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Review of chapter "Requesting Backup" from (Recent Donor)SlayerandWereLeopard
Review:
great start! hope it will be continued :)
Review By [(Recent Donor)SlayerandWereLeopard] • Date [27 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Requesting Backup" from Stationary
Review:
interesting start you have here....would be nice to read more of this 'verse
Review By [Stationary] • Date [21 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Requesting Backup" from RevDorothyL
Review:
Any plans to continue this?
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [20 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Requesting Backup" from eriktheviking
Review:
A well written and interesting crossover.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [15 Apr 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Requesting Backup" from kelvin
Review:
interesting story
Review By [kelvin] • Date [14 Apr 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Requesting Backup" from DarthPayne
Review:
Too bad the fic ended there, looks like a good start to a good fic...
Review By [DarthPayne] • Date [14 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Requesting Backup" from ShyBob
Review:
I liked the novel spin on the Death Dealer origins. I could totally see Buffy and Selene hitting it off, or at least working together. But what's the Death Dealer gonna do when Faith makes a pass at her man? Or when Vi wants to try out the guns? More, please :)
Comments from author:
Glad you enjoyed it.
Review By [ShyBob] • Date [14 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Requesting Backup" from bradsan
Review:
Darn finished already, hate that.

Good short one. Love it.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [14 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Requesting Backup" from ianquest
Review:
Interesting idea for the start of a story, but where's the story? All the action appears off-screen, and it appears that despite the changes, it goes to exactly the same place as the movie in the end - except that it doesn't actually end. This chapter ficlet could be summed up as "Selene & Michael run to America and ask Buffy for help. Buffy says yes. Alexander Corvinus sends Selene a vial of his blood. Selene drinks it. The End."

With a bit of fleshing out, this could be the core of an exciting, dramatic story. For example: Selene & Michael flee the Coven, knowing that Kraven & his Death Dealers are snapping at their heels. Selene has heard rumours in intelligence reports of a powerful force of vampire-hunters in America, so they head for the airport, fighting a running battle on the way, maybe with a car chase en route. They make it to the airport and slip onto a plane just ahead of Kraven & his team, knowing that they'll be in a private jet mere hours behind them. Making it to America, a desperate cross-country chase ensues as they follow a trail of clues and rumours until they reach Cleveland and run into a Slayer patrol group. A tense stand-off ensues as they try to convince the Slayers of their good intentions, when suddenly the Death Dealers come upon them. Kraven recognises the Slayers for what they are, and a running battle across the city starts, as he frantically tries to stop them from reaching Slayer headquarters. They reach the sanctuary of the gates just ahead of him, and he & his team fall back to plan their next move. The meeting between Buffy, Selene & Michael happens, & Buffy sends a European team to locate Alexander Corvinus. They're equipped with wearable cameras & radios so that HQ can see & hear the battle, watching as they and the Corvin troops fight off the attack. They come upon Alexander too late and he speaks his last words to Selene, halfway across the planet. A witch with the local Slayer team teleports the vial to Selene, and their preparations for the final battle begin - knowing all the while that Kraven is still out there somewhere, ready to strike from the shadows at any moment...

With a bit of work, this could be an excellent story, and you certainly seem to have the writing skills - the quality of the spelling alone puts you ahead of numerous other writers here & elsewhere. This is let down by the rushed feel, everything happening off-screen, and the lack of a resolution. A bit of rewriting would turn this into a worthy effort.
Comments from author:
I might write a second part to explain the differences between this and the movie. Haven't decided.

The problem, as far as I'm concerned, with doing that story you described is my muse would be likely give up partway through. I may rewrite it, but such a thing wouldn't be posted unless I finished it. I wanted to get this out there.
Review By [ianquest] • Date [14 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Requesting Backup" from AndreaMaine
Review:
You have a great story here, but I think it is only the beginning.
Review By [AndreaMaine] • Date [14 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Requesting Backup" from MeganPrice
Review:
Well that ending just left it opened, hopefully, for either a series or a longer story! Yes, No, Maybe???
Review By [MeganPrice] • Date [14 Apr 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Requesting Backup" from aveave
Review:
Great story. Are you going to write a sequel?
Review By [aveave] • Date [14 Apr 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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