Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Eukar
First off I have read all of your stories on this site and in my opinion this story is undoubtedly your best piece of work. One thing that really stood out compared to most SG crossovers is that there actually are consequences to character’s actions. In most the NID or SGC do something (like steal alien technology or cause inadvertent harm due to acting without enough information) with no consequences. Here an attack by the US led to retaliation by the other party and is not just shrugged off.
I can’t wait to see the wider implications of the events that have taken place and have let my imagination run away imagining the predicament the US will be in:
- from the international outrage it will face by having created and actually used a 2 Gigaton weapon (completely going against the spirit if not word of nuclear reduction treaties) and having discovered the US has managed to provoke multiple alien attacks on Earth (including from Nirrti, Hathor, Taleene and soon? Apophis) and did not think to let anyone else know and prepare.
- from its own population learning the above and learning that the EMP wave could have destroyed society if the ship had been destroyed and unable to absorb it
- and from Buffy perhaps turning some of her grief for bombarding Sunnydale into hatred for the United States government who provoked her.
I wonder if one way the US will fight back is to send an assault team to the gate location they think this originated from and discover that this ship is not the Gou'ald, and instead of owning up decide to try to destroy Taleene. Is the reason the ship is decreasing in altitude a plot device so ICBMs can reach it, only for Dawn to shoot them down?.
Anyway great story and I am eagerly awaiting your next update.
Review By [Eukar
] • Date [23 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from trucksonl
Please UPdate soon! This story rocks! I can't wait any longer!
Review By [trucksonl
] • Date [15 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from AlrightGatsby
Alright, I've reread this for the fifth time! Please update soon! I need some thrilling heroics to make up for all this very gripping drama and angst!
Also, is Willow's Leia from the same altered Star Wars world as Taleene?
Secondly, did you have plans for Willow and the Force? It just seems to me that magic in Buffy works just like the Force in Star Wars. She totally went Sith when Tara died...
Comments from author:
It's coming, I swear!
Five weeks of being semi-dead thanks to various illnesses was fairly nightmarish, but I'm finally feeling better, and work on the next chapter has resumed.
(And yes, there WILL be thrilling heroics--the special effects budget for this section is MASSIVE)
Leia!Willow is from the same variant universe as Buffy!(fem)Vader, yes, since all three of them were working together on their costumes, with Xander and Jessie's RPG notes (and Buffy's alterations) informing their costume decisions.
Willow and the Force....
Well, any such plans are kind of contingent on Willow not dying in the next ten minutes of story time, which at this point seems to be the most likely outcome. Still, wild speculation about the future, with that (massive) caveat in mind?
A slightly darker Willow (but one who is still mostly Cute!Willow/Sweet!Willow/Adorable!Willow)--that selfsame Dark!Willow, who is Force sensitive instead of magically active, and with her demonstrated interest/semi-obsession with gaining power and knowledge, and her demonstrated tendency to drift towards the darker aspects of such things...?
I gave myself a little tingle, there.
And that's all I'm sayin'.
Review By [AlrightGatsby
] • Date [2 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Selonianth
No offense, but calling this a little dark is like saying Oedipus Rex was *only* a little screwed up. IE, massive understatement. Buffy just vaporized a goodly portion of Sunnydale, personally killed Xander and... was it one of the turbolaser blasts that caused Willow's predicament?
Comments from author:
Well, I don't want to scare off readers by going too heavy on the predictions of doom and gloom--the warnings at least let you know what sort of earthquake you're about to experience, even if it doesn't spell out the precise magnitude of the thing.
Willow's predicament? No, I'd say that was more Ethan's spell, in the form of a teen-turned-Jason, ramming a steel signpost through her torso, that was the primary cause of that.
And at least now Buffy has the chance to do at least that much good--she can rescue her friend, and save her life.
Provided, of course, that no one (and no Things) try to interfere with her when she gets down there.
I'm sure it'll be fine.
Review By [Selonianth
] • Date [21 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from AerynChrichton
Star wars cross overs are my favorite. Most that are Buffy focused (my preference!) generally have her going Jedi.
But Buffy is much more Sith! 'Once more with Feeling' spelled it out that connection: She wants the fire back!
"What a small, pathetic, passionless creature you are, Piett. Don't you want to live?"
"None of you are really strong enough to be of any use to me, are you? None of you have any fire".
Really great to see these little hints.
Kendra was cold and emotionless (Jedi) and she died.
Anyway, this whole story was great. Sad that Xander died and I'd prefer if he didn't have to but the rest of this is just so great so it doesn't bother me overall. And you brought in Dawn early!
If Willow survives will you be exploring her magic/force connection? Willow's relationship with magic in the show has some pretty strong parallels with how the Force works in Star Wars. She straight up falls to the Dark Side at the end of season 6!
Can't wait for that update!
