muse and keeping a steady update rate but I do apologize for the mistake. I'll go make an adjustment now.
I'm glad you think it fits cannon-wise though - and you're enjoying it. I certainly am enjoying the writing of it! Thanks again for the catch and for taking the time to review!
Review By [rpgwarrior] • Date [24 Feb 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Comfort Eagle" from DarthTenebrus
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Beautiful story, I felt her maternal instinct start to kick in, as she began to understand that, though a Cybertronian, Lovely was still a baby born on Earth. (I say born because though they are mechanical beings in the sense that we understand it, the Cybertronian race is comprised of living, sentient beings.../constructed/ seems like such a cold, sterile word to describe their manner of coming into the world..) Mikaela will do right by her daughter, I'm sure...
Would she take the surname of Banes as well? Or would she go the Cybertronaian route and take a name that fits her personality and her choice of alt-form?
Interesting?
Edit/Reply: You're quite welcome. Ya know, this brings to my mind an idea. You could follow this story up with another one, but let the next one involve Sam and Bumblebee Witwicky, brothers in all but blood, or lubricants as the case may be...LOL.
Comments from author:
Yeah, I'm falling more on the nurture side of things. Mikaela is going to be the only one taking care of Lovely for a while and I shied away in this story from Cybertronian's instantly having a boat load of knowledge upon their "birth". So, like any child she will be picking up things from watching her parent - no matter how insufficient Mikaela feels her knowledge to be *laughs*.
And the name "Lovely Banes" kinda makes me giggle.
Thanks so much for taking the time to review.
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [24 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Comfort Eagle" from RogueAngel
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I like it! alot! I'm going on a real sparkling kick right now lol. Plus you've given a better reason for mikaela's disappearance then Transformers 3. I'm not the biggest fan of switching characters out with no real given or shown reason. plus it made Carly's roll feel empty and kinda pointless to me. I hope Mikaela and Lovely get back to the Autobots (and Sam) soon. TA jess
Comments from author:
I'm very glad you like it, there is something extremely sweet about sparklings that I think would pull at even the least maternal of us *laughs*. And I'm glad this works for you in the 'verse - I was hoping to have it slip in cannon-wise a bit. I found what they did with her character extremely stupid as well (even given big fun explosion movie) and am rather glad that fandom treats her a bit kinder.
Sorry to say though, but in my little tale, it's going to be a while before their lives reconnect with the Autobots - this kidnapping is actually just the first of a few potholes on Mikaela's path.
Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review!
Review By [RogueAngel] • Date [24 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Comfort Eagle" from JasonBarnett
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it feels bland and uninformative instead of mysterious and menacing, which I'm guessing you're going form and the villains are far to confident in the assumption she won't be missed.
Comments from author:
I'm sorry you feel that way. It might seem odd to you but I'm actually purposefully going for uninformative and not mysterious when it comes to Dr. Pratchett. As for blandness overall, I am only a few chapters in and still in the process of "world building" *laughs*. I would ask for a bit of patience on that front.
When it comes to the confidence that Mikaela won't be missed, that will honestly take a long time to be addressed as this is from her POV. I will just say that it will be quite a while before she sees the Autobots again (and that she has been missed).
Thanks for taking the time to read and review - I appreciate the criticism.
Review By [JasonBarnett] • Date [23 Feb 13] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Comfort Eagle" from Runewolf
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Wonderfully touching and engrossing. I felt like I was right there with the two of them.
Comments from author:
Oh, thank you. This idea stuck with me and for the longest time I just wasn't going to write it because most of my Transformers knowledge is based from reading fanfic *laughs* (the rest bits of Wikipedia). But this wouldn't leave me and I find I really like writing them.
Thank you so much for taking the time to review!
Review By [Runewolf] • Date [23 Feb 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]