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Review of chapter "Next Season, on the Child of Balime..." from DieselDriver
Thanks for your comments. I really appreciate the explanation. I hope they show those episodes again. Wish they would show the really old ones, the originals. So far, of the modern era, my favorite doctor is Chris Eccelstone. Haven't even seen the newest one yet.

And can I do a "Xander" and say "Oops". Never even thought to look the episodes up and read the summaries.

Thanks again.
Comments from author:
It's fine! Don't worry. My pleasure.

I sympathize with your predicament. I don't have a TV in my room, and usually watch Doctor Who episodes on Amazon Prime. But with so many people at the hotel, I've decided to save the bandwidth for the guests, so no streaming video for me this summer! Hence, no watching Doctor Who episodes until the off-season.

If you have Amazon Prime, they have a bunch of Classic Who episodes up online for free. Or you can search on Daily Motion. I'd start watching Classic Who by watching the episodes written by Douglas Adams: particularly the Key to Time series, and City of Death (which is extremely good, after they stop wandering around Paris and actually get to the plot). Those should be up on Amazon Prime and on Netflix, if you have either of those.

I just wrote a very small little snippet, inside a story for Child of Balime Season 4, with the Ninth Doctor. Along with Jack and Rose. I thought it turned out quite well.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [2 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Part V: After the Year" from DieselDriver
Well, CRAPPYDOODLE!!!!!!!!!!!

How did they defeat the master??????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????

I don't have access to the show. Don't know what happened. Now you tell me you are not going to finish the story??????? Dirty rotten scoundrel is what you are for that one.
Comments from author:
Oh, sorry!

Okay, will summarize show for you.

Last of the Time Lords starts out a year after the Master took over the world. The rockets are almost ready to launch and conquer other planets, and the world's basically destroyed. Martha is scouring the world for a weapon to defeat the Master (she explains that it's a special kind of gun that was hidden in four parts across the world, the last time the Master was around on Earth). The Doctor, meanwhile, is up on the Valiant, very old and not saying much. He looks very tired.

Martha stops by a labor camp, and starts telling them stories about the Doctor. She also finds a secret resistance-contact, who claims to be helping her, and together they find out the truth about the Toclafane.

The Master feels threatened, especially since he's so close to the rocket launch and he still doesn't know what Martha's plan is. So he goes on TV and does a special broadcast to Martha, in which he shrinks the Doctor down to a tiny little thing and shoves him in a bird cage. Martha's reaction to this is relief, because it's the first time she knows for sure that the Doctor's still alive.

Martha's secret contact, as it turns out, is a double-agent. The secret contact calls up the Master and tells him where Martha's hiding and what her plan is with the gun.

The Master comes down to Earth and captures Martha. He destroys the bag with the gun, and takes her up to the Valiant.

In typical Master-style dramatic flare, the Master decides to execute Martha when the rockets launch. He starts the countdown to the rocket-launch, and the whole world is watching and waiting. As the Master is gloating about his victory, though, Martha starts cracking up.

"A gun in four parts, scattered across the world?" Martha says to him. "Did you really believe that?"

Turns out, Martha was lying about the gun.

Martha then tells the Master what she was really doing, while travelling across the world: telling stories. She was spreading hope to the slave population, by telling them about the Doctor and what he could do.

(This, by the way, is why Ria's message was a double-meaning. To Buffy, it said that Dawn was safe. To the people on Earth, it was reinforcing Martha's message.)

And Martha was also spreading around one specific instruction, as the Doctor had told her to, before Martha escaped the Valiant: "Use the Countdown".

The Master is completely floored, because he thought Martha had been working to a formidable PLAN, not something like this! Which, the Master is sure, is the stupidest thing he's ever heard.

"I told all those slaves," Martha says to the Master, "that if everyone thinks of one word, at one specific time..."
"...then nothing will happen!" the Master cuts in. "Is that your weapon? Prayer?!"
Martha ignores him. "Right across the world. one word. Just one thought at one moment."
The Master prepares to kill her, sure this is BS.
"But with fifteen satellites..." Martha reminds him.
Now the Master does a double-take.
Realizing there's something he missed.