Review By [AerynChrichton
] • Date [5 Jan 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from BromideSix
This really captures the feel of the Buffyverse even with the miles long spaceship raining down discriminate and indiscriminate death from above.
I mean death...real character death and the powerful emotions and dramatic consequences of said death is part and parcel with the show.
Bad shit happens in the show and the characters have to deal with it, with the consequences of their mistakes. Everything is changed and that's okay even awesome.
So I really like this fic as it has all of that with fun Star Wars flavor which I love.
One thing though, shouldn't Buffy maybe had a horrifying thought about having possibly obliterated her own mother? Not a big deal given that she's dealing with a whole lot of crap right then. Sure the realization will hit eventually.
Super excited for the next part! I see you've been working on it and have like half done. Please be a god and finish soon! (Tomorrow would be great or the next day or in one week or in one month or three...well hopefully not three...)
Comments from author:
Sorry, I was trying to finish the chapter when RL interrupted me (and by that I mean I was literally sitting down to see if I could power through the rest of the chapter when my father started pounding on the door of my house, bleeding by the bucketful, and I had to rush him to the hospital--and the last few days haven't been much better) I'm hoping to finish it THIS weekend, and post it sometime next week, provided the universe stops toying with me like this.
Anyways... Glad you're enjoying the story! VERY happy to hear it feels like Buffy, despite being sort of sci-fi and crazy and dark and explosiony... well, okay, Buffy did go there more than once, so yep, that part wasn't much of a stretch. But spaceships! That's the thing! Very, very large spaceships. ::NodNod::
And yes, death (really-real death, which sticks) is serious business, and it has serious consequences--thank you again for seeing it as it was intended. I have a couple of scenes in mind where Buffy (and others) are trying to come to terms with that, and I can't wait to write them... but first we're going to have a big chapter full of guns and lightsabers and loud noises and Dawn announcing her awesomeness to the Earthlings in a fairly spectacular way :-)
Buffy IS going to continue to mess with the Star Wars setting and tech, just because she can (and because I can)--I hope the readers will accept that stuff as gracefully as they have the earlier changes, like the costume and the name. As you say, I'm aiming for a Star Wars 'flavor', but I'm more than willing to fiddle with the details.
As for Joyce, that's pretty much the only person she can be sure she DIDN'T kill. Remember, her mom was out of town that night (for some vague 'gallery reason', I think?), which is why they could have all the costume and monster attack shenanagans in the Summers' house that night without Mom seeing any of it.
Sorry again for the next chapter being delayed (again), but it really will be here quite soon, and I hope you'll continue to enjoy the story!
Review By [BromideSix
] • Date [1 Jan 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Epicurus
This story is really exciting and I've been slightly obsessed with it since I found it a couple of days ago. Reread it several times and spent a fair bit of time imagining what is going to happen next.
I also read through all of the reviews in the hopes of gleaning more info from your comments. Absolutely disgusted by all of those negative responses. I am so glad you kept writing and I hope you add another chapter soon.
Loved a lot of what you did here. Loved the way you added Dawn. I love the way Buffy modified the Vader back story and how it fit so well with her view on the Watchers. There was orbital bombardment! That is always great!
There's more but let's just say your stories are always a pleasure to read and quite honestly professional in quality.
Please update this one soon!
Comments from author:
That is an amazingly kind and generous review, and an immensely cheering thing to read since I am currently working on this very story.
The outraged Xander fans--meh, with the passage of a few months I've calmed down a little. Enough to understand their knee-jerk anger at least, if not the dogged insistence of some that I was an evil mastermind whose sole intent with this story was to hurt them.
I like this story a lot too; I like Dawn, I like Buffy, and I've never had the chance to write an orbital bombardment before :-)
Actually, I'm usually much more of a fantasy person, and not sci-fi, but of course Star Wars (and even Stargate) are not 'hard' sci fi, they're science fantasy, so it's not that big a stretch. The liberties I'm taking might irritate the Star Wars purists out there, but the focus here is always about the characters and the story, and not what tech from the comics can conceivably be crammed into this situation. (Although, that said, some google searches have turned up great ideas and bits of tech that I'll happily incorporate where appropriate).
'Professional Quality': (^_^) Thanks. I suspect I obsess over these stories a bit more than most authors, and it's nice to know that (some) people notice and approve of the results.
Okay, so anyway, I'm past the mid-point on chapter four, and working to finish it (despite feeling sick and generally icky at the moment), so hopefully you'll see it soon.
There's a LOT more of this to write about, if people want to see it, so I'd best get back to it.
Thank you again for letting me know you liked it.
Review By [Epicurus
] • Date [29 Dec 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from DarmanSkirata
Wow this is dark, I really can't say anything else.
Comments from author:
Well, THAT'S disappointing.
I'd hope you could carry away something more than that.
Review By [DarmanSkirata
] • Date [9 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from jts
Just an awesome story. Thanks so much for writing and I hope you're well!
