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Review of chapter "One Badass Chicken" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
Review:
Umm, why the hell did you drop this?!? Social comentary in an interesting context is almost unknown! Damnit! Please, return with more updates...
Comments from author:
Thanks so much. Yeah, I really love this story, despite the often very questionable writing.

Suffice to say the next chapter is always in my mind, I just haven't been able to write it down in a way that satisfies me.

Maybe once I've finished The Fifth Head of Xander Harris.

Thanks.
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [5 Dec 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "One Badass Chicken" from LarsNight
Review:
I enjoyed the premise but the follow up was lacking. As a group they have always had a blind spot to Xander but to completely bind his will to someone that obviously hates him is a bit much.
Review By [LarsNight] • Date [26 Dec 13] • Rating [3 out of 10]
Review of chapter "One Badass Chicken" from Zarthrax
Review:
Hope this is picked up again soon. I hated Woods, and wish to see Xander get the last laugh.
Review By [Zarthrax] • Date [27 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "One Badass Chicken" from sdavidm
Review:
Ha, go poyo! Definitely an interesting story you have developing. Magical contracts seem like a bitch in your world, but it seems too easy to circumvent provisions in a contract to kill. For instance, what are timeline clauses, if any? How could you possibly place a strict time limit on something that takes extensive surveillance, intel and the right opportunity to come along, unless you want your operative to die (which doesn't seem the case here). Xander could just dick around the rest of his life on the premise of gathering intel.

Looking forward to seeing where you take this!

As an aside, while I agree that pop culture is still rather sexist in its portrayal of women, I hardly think a story that's just about a man, like Taken, is a good example of it. Every man in Taken other than the protaganist is also easily replaceable, so it's not making any sexist judgments because women are easily replaceable in the same way. The absence of stories like Taken with women as the protagonists is where the sexism lies.
Review By [sdavidm] • Date [21 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "One Badass Chicken" from ragnarokntroll
Review:
sorry but this is a flaming review : your story is totally worthless , a xander that had a hellish time in africa would have no philosophical problem with hiting if not shooting or killing robin hood the moment he endangered 'his girls' by not making obligatory gun training , also you say that demon don't use gun that 's false in the first season of buffy darla master vampire use gun . and your xander ain't bad ass he is a noob who think he is bad ass , i don't even talk about your forced magical contract ( they are only volontary asshole )
Comments from author:
First of all, I dislike the term 'flame', as it implies there's nothing meaningful to be taken.
All reviews have meaning, and yours is totally justified criticism.

That said, I will disagree with you on your first point. This is Xander come home to an unfamiliar environment, he is out of touch and uncomfortable with his surroundings. Robin's just an asshole boss, everyone has to deal with one.

Demons definitely use guns and Xander is well aware of this. It's Robin who doesn't, though I can see where the ambiguity in my sentence was.

And yeah, Xander's isn't a super badass, he's just a dude trying to survive and do the right thing.

Thanks for the criticism and thanks for reading,

Tofu
Review By [ragnarokntroll] • Date [11 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "One Badass Chicken" from Thegoddamnbatman
Review:
It's as if Joss Whedon and Quentin Territino had a love child full of win. Keep up the awesome man.
Comments from author:
That's an awesome complement.

Thanks for reading,

Tofu
Review By [Thegoddamnbatman] • Date [30 Aug 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "One Badass Chicken" from Kaosreign
Review:
Why do I have this feeling that what he was made to sign was not of the good? And I assume that bit about the contract with Andrew is the origin of Xander's leash?

Thanks for telling me that, though I wonder just how is he going to get out of this? I mean I have some theories but I don't know if I should share them for fear of ruining your wonderful story or give something away.
Comments from author:
Yes and yes. The details of the contract will come up in a later chapter, but yeah, it's definitely not of the good.

Thanks for reading,

Tofu

EDIT: I love it when people ask questions, it shows they're switched on and engaged.
As far as hints go, I'll say Chapter 4 contains a clue in an info dump, and Chapter 3 has one disguised as hyperbole.
I'd love to hear your theories, so shoot me a pm if you want. I'd be cool if you guessed right.
Review By [Kaosreign] • Date [29 Aug 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "One Badass Chicken" from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll
Review:
Loved the rooster. So Xander's getting screwed by a magic contract already?
Comments from author:
Poyo is awesome.