Martha explains that because the Archangel network is a telepathic network, binding the human race together, that one thought at one moment will be amplified tenfold. And since the Doctor has taken the last year to slowly integrate himself, on a psychic level, into the Archangel network, the human race gives him the boost he needs to overpower the network, stop the rocket launch, and de-age himself.

The Doctor then tells the Master that he has one thing to say to him: "I forgive you."

The Master and the Toclafane realize they've lost. The Toclafane spin off to protect the paradox machine, and the Master grabs Jack's Vortex Manipulator, and teleports down to the Earth. The Doctor notices, and manages to grab on, so they are transported together.

The Master decides that if he can't win, he'll set the rockets to blow up the Earth, as a great big "screw you" to the Doctor. The Doctor tries to talk him out of it.

Jack, meanwhile, manages to get past the Toclafane and gain access to the TARDIS.

The Doctor points out that he knows the Master is bluffing, because to destroy the world, the Master would be killing himself. And after the Master nearly destroyed countless planets multiple times, in the old series, trying to extend his own life -- the Doctor knows this is something the Master will NEVER do.

Jack disables the Paradox Machine, and time starts reversing.

The Doctor manages to poke the right button on the Vortex Manipulator, so that he and the Master are on the Valiant, again. Time reverses to the point at which the paradox machine was activated -- right after the President was killed. The Toclafane are all gone and the Master no longer has any supporters. The only reason anyone on the Valiant knows the truth about what happened during the Year that Never Was is because they're in the "eye of the storm".

Now that it's obvious the Master's completely lost, and is powerless, basically everyone on the Valiant wants to kill him.

The Doctor talks them out of it, telling them that, "you're better than that."

He resolves to keep the Master locked up in his TARDIS, and try to help him. (I guess that makes sense. They did used to be friends, once upon a time. And the Doctor misses having other Time Lords around.)

But before he can, Lucy gets her hands on the gun and shoots the Master. Apparently, she's had enough, and gotten a lot more abuse than we'd thought.

The Master stops the regeneration process, realizing that if he dies, then the Doctor will be alone and miserable, and that means...

"I win," the Master tells the Doctor, as he dies.

The episode ends with the Doctor rebuilding his ship, and Martha telling him that she's going to have to leave -- to take care of her family, who are still traumatized. Jack also leaves, to get back to his Torchwood team -- because he's realized that he actually really likes them. The Doctor breaks Jack's VM, on purpose, before he goes. Saying, " I can't have you walking around with a time travelling teleport. You could go anywhere, twice. The second time to apologize."
"And what about me?" Jack asks the Doctor. "Can you fix that? Will I ever be able to die?"
"Nothing I can do," says the Doctor. "You're an impossible thing, Jack."
Jack thinks about this, and guesses he has no choice. Then mentions, "What about aging? Because I can't die but I keep getting older. The odd little grey hair, you know? What happens if I live for a million years?"
"I really don't know," says the Doctor.
"Okay, vanity," says Jack. "Can't help it. Used to be a poster boy when I was a kid living on the Boeshane Peninsula. Tiny little place. I was the first one ever to be signed up for the Time Agency. They were so proud of me. The Face of Boe, they called me."

(I say this because if you keep reading my series, I will mention it later.)

So the Doctor's alone, again, and off on another adventure.

That's the end of the Last of the Time Lords.

Hope that summary helped!
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [1 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Forty Three" from DieselDriver
Time traveling doctor you know. He might not have done whatever it is yet. Kind of like the episode "Blink" or the movie/novel "Millennium". Lots of effect then cause in both of them.
Comments from author:
Actually, funny you mention that, because timey-whimey stuff like that comes up ALL THE TIME in my stories. Just not on this particular occasion.

By the way, in response to your next comment, if you'd like me to give you a summary of any episode that's interwoven with something in my series, just let me know, and I will. (Or you can look it up on Wikipedia. That's also a good option. And it has pictures!)