Review By [jts
] • Date [16 Oct 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Ibskib
wow that is one epically awesome dark fic, a real shitstorm of chaos, I really liked how Buffy created her own background, and how it resonated with her own experiences, perhaps with her new sith powers and insights it will soon be time to visit those watchers.
And even in the darkness there was room for a bit of humour loved Dawn's satellite beautification game, beyond our understanding indeed :-)
the Leia chase interludes were nice, although unfortunately I didn't catch the reference if it was anything specific.
Comments from author:
Hey there, glad you're enjoying it!
I liked the idea of Buffy going along with Xander's choice of characters, but still insisting on changing things to suit her, like the name and parts of the backstory, and screw continuity.
Dawn wiping out decades' worth of satellite infrastructure based on their design aesthetics? Well, best not to argue with a Super StarDestroyer, lest your entire world be scoured down to the bedrock. ^_^
The Leia chase had lots of references with the people transformed into their costumes. Catching them isn't essential, though missing ALL of them does make me sad, 'cause I then wonder how I could have written it more clearly. In case you actually wanted to know:
First guy she encounters: Tarzan (from nearly any version)
Red-haired warrior woman in intersection: Red Sonja.
Handsome Man in formalwear and dark goggles who dies (with tiny chrome handgun that Leia ignores in favor of a broadsword): J, from 'Men in Black'.
Soldiers: Hicks, Hudson, and Frost from 'Aliens'.
And of course the unstoppable thing in the white plastic mask: Jason, from the 'Friday the 13th' series.
Review By [Ibskib
] • Date [1 Oct 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from SixPerfections
Great stuff. Love your creative crossovers. I enjoyed reading these three chapters and for some reason I really liked Cyber-Dawn. I honestly dont know where the story could go from here, is that why you stopped writing it? I mean what is Buffy going to do with the most powerful ship like anywhere? It's like things are so epic its gonna be hard to bring it back down to street level Slaying. Kinda like that whole twilight nonsense. But you rarely dissapoint so I'm curious to see where things go from her. Love your writing, hope you update soon. :)
Comments from author:
Hey, thanks for another nice review!
I think Dawn is inherently adorable in basically any form--at least I tend to write her from that point of view, though I realize the results may vary (^_^).
Where does it go from here?
Oh, my friend, there are definitely places to go from here. I have a good 10-12 chapters of material lined up for this one, and the only reason it isn't more is that it's fairly pointless to map it out any further in advance. Street-level Slaying probably isn't going to feature much (though I suppose it could), but there are a LOT of things to do in the Stargate universe with a Sith and a self-aware ship. And remember, that universe has plenty of very powerful starships scattered around, so it won't be a cakewalk by any means.
Thanks for reading/commenting (and Rec'ing, hopefully?) [he said, blantantly begging]
Review By [SixPerfections
] • Date [21 Sep 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Maleficuslupus
*sighs with pleasure* I love a good dark MilFic, and I love a good Buffycentric fic, this looks to be the best of both combined. I eagerly await further chapters.
Comments from author:
Pleased you were entertained!
I'm tied up with other writing projects for the next couple of weeks, but after that I'll get back to this and other Fanfic-type things.
Review By [Maleficuslupus
] • Date [28 Aug 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Xovervore
Just found this story. Impressive! Bad luck for Xander, but as the Operative in 'Serenity' said, "It was a good death".
Seems like many billions may have died, if I am correctly interpreting what Ethan Rayne said about where all the energy came from.
A unique approach with the future monks sending Dawn to Buffy in the form of energy possessing the ship as her body.
Well at least she can save Willow; and any problems the SGC will have are due to the Bauer-type general with the 'shoot first before having sufficient intelligence' approach to interstellar relations.
Review By [Xovervore
] • Date [22 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Moontrap
Wow. I just finished reading this, and found it quite exciting. Dawn as an AI, Willow as Leia, Buffy as a version of Darth Vader. I can understand you taking out Xander, as some times you just have to kill the character in your stories. Thank you for letting us read your work, and I can't wait to read more of it.
Review By [Moontrap
] • Date [13 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from ForSpite
I understand how the ship being recognized as Star Wars would throw everything off. But I think your explanation is a little overreaching. Yes, reality warping stuff happens many times in Buffy but this doesn't follow the same kind of internal logic. No one else is forgetting what the things that other costumes represent were, here or in canon.
An easier explanation occurs to me, though it might be too late to go with it: Xander and his friends made a bunch of custom changes right? So there's no reason for it to look exactly like any on-screen Star Wars ship. Similarly, if Galactic Standard isn't English some Star Wars similarities can be waved off as translation error or coincidence, as long as specific names aren't raised. Ah well, that might be too much hassle to make it plausible that they wouldn't be.
Other than that, I like the rest of the story fine and we've even hit a point where Xander's death is serving plot purposes.
Review By [ForSpite
] • Date [7 Aug 13] • Not Rated