And yeah, him signing that contract sets up later pieces of our puzzle. You can say that contract is responsible for the ease in which the (chronologically) later contract is signed.
The extent of which is to be revealed soon.

Thanks for reading,

Tofu
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [29 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "One Badass Chicken" from lunalurker
Review:
Ah, the return of the story where all the Scoobies are mysteriously horrible slavers and backstabbers and twirling their villainous mustaches, except for the avatar of awesome self-insertness that is Xander. Wait, that's not one story, that's an entire subgenre that should be nuked from orbit for the good of all fiction and sanity everywhere.

At least that's what this looked like, except it's actually pretty well written, and kinda funny... and then this rooster showed up, and it all went completely cartoony-insane, but was so funny that I didn't care.
And then you got huge bonus points for the authors notes. Huge. So I'll keep waiting to see where this all is going.
Good luck, and thanks for sharing. :)
Comments from author:
I will argue to death about the self insert part. But, yeah, totally nuke it.

When writing this, I always knew the make or break moment would be chapter 3, that is, when the council ends up looking like a massive bunch of dicks. What I wanted was for people to question why and for chapters to start giving hints a little as we go. Hopefully it works out the way it does in my head.

Humor wise, thank you. I always wanted this to be a touch surreal, and Poyo was too good an opportunity to miss.

Thank you for giving this story a second chance, I hope the next chapters won't disappoint.

Tofu
Review By [lunalurker] • Date [28 Aug 13] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "One Badass Chicken" from maryelizabeth
Review:
This is brilliant, well thought out and funny. One of the most promising pieces of work I have read on this site in a while. I can't wait fore more:-)
Comments from author:
Thank you very much, I'll try to get the next chapter out in a more timely manner.

Tofu
Review By [maryelizabeth] • Date [28 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "One Badass Chicken" from deusexsububi
Review:
I deeply enjoy your writing style, even if some of the giles/robin stuff is crazy heavy handed and essentially more evil than the old school council. I'm sure you'll get around to showing why that's the case.

As a white Canadian man who runs around with his white man powers solving problems, I salute your efforts in showing ethnic diversity and cultural sensitivity in BtVS

I'll also confess that line made me laugh in grand abundance.

Keep up the great work!
Comments from author:
I really do worry I'm taking it too far with Giles/Robin, but I think the payoff will be worth it.

In regards to the white man powers, I worried it would be a bit strong. You think about movies like Avatar, Dances With Wolves, and Pocahontas (which I realize are basically all the same film), in which a white dude goes around being better at being a alien/native american/native american than anyone else, and white dude powers become kind of annoying.

I'm glad it made you laugh,

Tofu
Review By [deusexsububi] • Date [27 Aug 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "One Badass Chicken" from Calen
Review:
Did Robin just make Xander his slave?
Comments from author:
Not quite. The contract is a bit more complicated than that, but it'll be revealed in later chapters.

Thanks for reading,

Tofu
Review By [Calen] • Date [27 Aug 13] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "One Badass Chicken" from Selias
Review:
Something is telling me that Xander just signed one of those magical contracts that Andrew was talking about at the beginning.
Comments from author:
Bingo.

Thanks for reading,

Tofu
Review By [Selias] • Date [27 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "One Badass Chicken" from Mcspender
Review:
I like POYO, he is awesome =D!!!.
Nice way to deal with the human traffic issue dude, congratulations =). So Amanda will appear again, the way you describe her she's like Sharon Ventura, the female Thing, right??.
So Tricky Robin made some contracts too, all thanks to that Andrew moron.
I hope dear Andy get his for giving unneeded advice.

Cool chapter, see ya!!!.
Comments from author:
Wow, I had no idea anyone would get that. Yeah, I had Sharon Ventura in my head when thinking her up.
Seriously though, how the hell did you guess that?
...
I know you're watching me.

Tofu
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [27 Aug 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "One Badass Chicken" from DianeCastle
Review:
This is an excellent chapter in large part *because* you touched on some sensitive subjects and handled them well. Good job!

Also, Amanda would make an excellent deus ex machina later in the story.
Comments from author:
Thank you, I worried a lot over whether I was handling the issues well. I'll be tiptoeing through some later chapters too.
And yeah, it's probably obvious, but I'm a big fan of Chekhov and you can expect quite a few things to pay off in later chapters.

Thanks for reading,

Tofu
Review By [DianeCastle] • Date [27 Aug 13] • Not Rated
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