I don't think any of the others are quite as integrated as this, except maybe Torchwood's Children of Earth, but I actually wrote in the Torchwood parts of that along with my story, so you shouldn't get too messed up.

I think the only other episode that might clarify a lot is the End of Time, which will be important for a story that I haven't posted, yet (but will, very soon!). Basically, what you need to know is this:

***SPOILERS, coming up!***

The Master gets resurrected. He screws around with something called the "Immortality Gate", which he uses to... well, you'll see when you read my story.

But, as it happens, the Master is just a cog in a much larger wheel. The Time Lords, within the Time War, know that the Doctor has the Moment and is prepared to use it to destroy Gallifrey. They decide to prepare their Final Sanction, which basically involves blowing up the universe and using that energy to ascend to a higher plane. But first, they have to get out of the Time Lock.

They do this by going back in time and implanting the four-beat rhythm into the Master's head. The Master is able to follow the rhythm and collect something else the Time Lords have sent through: a white-point star, which is a small gemstone from Gallifrey.

The Master uses the white-point star as a focus, to forcibly shove open the link between the Time War and our reality, and let the Time Lords through.

There's a whole big finale, which I won't get into, since it's complicated and probably something Wikipedia can summarize better than me. But the Time Lords get put back in the Time War, the Master gets sucked into the Time Lock as well. And the Tenth Doctor winds up dying -- regenerating into Doctor 11.

So... um... apart from that... I can't think of any other episodes you'll really need. Just give me a shout-out if you do, though, and I'll get back to summarizing!

Speaking of which, I better post the end of "Four, Five, Six", before people get mad.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [1 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty" from DieselDriver
Heh, At this point, why the heck doesn't she give him the option of returning his memories so that he can have something to counter the lack of first hand knowledge that Glory was bludgeoning him with?

Per your A/N from the previous chapter... Sounds like you as a "Rupert" need an "Anya" to run the money making part of this outfit you work for or own or whatever it is.
Comments from author:
This particular Buffy has a massive fatal flaw, which is that she wants the Doctor to stick around and is willing to sacrifice a lot for him to do that.

I think that's the real reason she doesn't give back his memories. She doesn't want him to leave.

Maybe it's a good thing, in the end, that Seo wound up with OUR Buffy, instead of the alternate-timeline-version.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [1 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty Two" from DieselDriver
(I'm going to be poor and broke my whole life. And I'm never gonna get health care.)"

Dude, put your a/n's at the end of the chapter, not the beginning! Darnit! I forget what to write by the end. I copied this when I read it and still almost forgot to comment.

Ok, actual comment now: Hey! If you have no money, go on welfare. Free healthcare. Curious, why haven't you written a salable book? You write well enough, should be able to.

BTW, whereabouts is your hotel? Is there something special about it? Touristy area?
Comments from author:
South Lake Tahoe. It's actually really beautiful, here. And we have an Olympic skier that learned by skiing Heavenly!

Funny you should leave a comment on this, since I think I'm about to get a raise, so I can afford health care! Hurray! Actually, since writing this, I have learned a few key ingredients to a successful hotel:

1) Ignore your uncle when he says, "I don't know why we need XYZ. It's so expensive. Let's cut it out and have our guests rough it!" PARTICULARLY when XYZ is maid service, internet, cable tv, hot water, and other things that one might consider fairly essential to a hotel.

2) Don't run a hotel in Tahoe while there's a massive drought on. We've gotten no snow for years, now, and it's killing us.

3) Don't run a hotel in Tahoe in the year 2014. I think God hates Tahoe, this year. We got no precipitation in the winter, so no snow. Now, we've got thunderstorms and downpours all the time, and it's cutting out our power and driving away customers, but not helping the drought or doing us any favors!

4) Don't have employees that do really stupid things. Like rent out a room that's just been renovated for several thousand dollars, with brand new tile and flat screen tvs and everything, and ruin it in 2 months by renting it for less than $25 a night to people with pets who smoke. SO much unneeded expense!

