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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DieselDriver
Review:
Ok, very first thing I noticed was this error, and then it was repeated in the very next sentence.

"Everyone were making plan for their future."

Should be: "Everyone was making plans for their future."

The only time "were" would be correct would be if you said something like "We were making plans for our future" or "We were going to make plans for our future" or even "They were making plans for their future." You could even say "Everyone was there, they were all making plans for their future".

Just remember "everyone was" or "they were". Sorry I don't know the actual rule or why it's that way, it's been 50 years since I had an English course. Feel free to check with an English teacher and correct me if I'm wrong.
Comments from author:
Thank you for this, English is not my native language. I can understand and read it perfectly, but The writting part get a little messy... I will go change it right away... :)
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [20 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Blackett
Review:
Interesting start. Looking forward to see more of this.
Review By [Blackett] • Date [3 Apr 13] • Not Rated
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