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Review of chapter "chapter twenty-eight: hidden treasures" from shadowflame
Review:
I adore this story so much.
The wonder of hand-me-down clothes! I can feel the sense of safety and comfort and family in that scene.
Look forward to more!
Review By [shadowflame] • Date [7 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter nine: half asleep" from shadowflame
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First, I love this story so far. It's a great take on a different Petunia raising Harry, and I think losing her child would definitely make her value Harry, her sister's child---any child---so much more. That line at the end of the ...second? third?...chapter about how she wouldn't wish this pain on her sister was perfect.
The narrative style is perfect for this two: the depressed, melancholy tone is extremely evident following the miscarriage. But, the style still fits once Petunia breaks out of that depressed haze and starts living--even if initially it is 'over energetic just to not sink back in to the haze' living. And the same for once she gets Harry.

One thing I was wondering was about the timeline. I assume she miscarries around month 7 (which, since Dudley was supposed to be born in June would be April), and then she and Vernon divorce a few months later, so around month 10 (July, Harry's born end of). But she appears to come out of that haze state shortly before Harry's arrival, so did she spent a year or more depressed?
Comments from author:
Yes, you are right about the timeline - I was purposefully vague in those chapters though because Petunia had lost her sense of it (time that is). But she does spend around a year stuck in her own head mourning the child she lost. I thought that between being so very alone for the first time in her life, naturally being such an intensely introverted person, and dealing with the sudden death it made sense. I know I don't detail that time period much, rather paint it in broad strokes, - but I rather felt Petunia herself was lost and blank for large stretches of it.

I hope that makes sense - thank you for your kind words and taking the time to review, shadowflame.
Review By [shadowflame] • Date [7 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter twenty-eight: hidden treasures" from Eureka
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I really love seeing how Harry is fitting in with his world. I too know the feeling of getting other's hand me downs and of sending my loved items to others in my family. I also know the feeling of being jeered at for having hand me downs or stuff bought at second hand stores. To read that Harry is accepted and loved is a great turn around from what you usually read of Potter crossovers. I have read very few that have him actually happy (specially when he is with the Dursley's.) so I enjoy reading your story.

Sorry for the late review, been trying to catch up on all the stories I currently read.
Review By [Eureka] • Date [24 Jan 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter twenty-eight: hidden treasures" from Rod
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It's lovely to see this story moving on again after a pause. You never fail to bring a smile to my face. Thank you.

On hand-me-downs, it seems to be an oddly personal thing. I had no problem with it, but then I was generally the one handing things down. My brother, who got my things, did have a problem with them not being properly his. I suppose it's different for Harry and Robyn, who don't see the clothes being worn by other people on a daily basis so don't start out thinking of them as so much belonging to a specific person. Or maybe I'm completely wrong. Who knows?
Comments from author:
Thank you for your kind words, Rod. It makes me smile right back to receive such feedback.

When it comes to hand-me-downs, I both gave and received them. And, for me - on the receiving end - they came from both older siblings (whom I saw wear the items) and cousins/aunts/other relations (that I might not see as often). But, as you said, it is probably a very personal thing. And perhaps if within someone's environment, they are teased for wearing these things (as Ron was) they would come to resent them. I never had that experience though (found it odd, in fact, that is was so prevalent in the books) and am having Harry's relationship to hand-me-down/second-hand items more mirror my own instead.

Hope that response wasn't too rambling, Rod. And thank you again for reading my little story and taking the time to review.
Review By [Rod] • Date [10 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter twenty-eight: hidden treasures" from Questara
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Enjoyable. That is all I have to say :)
Comments from author:
And thank you is all I shall say back. :)
Review By [Questara] • Date [8 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter twenty-eight: hidden treasures" from banditdoz
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Thank you x
Comments from author:
And I thank you right back for taking the time to review, banditdoz!
Review By [banditdoz] • Date [8 Jan 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter twenty-eight: hidden treasures" from joshlamont
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Absolutely amazing and adorable.
Comments from author:
*curtsies* Thank ya kindly, joshlamont.
Review By [joshlamont] • Date [8 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter twenty-eight: hidden treasures" from Angelfirenze
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*glee* It's great to see how well-adjusted this version of Harry is, and the juxtaposition both have to Ron's attitude where he has all the love and family surroundings that Ron does, but actually appreciates them before something happens.

That said, Harry wouldn't take to Mrs. Weasley trying to shoehorn his life in the direction she wants it to go in, which can only be a good thing. I like Mrs. Weasley, but her pushiness really grates at times.
Comments from author:
I never understood the book's attitude in regards to hand-me-down or second-hand items. Growing up, I had a very large extended family and often got clothing from older cousins (or other random family members) when they had outgrown them, or books - furniture when older. There was never anything seen as shameful about this, it just made sense (and the re-use always felt rather neat). So, I decided to have Harry's experience mirror my own a bit in this way I guess. *laughs*

As for Mrs. Weasley, she is one of those characters that I think has both good and bad traits. I think she is the sort too many people give utter leeway in things because she is "good" - but I am always a bit bothered by people who always think they know best. (And honestly, I think she reminds me a bit too much of someone I know *snorts*)

But, I feel bad writing her meanly because I somehow fell into making her the antagonist of my Fred Sola Lovegood series, so I kinda want to pull at her better characteristics and write her with a kinder slant in this.