5) Don't ever rent a room for over 30 days to anyone, for any price. This you might actually need to know, as it caught AirBnB by surprise! Over 30 days, and you get slapped with a bunch of legal craziness where you can't actually get people to move out.

As I recall, I posted this story last summer. We were having a lot of trouble last summer because we'd gotten stuck with the problem in #5. One of those guys who wouldn't leave decided he had full right to beat up people staying at our hotel, destroy our property, and steal our stuff.

Needless to say, when you get rid of people like that... you tend to do much better in the hotel business. No wonder I didn't know how to make a profit with the lots-of-rent-free-people-beating-others-up model of business! I much prefer the actually-pay-for-room business. Except when I hate it and break down crying and decide that life sucks, but that's usually because I've been working way too hard and haven't slept.

Thanks for the pep-talk!
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [31 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Next Season, on the Child of Balime..." from (Past Donor)hellmouthprincess
Damn. I have purposelessly been putting off reading this for ages because I knew what would happen; I'd end up getting hooked and having to read it all in one setting. It's 1:30am and I have work in the morning-but I finished it all. And loved it, I especially loved the symmetry between the two totally different stories. Was slightly devastated though when I suddenly remembered around chapter 60 that Seo's whole world wasn't gonna make it!
Comments from author:
Wow. I'm impressed. Thanks for being such a dedicated reader!

I'm glad you liked the symmetry. I've gotten mixed responses to that, so it's interesting to hear another opinion. Perhaps I'll do more things like this, later.

(A lot of the symmetry was for plot pacing reasons. I had 2 stories I was writing independently that had similar problems, in opposite spots. Seo's Story didn't work because it was too scattered at the beginning, but once you got to the end, with Glory and the Key, the plot was very focused. The Year that Never Was story didn't work because there was a very focused plot at the beginning, but the end (the Valiant) kind of dissipated. I noticed the similarities in the two different stories, punched out some of them a little more, to emphasize the similar characters, and then smashed them together. The result? A structured plot at the start and at the end, one story always leading the other forwards and giving it meaning.)

I've just realized that I've written a number of different stories where the reader knows the main character is doomed, from the moment they sit down to read, but the interesting thing is the journey and not the destination. I think that's what happened with Seo's World.

We all know that her world will die, and that Seo will be saved. But how she gets there is interesting.

(What does that say about me as a writer, I wonder?)

Thanks again for the review! Hope you continue to read on in the series, and continue to enjoy!
Review By [(Past Donor)hellmouthprincess] • Date [3 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Next Season, on the Child of Balime..." from Mcspender
So, Seo's does have some sort of amnesia, but still have the PSTD of the year... daamn, poor girl
=(. Sounds a lot like Bourne and his condition.

Veery nice previews, I really want to read the one with Dawn making that mistake xD!.
Thank you for this fic, see ya in the next one =)!!.
Comments from author:
You're welcome!

Read on and see!
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [12 Sep 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixty Nine" from wswords
Probably should have reviewed this sooner, but I started reading this on my phone and never bothered to log in to post this.

Anyway really like this story, it is one of your better ones, although I think the Seo's World is significantly worse (less engaging at least) than Martha's World, especially before Dracula is defeated. Wish I could explain why, my best guess is seeing the world after it is already destroyed is just unique enough to be more interesting, to me at least.

It is also terrible that since you wrote a lot of little stories instead of a few big ones that you don't get the recognition you deserve (one of the best stories on this site and only 120 reviews, well 121 now). I really think it is an artifact of you finishing stories (one of the dumber qualities of fan fiction).
Comments from author:
I agree, Seo's world is not as gripping as Martha's. But the two worlds really need each other, in this story, and I know that from bitter experience.

I started writing Seo's World immediately after Happy Endings. I called the story "Second Dawn", and thought it would stand alone.

Half way through, I stopped writing and scrapped the story.

It didn't work at all! The beginning plot line was sparse, in stark contrast to the end, which was more structured. The characters were funny and the thing was well written, but it just didn't feel like high enough stakes! Not until the end!

