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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)Listener
Review:
This was a clever piece. Lots of good world building, and lots of good lampshading of some of the more outlandish stuff in the HP universe.

My only qualms were that I couldn't quite nail down the mood you were going for (if this took place around the time of the dragon heist in DH, then things seemed very normal in the wizarding world) and the wrap-up (which felt slightly weak).

I'd definitely read more in this world, if you write it.
Review By [(Current Donor)Listener] • Date [10 Jun 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Misty
Review:
Interesting, I like. Thank you
Review By [Misty] • Date [16 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DofEire
Review:
Yay. Yay, I say. You make me to bounceth in my seat. (-Eth.) Great one, love how Giles handled Lucy, and oh my goodness all around, such a fun piece of work. I would be very very pleased to see a sequel or sequels. :)
Review By [DofEire] • Date [12 Apr 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from LetsRandom
Review:
One, you should do a sequel. Two, both American and British English have got it wrong. Canadian English incorporates the best of both worlds; the fantastical inclusion of U's, the option to use re and er as we see fit. The use of 'z' and 's' free to the user's discretion. Even better, we don't use weird words like torch or lift; we say things as they are.

That all aside, great piece of work!
Review By [LetsRandom] • Date [11 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from SMorgan
Review:
interesting this has potential to span out quite a ways.
Review By [SMorgan] • Date [10 Apr 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Jazzibear
Review:
There is much more that I would like to write about this totally splendid story, but Real Life presses for now. The much more will have to wait for a time.

For now, two points: the breakfast conversation is perfectly comprehensible, and sheer delight to boot; and in the matter of the various versions of English spoken and written in the USA and the British Isles, my feeling is that they are best called American and English. Calling them American English and British English is much too cumbersome for everyday use, I think – but each to his own.

Meanwhile, very many thanks for the great pleasure you have given me.
Review By [Jazzibear] • Date [10 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from HMaxMarius
Review:
This was quite a hoot...

Of course it is very AU to the potterverse... any sequel might want to clarify those AU changes a bit... The things I noticed along those lines were- Minister Fudge, who had been replaced by Scrimgour a year before Harry, Ron and Hermione went on the run from the Voldemort controlled ministry, which lead to the break-in at Gringotts... -Fortescue had closed his ice cream parlor and gone into hiding in that same timeframe...

But those are just nitpicks and I can see how those things can be changed around to support your story... it just needs a bit of support to explain for those who are TOO steeped in the Potter lore... ;)

I'd really love to see a sequel, since in your story Voldimort clearly isn't dead and never achieved control of the Ministry... and you left that LOVELY hook with Hermione having that little unseen interview with Giles and Willow.
Comments from author:
Yes, we are in AU territory. I will have to re-read the last couple of HP books before writing the sequel. It's going to be a little tricky to reconcile my changes.
Review By [HMaxMarius] • Date [10 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Morgomir
Review:
Great story so far. Keep up the good work, whatever it may be.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [10 Apr 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from EllandrahSylver
Review:
This was funny. I enjoyed it.
Review By [EllandrahSylver] • Date [10 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Genuka
Review:
Evil evil evil.... Now I have to watch this for the next installment. *frustrated*
Review By [Genuka] • Date [9 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)Katrina
Review:
I really very much enjoyed this and I have to say, I think Willow was spot on. She *is* the most powerful witch, in canon, so... I could see it carrying over quite handily in an HP crossover. (/end Opinion)

Thank you for sharing.
Review By [(Current Donor)Katrina] • Date [9 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Tabercil
Review:
Bravo! Bravo! Encore! Encore!!
Review By [Tabercil] • Date [9 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from kiwi
Review:
Lovely! Well done!!!!
Review By [kiwi] • Date [9 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from OtteryLexa
Review:
[quote]"Don't even try missy, it took a half dozen of the most powerful witches and wizards in the wizarding world – all imbued with white magic and good intentions mind – a couple of sennights to shut down a hellmouth o' that size. I know, because we done it afore, in Mayalsia."

"A, a, a dozen witches? Sennights?" wavered Willow.

"What's a sennight?" asked Xander.

"You probably call them fortnights o'er in the colonies."

"You couldn't prove it by me," said Xander.

"Those words are not unknown stateside," said Willow, "but we usually just say two weeks."
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sennight = seven night = week
fortnight = fourteen night = 2 week

If you really meant 28 days, and you wanted to be archaic, then you'd say something like "it took them a whole moon". Except then you couldn't have the conversation about sennight and fortnight.

I'm enjoying the story so far, it's a nice way to cross the two universes.
As a matter of formatting, though, I'd have preferred it to be split into chapters.
Comments from author:
I wish I could claim I merely left out a word or two and meant to say two sennights or one fortnight. But in fact, this is what happens when I rely on my memory without double checking. That plus the fact that sennight is an archaic word that I'm pretty sure I've never used before, either in writing or in speech. So maybe I can fanwank it and claim that it was Willow who got it wrong. But who am I kidding? Willow is smarter than me, she would have known.
Review By [OtteryLexa] • Date [9 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Salric
Review:
Sequel? WANT. Please?

Returning to proper English, it is so rare to read a well-written Buffy-Potter crossover that doesn't include other crosses, gives fair treatment of both universes, avoids the cliches of that particular cross. You've managed it, and I would dearly like to see more of this combination.
Comments from author:
Thanks. There will be more, although I am not certain how soon as I am not a fast writer. But I'm working out the plot now.
Review By [Salric] • Date [9 Apr 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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