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Review of chapter "Dawn Patrol" from jimk
Review:
It was a cool dogfight scene but at the same time it didn't make a lot of sense in the overall context. It's 2021. They have massive interstellar warships. The SGC is public. They have at least F-302's. Yet there still flying F-18's and worried about ancient Exocet missiles? I have a hard time believing the Navy would not have moved into space and if they still had ocean going carriers does anyone seriously believe they would not at least be armed with ion cannons?
Comments from author:
How many F302's does the US military have? Look at today's US air force. There are only a little less than 200 F-22's in the fleet. While there have been nearly 1,800 F-15's of all models built. That last F-15C's were built in 1985 and are still in front line service.

As for the Exocet, it is still in production to this day and has had a major upgrade as late as 2004 to the Block III model. It is still a threat and who's to say it won't be in the future... The US Navy's Harpoon Missile has been in production since 1977 and is still the US armed forces primary Anti-Ship missile.

This is not a "Star Trek" unified world. The SGC and Aliens have only been outed to the public for 26 years. The US military needs to still have a strong presence around the globe. Not to mention. Building starships and Aerospace fighters is EXPENSIVE! and I would imagine other than a few squadrons for homeworld defence, the F-302's would be tasked with off planet and space based work. Leaving the "old" aircraft like the F-22, F-18E/F/G F-35A/B/C and even a few F-15's and 16's to take care of things on Earth.
Review By [jimk] • Date [4 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dawn Patrol" from JimmX
Review:
Good series so far--I read the prequels first, so I was surprised when I got into I Choose You to see what happened. :-)

A couple comments:

This story isn't included in the Series yet.

In all of these stories I've seen places where you have sentence breaks that really should only be comma or semicolon breaks. As written, they're sentence fragments.
Comments from author:
I don't have a Beta, so the grammar problems may crop up from time to time. And I fixed the problem with it not being a part of the "I choose You" verse.
Review By [JimmX] • Date [2 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dawn Patrol" from Genuka
Review:
Nice, you might want to link it with the others in your verse. turn it into a series
Review By [Genuka] • Date [28 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dawn Patrol" from AndreaMaine
Review:
Wonder if you'll do a story of Dawn doing rotation as an F-302 Squadron CO sometime.
Review By [AndreaMaine] • Date [28 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dawn Patrol" from (Current Donor)Sithspit
Review:
Ok, obviously from reading your other stories, some of the names do appear in other stories, but....

This was a fantastic little one-shot, stand-alone story. Practically perfect, with only a typo or two here or there to offer even the slightest hint of spoilage.

Loved it.
Review By [(Current Donor)Sithspit] • Date [27 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dawn Patrol" from Cordyfan
Review:
Very well-written and thoroughly enjoyable - I wouldn't mind seeing a sequel to this one, perhaps with Dawn flying F-302s.

Keep up the good work and thanks for writing this.
Comments from author:
THANK You! A review from you hits the spot as you seem to be a master of Military/SGC/Buffy fanfic. As the inspiration hits, I may add more of Dawn's military career.
Review By [Cordyfan] • Date [27 Apr 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Dawn Patrol" from (Recent Donor)DaveTurner
Review:
Good story full of action and detail.

D.
Review By [(Recent Donor)DaveTurner] • Date [27 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dawn Patrol" from (Recent Donor)DaveTurner
Review:
'against a mixed troupe of demons'

This was some sort of all singing all dancing troupe of demons?

I think you mean 'troop', however I think 'band' would be an even better word or maybe 'tribe'

Now I'll go back and read the rest of the story.

D.
Review By [(Recent Donor)DaveTurner] • Date [27 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dawn Patrol" from DarthTenebrus
Review:
What a fight!.....and a good backstory to boot, if a bit pessimistic. And what an ending...yikes!
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [26 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dawn Patrol" from grd
Review:
Reminds me of "101st" another great flying story. Excellent and hope you do more.
Review By [grd] • Date [26 Apr 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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