So I wrote some other things. And then I sat down to write my summary of my Year that Never Was story (turned into Martha's story).

That one never even made it out of the "outline" stage.

It was far too dark and depressing, and I'd done that with Bringer of Death and hadn't liked it. Plus, while the beginning had a beautifully structured plotline, that all died away by the end, which seemed like me just being heartlessly cruel to my characters with no good reason. It felt like there was something huge missing.

I played around with putting in some flashbacks to Seo's childhood, growing up in the Axis, but soon scrapped that idea. Didn't help, or even seem that interesting. What I really needed was another plot line going on at the same time, that would compliment Martha's World and also lighten the mood!

Thus... the Years that Never Were.

Where one plot is unstructured, the other is structured. Where one is light, the other is dark. I'll grant you that when you're reading through it, it does feel like the Seo's World parts are less engaging. But if you didn't have them there at all, the Martha's World parts just don't work. They don't feel engaging. They feel annoying.

Yeah, I think you're right about the reviews -- I've been told that before. I'm not sure why that's the case, but it does seem to be true. Maybe people review to persuade the author to write more? I dunno.

Also, at this point, I'm dealing with so many original characters, that I don't get as many readers. So not as many reviews. A lot of the steadfast reviewers from Adventures of a Line Hopper stopped reading when I started this series.

I'd like to think the other reason is that I write some really wow stories, so the merely "pretty good" ones don't get as many reviews. My readers expect more from me. (Don't know if that's true, but I like to think it.)

Personally, I thought this story was pretty good. Not my best, but pretty powerful at the end. I still think it's too long, and that's after I hacked off about a quarter of it. But it's still a good story.

Wait until you hit the "London, 1860" part of "Trials" (next story posted). Dear God, that's a wonderful story!
Review By [wswords] • Date [11 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixty Nine" from (Current Donor)Shieldage
Good life for Dawn. Whoa, missed chapter 67 and the paradox machine activating completely. Oh, the regeneration stopper is a chemical? Nice touch having the TARDIS override dracula's thrall. Does tie up everything nearly with the embarrassment making one promise to one alternate buffy rather than a multitude. So the paradox machine could have worked given a proper charge and time to deploy it? Not exactly something easy to destroy lodged between dimensions, which points out the hubris of the master making it an easily accessible part of the ship and not, say, burying it in concrete.

Nice way of eliminating broken Seo from the final timeline, except for what information and caring she passed on.
Comments from author:
Yeah, you'd think the Master would have thought about the whole "someone might destroy the paradox machine" thing, huh?

Don't speak before you read the last chapter. Remember, from the beginning of the story, that Seo does break down crying the moment she sees her Mom.
Review By [(Current Donor)Shieldage] • Date [11 Sep 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixty Nine" from Letomo
Ooh, nice little chapter, showing what's happening on the earth, while all the heavy drama is going on in the sky.
Comments from author:
Why thank you! I think I'm getting better at that technique where you tell a story by switching between different storytellers, showing little bits in the middle. I'll keep working on it -- it's a cool technique, used all the time in movies and on TV, and I think I can make it work in print!
Review By [Letomo] • Date [11 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixty Nine" from Mcspender
So that's how Seo's dad found her, at least he did good on his promise to take care of Seo =).
Smart thing what Dawn's doing, very smart, and well Martha is getting one step closer to her goal =).

I really wanna see what do you got planned for the future of the series, specially when Seo's gonna know good ole Bilis.

Cool chapter, see ya!!!.
Comments from author:
She'll meet him 14 stories from now.

Yeah, I think the Embarrassment is really sweet in this story! I mean, the Doctor *totally* screwed up his goodbye to Buffy, making her think he was abandoning her just when she needed him most, even though he was actually sacrificing his life to save her and Seo. And Buffy had no way of finding out that the Doctor was actually doing the right thing for them, because the Doctor died!

