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Ship of the Line: Doomsday

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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)NekoHibiki
Review:
Just one problem.

When the machine destroyed Sunnydale it would've destroyed the bust of Janus then.

Then it would've ceased to exist any.
Comments from author:
I did think about that, actually. I even had an explanation in the original story (this one's just the final version).

My thinking was, when the spell ended, everyone retained their costumes even though they weren't part of them. So, if something that wasn't part of the costume was manifested by the spell, it would stick around as well.
Review By [(Current Donor)NekoHibiki] • Date [1 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from wolfshell
Review:
I didn't say that I didn't like it. I did like it, despite not being fond of character death fics. I just felt that it didn't meet the challenge.
Comments from author:
Fair enough.
Review By [wolfshell] • Date [20 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from wolfshell
Review:
How is this a match for the challenge? The doomsday machine had no captain, or commodore, or crew for that matter. That's my thoughts on this fic anyway.
Comments from author:
That is correct, but one cannot deny that Decker was associated with the Doomsday Machine, and that it qualifies as a Ship of the Line.

It doesn't say that the ship in question actually has to belong to the character that Xander dresses as. Only that they are associated.

But still, if you don't like the story, fair enough.
Review By [wolfshell] • Date [19 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from eriktheviking
Review:
A well written bleak outcome from Halloween.
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [19 Apr 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DarthTenebrus
Review:
Ethan, you naughty boy, this is not something you can simply "oops" off your record, you got some 'splainin' to do...
Comments from author:
Somehow, I don't think the Powers That Be/Janus would really care what his explanation was. It looks like eternal damnation for him.
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [18 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Bobboky
Review:
Nice
Comments from author:
Thank you!
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [18 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from djhardim
Review:
Good. Xander probably should have recognized which episode the shirt came from.

Prior to the first movie, each ship had its own emblem (the upright arrow was the Enterprise).

For the Constellation -

http://www.bing.com/images/search?q=Star+Trek+ship+emblems&;qpvt=Star+Trek+ship+emblems&FORM=IGRE#view=detail&id=F3944E59A39D917D869F5BC248AD3BED2570BE2E&selectedIndex=15

It's the rectangularly shaped one at the lower left corner.
Comments from author:
I feel like I should've known that.

Thanks!
Review By [djhardim] • Date [18 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Genuka
Review:
Yeah, that fit.
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Review By [Genuka] • Date [18 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from MarcusRowland
Review:
Nice to see I'm not the only writer with reservations about this challenge - nicely done!

Of course the Next Gen equivalent would be the Borg turning up...
Comments from author:
Well, I'm always a fan of mentally unstable characters and massive casualties. If it puts the spoke in a spate of Xander-stus, that's just a bonus.
Review By [MarcusRowland] • Date [18 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from cmdruhura
Review:
That is one way to deal with all the Hell Mouths and demons in the world.
Comments from author:
It's rather effective, don't you think? Besides the massive amount of collateral damage, of course.

Thank you.
Review By [cmdruhura] • Date [18 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from CPTSkip
Review:
Nicely dark and chilling. But not much chance of a follow-up is there?
Comments from author:
It was originally considerably more so, but I thought I'd lighten the tone a little.

You'd be the surprised, actually. This comment sparked a chain of ideas that I might even write at some point.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [18 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from cyberfish
Review:
A good story,but a sad one
Comments from author:
Thank you. It was originally rather sadder, but I thought I'd lighten the tone a little.
Review By [cyberfish] • Date [18 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Omegaprime
Review:
Now THAT'S a really big "Oooppss" moment right there.

Xander should've went with the Klingon outfit.
Comments from author:
Indeed he should.

Thank you.
Review By [Omegaprime] • Date [18 Apr 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from TAO
Review:
And once again, two members of the Powers That Be are watching the mayhem happen from the safety of their dimensional plane of existence.

Power #1: "Um...that's not good."

Power #2: "Yeah...we could have handled that one a little bit better."

Power #1: "So...what do we do now? We just wiped out another world in a key dimension."

Power #2: "What we always do when something like this happens...we blame Deadpool for it."

Power #1: "You think they'll buy that."

Power #2: "Hey...he's wiped out a couple universe's already...one more on his record won't matter."


******

Okay...I have no idea where that idea came from just now.


As for this fic...definitely a cosmic "Oops" is in order.
Comments from author:
I just had an image of a star system forming in the shape of an oops. That would be truly cosmic.
Review By [TAO] • Date [18 Apr 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)Feynor
Review:
Well done :)
And a proper "Oops!" moment.
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Review By [(Current Donor)Feynor] • Date [18 Apr 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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