Thanks so much for the review, Angelfirnze - it really got me thinking about Mrs.Weasley, I had considered a lot of different character interactions but I hadn't thought to much on her yet. *begins pondering*
Review By [Angelfirenze] • Date [8 Jan 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter twenty-eight: hidden treasures" from ChaosLady
Review:
Sweet.
Comments from author:
*curtsies* Thank ya kindly, ChaosLady.
Review By [ChaosLady] • Date [7 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter twenty-eight: hidden treasures" from Misty
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*melts* Thank you x
Comments from author:
*laughs* Your very welcome, Misty. Thank you for reviewing.
Review By [Misty] • Date [7 Jan 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter twenty-eight: hidden treasures" from DarthTenebrus
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I have truly enjoyed the read thus far, in no small part due to the way in which you laid this story out; these little vignettes are just links in that lovely little paper chain that says Harry Potter Evans is loved by all.

I get te feel that something important is just around the corner for Harry, something wonderful and extraordinary, and with each new chapter you post it gets that much closer without quite revealing itself. I just hope we don't end up waiting much longer...the suspense can plateau for only so long after crescendo, and then the letdown begins. ..
Comments from author:
I understand that feeling - of not wanting to be letdown - and I hope I follow through. What I can tell you is that as I am mapping this out, it has been surprising to me how soon it is until the letter comes. Not right away, mind. But rather soon.

One thing you have to remember (and try to have patience with), is the pacing that I have tried to maintain throughout - to world build and show growth, but also to show the love and calm Harry has as his base here. To suddenly jump to age eleven wouldn't really fit right. So, the Wizarding World - and the excitement therein - is coming. But first, there will still be a few more chapters here in Cokeworth.

Thanks for the lovely feedback, I really appreciate it, DarthTenebrus.
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [7 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter twenty-eight: hidden treasures" from VillageOrchid
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I'm continuing to like this, but constructively would like to know more about their personal time frames. Are they still 7? Is this a flashback to them at an even younger age (it could plausibly be as young as 4 for this scene)?
Will we have a chapter of Petunia going to a store to find a quill and ink? Perhaps them both learning to write that way at the same time?
Comments from author:
I am moving pretty much linearly in this story - even if I don't often don't name exact ages (and I don't think I've ever done a flashback except for perhaps a character remembering something within a scene). But I think the chapter I -do- name an age, closest to this one, would be 26 where Harry is eight.

I'm sorry if this is confusing but, as you mentioned, it wasn't really a bit where there ages were relevant. Oh, and I know for certain in an upcoming chapter I mention it - it's a birthday one. *grin*

As for writing with a quill and ink, it's funny you mentioned that because I already wrote that in something I will be posting in the future *laughs*. Although, Robyn wouldn't need to - and honestly, if it wasn't required of me I'd write with a pen or pencil instead. So much simpler - but then again I press stupidly hard when I write and know that it would be an absolute mess if I had to use a quill.

Thanks for reviewing, VillageOrchid - hope I answered your question!
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [7 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter thirteen: practiced movement" from VillageOrchid
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I seem to have missed a lot of chapters and am coming back into this story with a little re-reading. One of the things that I really like about this chapter is little Harry's accepting personality of how things are. This mirrors cannon Harry, although he is under better and more loving circumstances here.
Comments from author:
Thank ya, VillageOrchid. I think when you grow up a certain way you either accept things or grow bitter - and with the loving environment, Harry found it easy to accept things, even when times weren't the easiest for Tune and him. And I think that is a good temperament to have.

Thanks for the feedback!
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [7 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter twenty-eight: hidden treasures" from Amberdrake
Review:
Sweet
Comments from author:
*curtsies* Thank ya kindly, Amberdrake.
Review By [Amberdrake] • Date [7 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter twenty-eight: hidden treasures" from AllenPitt
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Can't wait for him to get to Hogwarts, though the buildup is necessary (and fun). I can see him writing letters to her now. "Dear Aunt, I did well on an exam. Another student got petrified & the body carted off to the medical wing. They're really piling up in there. Not sure they've told any of the parents yet, though. Everybody thinks I'm behind it. How was your day?"
Comments from author:
*laughs* And Tune will not be pleased at being kept out of the loop by the staff.

It's almost weird that it isn't too much longer until he gets his letter - I'm used to this story being about Tune and Harry separate from the Wizarding World where magic is either a memory or something looming in the distance. But I have already written out bits for Hogwarts and - like you said it's fun how very different this Harry is just because he has been raised differently and therefore his POV on things is not that of cannon.

Thanks, as always, for reviewing AllenPitt.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [7 Jan 14] • Not Rated
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