But then the Embarrassment comes in and fixes the Doctor's mistake. Tells Buffy what should have been said, during the goodbye, if the Doctor had been better at domestics.

It's so nice of him!

And then he saves Seo, which is even nicer!

I love that bit about Dawn. You know (insider scoop), originally, I was going to have that be a regenerated version of Seo wandering around helping children. In fact, the reason I made sure Seo regained her regenerations in "Happy Endings" was specifically to make sure that she could regenerate in "the Years that Never Were." But when I was writing it, I suddenly thought... why not make it Dawn, instead?

And it worked so much better with Dawn!

So there's your inside scoop. Keep reading for more info on the future of the series. And Season 3... Seo gets to meet Jenny!
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [10 Sep 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixty Eight" from (Current Donor)Shieldage
So Jack doesn't jump at this point, because he wants to stay on board and help Martha and the Doctor?
Comments from author:
Jack knows that if he doesn't stay, the Master will take out *all* his frustrations on the Doctor, instead of dividing them between the Doctor and Jack. Hence, Jack has to stay.
Review By [(Current Donor)Shieldage] • Date [9 Sep 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixty Eight" from Mcspender
Better to die on your feet than to live on your knees - Emiliano Zapata.
You did good Seo, you did good. And once again, that ponce who calls himself Master, learns that sometimes, some people thinks that's better to die free.
Cool chapter, see ya!!.
Comments from author:
Sineya said to this version of Buffy that she'd teach Seo to be good through her example and her gift -- which was death (jumping into the portal). In the end, Buffy did exactly that.

Seo learned from her Mom. When all she has left is her own life, she gives it, and with love.

Of course, the Master is judging Seo by his own standards for himself. She assumes she is "pretending to be dead" and "has some plan" to come back to life... because *he* has exactly that tucked away in the works! He figures her suicide has to just be rubbing her victory in his face because that's how *he* sees his own death in the Doctor's arms, at the end of Last of the Time Lords.

Basically, the Master assumes Seo is like him. Or, at the very least, like the Doctor, who'd only jump like that if he had some trick up his sleeve.

But just how much is she like that? And how much is she like her Mom, who'd throw herself into a portal with no plan or trick, just to save the universe without sacrificing someone she loved?

Did Seo regenerate and swim to shore? Or is the Doctor right, and Seo is actually dead? And does the Doctor really know, or is he just trying to lead the Master away from looking for Seo's body, so she can escape?

You'll find out these answers in the next two chapters.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [9 Sep 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixty Seven" from Cutiepie
Just out of curiosity, was the Doctor not able to regenerate there at the end (probably related to his paradox machine exploding pretty much in his face), or did he regenerate and die again and again to use up all 13 of his lives? Otherwise, if he could/did regenerate, it seems like the entity *ought* to have been able to "rescue" him and return him to his family for the ending of their universe.

Poor Seo. I can see how she would think that this entire mess is her fault, even though it really isn't. And there isn't anything that would convince her that she was innocent in it either. =[
Comments from author:
Yeah, the first one -- Doctor not able to regenerate. If the entity wasn't around, the machine would have just exploded and the Doctor would have died right away. But the entity is, as he mentioned he does in Your Nature, cheating with time a little to give the Doctor an explanation and an apology.

You'll get to see the entity saving Seo in the next section.

Very much poor Seo. Especially since she had Twilight in her head, throwing the blame and guilt back in her face so it could convince her to kill herself. And it doesn't help that Seo was raised to look up to the Doctor and Buffy as role models, and then realized she was the one who "caused their deaths", so to speak.

You can see why the post-watching-this-timeline freakout was the closest (according to Twilight) that he ever got to making Seo actually going through with it.
Review By [Cutiepie] • Date [9 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixty Seven" from Mcspender
And the final curtain is near, I wanna see how the entity saves Seo, at least, there will some sort of closure.

Cool chapter, see ya!.
Comments from author:
You saw it in Happy Endings from Seo's point of view -- her first memory -- but you'll get to see it, again, in this story. From the entity's point of view.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [9 Sep 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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